One week after her horrifying trip to Everfree, Applebloom attempts to find out the truth behind the creatures in Sunny Town. Twilight Sparkle, of course, has a book about it, but is Applebloom ready for the truth?
Originally was going to be a series where the Crusaders break Sunny Town's curse and get their cutie marks in the process, but I couldn't get any farther than this.
Please rip this apart, as this is my first fanfiction ever and I welcome the comments.
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Characters... you need to stay in character.
What do you mean by staying in character? Are the characters not sounding like they do on the show or what?123086
This is great! Why did you stop it?
I couldn't get anything else down that I liked and was plausible.
If you have ideas on how to finish it, let me know and I will write it and give you credit.123217
Celestia and Luna cursing the entire town--- including all the town's children and the innocent mother who lost her foal--- is seriously out of character.
123530 Yeah, I will be the first to admit that. I just couldn't think of anyone who would curse the town. Discord wouldn't care about justice and I didn't want to introduce a new character to this. I reasoned it in my head that they were so furious that they did something out-of-character in their anger and, when their anger subsided, forgot to lift the curse.
Still, very out of character. And it sort of puts a big ol' story-stopper plothole in things--- "so they wrote a letter to Celestia. The end."
You know, that kind of plot pops up here and there, and if you think about it, it's kind of stupid. Instead of just killing the villain, some bunch of ancient magicians or greek gods cast a curse on them that.... turns them into a horrible rampaging monster? "So in order to punish them, you made them inhumanly strong, gave them horrible unnatural powers, and made them IMMORTAL. Yeah, that'll learn em....."
I mean, I'm sure it sucks to be a Mummy or a Medusa or vampire or a werewolf--- or a Zompony--- but it sucks a whole lot harder for any innocents who stumble into their path....
One possibility for it. Celestia and Luna might have done the curse when they were little fillies. It's the sort of childish irrational thing one could expect of a very young and very inexperienced child with frightening levels of power and poor impulse control. And the sort of thing they would repress in their memory as they got older....
124395 Good point! I like this idea so much!
This gives me more ideas to continue
I stopped because I couldn't find any way to ask about the curse where Celestia could "wave her magic little horn and make everything alright"
Cursing as fillies and forgetting sounds so plusible. YAY to you RealityCheck!!!!
I will be continuing this as I get time.
It might be more interesting still if it turns out that Celestia/Luna CAN'T simply "wave their horn and make everything all right." After all, if the curse was a screwup on their part, they're not liable to have done it properly---maybe not even consciously.... and it's always easier to break things than to fix them.
In fairy tales, the nature of the curse is always that undoing is an arduous task, and often has to do with what the curse was all about, why it was cast...
A typical obstacle is that the victim cannot tell anyone the nature of the curse or directly tell them how to break it.... sometimes the victim must somehow convince the hero to do something contrary to their natures. Another is that the curse-breaker must somehow right the wrong that caused the curse to be cast in the first place. Another still is that the curse-breaker must complete a certain number of perilous or difficult or outright paradoxical tasks at the caster's behest.