Rainbow tries to commit suicide after the Wonderbolt tryouts. After the failed attempt, Applejack takes a look into her past about Rainbow's issues with clinical depression
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Eagerelo
some kid who writes about ponies
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Oh boy another cliche appledash fanfic where Dash gets hurt somehow and Applejack is there to save her wow i never seen a fanfic with that plotline before.
look this is pretty well written i liked it just its been done before not that its a bad thing since everything has been done before. so keep up the good work i like to see more from you.
The plot seems interesting, but your synopsis makes me rather wary.
You say "Wonderbolr", I say "Did you even check what you wrote?"
I may or may not give this a read later, but I strongly encourage you to double check your stuff for mistakes.
Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder.
Believe me, that's only one of the things wrong here. I won't even start on the painfully cliché plot.
This is a good story, but... frankly, you need an editor. I wanted to get drawn into the plot, but the grammar kept pulling me out. Well hay, I'll even do it for you if you would like. Again, though, the story is great.
Its 4 in the moring I loved it and I will give you a big fat comment later
1865555 thanks everyone for reading my fic it means a lot to me and the criticism. yeah I need to get back and edit the grammar, I will start posting more stories soon. /D
It made me sad
, but it was still well done. I just wish it had maybe been separated into different chapters, so it would have been a little easier to find where I was when I had to leave in the middle. though it was not the best story I have read, it was better than some of them.
um grammar seriously, other than that great.
Ok here we go big fat comment time.....
1. This is the kind of story my sadistic mind craves I loved it keep it up.
2 I did see a lot of grammar mistakes but I'll let somepony else point those out.
3. This is what really got me... The whole scene with Applebloom falling and Rainbow dash saving her. I thought she could fly for years yet she was doing rainbooms. The whole scene is just very confusing to me please explain it to me.
4. I wasn't expecting it to end the way it did. It surprised me and I love the sad
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5. So considering the Grammar, the originality of the story (to me), The really confusing Appleboom scene, the way you ended the story and mostly my sadisticness I enjoyed this story I give you 4 out of 5 mustaches
And a brohoof /)
1871714 let me start by saying thank you so much for taking your time to read my fic, it does mean a lot me. secondly i am sorry about the grammar i will fix this as soon as i get the chance, about that seen with applebloom, rainbow did have issues flying after the incident. but she used what strength she had to pull off one last rainboom. after that her wings should have been torn to pieces. i hope this helps with your question and if i doesnt feel free to let me know. as for more fanfics i will make more but the next story is more adventurous rather than sad. I do like sad fics, i am sure ill get another one out pretty soon. (\
Ok that clears it up a lot. One more question it says "bloody cyan chest" how was it bloodied?
The bloody cyan chest was the result of dash hitting the floor so harshly.
1873215 I am truly sorry about that extra part. that was I big derp of mine and some of those sentences should not have been there. I tried fixing what ever I saw but I tend to miss many grammar mistakes. thanks again for looking at this fic and changes have been made. Let me know if there needs to be a different ending
Wow.. Great Story
.. But... so damn sad 
..
2266931 thank you so much for reading it.
What the hay pinkie