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The Descendant

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Equestria has fallen, and life for the ponies and those who they had protected becomes one of hardship as the land loses its magic.

Yet, there are rumors of a vicious pirate, the Purple Mare, and all she is doing to liberate the land. Outside the city of Port-au-Prance that mare, Twilight, waits as a familiar ship approaches...

Inspired by an image by KNA.

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Chapters (4)
Comments ( 74 )

ooh! i remember this one! Loved it!

Wow, I stumbled across this completely by accident, but I'm glad I did! Wonderful job.

Sorry it took me so long to reply! I'm very glad you found it, too!:twilightsmile:


I have to admit that my reaction to the "it was all a vision" part was, shamefully, the same as every time a story I like ends with "and then they woke up". In other words, a fair bit of swearing. I mellowed out by the end though and thoroughly enjoyed it. A good bit of story telling. Thumb up and all that jazz.

I'm glad that the ending didn't destroy it for you, as that seems to be a major complaint about the story. In the end I couldn't picture leaving them in that dystopia. I'm very glad you enjoyed the rest of the story, and thanks for reading and commenting!:twilightsheepish:

A marvelous story and ending...of a breed I would love to see more of... maybe Equestria in an alternate universe much like the ocean world of Legend of Zelda's Wind Waker?

Oh I must think on this...

Congratulations on an incredible, and indeed inspiring, piece of fanfiction. I loved it.

Thank you so much! I'm very glad that you liked the ending, as that was the hardest part to try to justify. I'm very glad that you found it such a satisfying read!:twilightsmile:

I'm not new to the concept of stories written entirely as an exercise in future sight, so this was cake to digest. And you are welcome. I just have a hankering for reading sometimes, and I can read fast. Your story stood out, and so I read it. Simple. I was pleasantly surprised.

Remember when i read it back on DA; loved every second of it :pinkiehappy:

I'm very glad you did! Thanks for taking the time to comment!:twilightsmile:


your works deserve more comments :pinkiesmile:

The ending was a little bit "off" for me. (Disapointing would be a strong word.) But I need to admit actually more beliveable. (I don't want to go into datils awoiding spoilers.) Over all it's deserv a thumb up and a fav.

I'm very glad that you enjoyed it, even the end. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.:twilightsmile:

Princess Celestia's Revenge. So Twilight is the Equestrain Edward Teach. (Black Beard for those who don't know his real name)

Ding, ding, ding! In the year since this story was first released, you're the first person to see the comparison to Blackbeard and the Queen Anne's Revenge!:twilightsmile:

+5,000 points!:pinkiehappy:

... No comments?
So all the other bearers... are they dead?

... Ow... just... ow...
The pain...

I wouldn't mind seeing more of how the AU would turn out, but at the same time. I love how it wasn't real, that it was all a vision!

I left the fates of Pinkie and Fluttershy up in the air. Rarity's is explained enough, and we see what happens to A.J., and Dash's is pretty obvious. I didn't want to dwell on things that didn't immediately affect this fic, and wanted some "wiggle room" if I decided to explore this story in the future. I doubt that's gonna happen though.

I'm glad that it was such a roller-coaster ride for ya'!:twilightsmile:

Rarity is dead, unsure why. AJ is obvious... and I guess Dash is obvious as well. The other two is uncertain while Twi... we know about here.
Leaving things p in the air for 'wiggle' room' is rather smart actually.

A roller-coaster barely starts to describe it!

I LOVE THIS STORY!!:pinkiehappy:
I've read it like 10 times already (DA and here).

Here have all my staches:

Heh, I'm glad that you've found it so enjoyable! Thanks for reading and commenting!:twilightsmile:

*Reading the first 3 chapters*
Damn that's interesting! Depressing, but interesting.

*begins reading the 4 chapter*
The plot thickens! I wonder how are you going to end this? I mean, there can't be any happy ending by this point.

*finished reading*
Whew, thank goodness! You managed to make it a rather happy ending! Very clever. :twilightsmile: That must've been hard for Celestia to witness. At least, she knows that her student would survive in such a harsh world. :trollestia: All of the wins, you get them!

I'm very glad that you found the ending acceptable, as it is the most controversial part of this story. I'm glad that you were able to find some reason in it. As always, I appreciate you reading and leaving a comment!:twilightsheepish:

I'm sad that this story is dead... it was so unique...

Who knows, maybe someday Celestia will have reasons to stand over the Pool of Ends once more... :raritywink:...

That was quite a ride! The tale having been a vision was a twist I hadn't expected, but was a relief. And my brave, brave Applejack... ((sniff))

Indeed, I kinda had to make it end this way, as I couldn't leave them to such a fate. I'm glad you found it such a great ride!:twilightsmile:

Great story! :moustache:

Author Interviewer

It hasn't quite got the same ring as Queen Anne's Revenge, but you can't ask for a better pirate ship name.

I'm slightly miffed that you pulled the rug out from the ending like that, but this is an awful lot of fun regardless.

Yeah, that ending has been controversial ever since I wrote it. I just couldn't justify leaving them in that reality, not if I didn't care about exploring this theme any more. I'm glad you found it fun!:twilightsmile:

Author Interviewer

I'd have been happy if you had! :V You gotta own those baby-killing ideas!

Heh, not really my style, but I'll keep it in mind.:twilightsheepish:

"I think…huh, I wonder if it had been able to last, if we hadn't lost…if the magic of Equestria could real have spread…like the donkeys, the perytons, the bison…how we were all coming together…being friends with everyone…"

That "real" seems awkward to me. Could just be me though.

"A world where every critter and everypony are friends? Do, do ya' think such a thing were' really possible?" asked Applebloom, her voice going quieter as she asked, as though the optimism itself was a limited commodity, a rationed indulgence.

Not sure if the ' after were was intentional.

Interesting premise of a story you have here TD. I like how you have the perytons in this. Reminds me of that one scene in So Being What We Sow When We Sew; of which I have no doubt was done on purpose.

I normally would have written a comment per chapter but since I am just finishing up work for the day, I didn't get the chance.

You have me curious as to what could have been powerful enough to "kill" Celestia and Luna though something tells me it has to do with witches.

Yeah, this one was a little rough around the edges, so what you are seeing are genuine errors. Thanks for pointing them out, as always, Redz.

I didn't want to go too far into those types of details, as the whole point of the story was to let Tia see what life would be like if she was weak... something canon has already done (Stupid Chrysalis!), so I didn't see the need for it.

Thanks for reading, as always. You're such a big help to me when you do!:twilightsmile:

Twilight closed her eyes, pictured Applejack and her ponies making their way from the harborfront to the fortress gates.

She still has eyelids on the damaged eye?

I agree with Fury of the Tempest, Poor AJ. Then again, she knew what this mission of hers was and what the outcome was probably going to be.

Those silly Mah'Qua sure don't know what hit them (or about to hit them).

"He," began Golden Spell, "the one who was most likely their captain, asked to surrender it to you…I told him you was' hurt, so…so he asked me to bring it to you…before he died."

Not sure if it is apart of Golden Spell's dialect but you had a ' after was there.

Even if this was a bit on the dark side of things as far as your fics go, I still really enjoyed this story. Well done TD! I am glad to finally getting around to reading this.

I assumed that this was just a glimpse of what may come should Celestia fail prior to reading that part of the story. It reminds me of "The Mirror of Galadriel" from Tolkien's The Lord of the Rings.

Yeah, I know that's a little weird. She still has the lid, just the destroyed eye beneath it. It's one of those things I didn't want to get too into. Yeah, that apostrophe should disappear.

I'm glad you could see the High Fantasy in this, Redz. I'm glad you got a chance to read it.:twilightsmile:

I'll admit that I was quite apprehensive that such a broad, powerful story would have so few words left after finishing chapter three. While I'd have preferred you continuing the world you created as opposed to it being a vision for Celestia, I can't say that the story is any worse for ending this way. Suffice to say, I'm quite content with the ending.

Yet another one of your stories added to my favorites. Well done, TD.

I can understand that. If I had any interest in continuing to write for this reality, I would have left it open, but I was "done" as it were. I'm glad that you enjoyed it, Sy!:twilightsmile:

good question! what the hay people! although im fairly sure its because they are frantically hitting the next page button!

and another awesome story. was sobbing a bit there in places. Applejacks last stand got to me as well as spike shielding twilight. You have a very powerful writing style, for lack of a better term. Still looking for a story of yours I don't like.

I'm glad that I could write some powerful scenes for ya! I'm sure you'll find one ya don't like eventually!:twilightsheepish:

What an emotional roller coaster. :twilightoops: First AJ's and Twi's reunion, then Apple Blooms knock out setting the stage for AJ's assault of the fortress. The temporary victory directly following in the defeat and death of AJ and Mac . The heartbreaking climax with Spike protecting Twi brought me to a full stop, rechecking the tags of the story. But that final scene between the two. :raritycry: The polar opposite was:

"Aaarrgghhh! That scurvy dog!" she said in a rumbling voice, "We'll make the bilge rat walk the plank!" :rainbowlaugh:

Thank you! Thank you for this mind-blowing good story. :twilightsmile:

This is one story that is difficult for me in that it has the "Dallas Ending" and the context being out of sync with the rest of my stories. I'm glad that wasn't an issue for you, and that you enjoyed it!:twilightsmile:

I have to admit, I'm disappointed by the ending. The rest of the story, while sad, presented a very interesting alternate universe that I would have liked to see explored further. Still, an excellent read, all around!

AJ and Mac...:raritycry:
Rar! Rar! Trolestia strikes back.:trollestia:

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