A crash lands Spitfire, captain of the Wonderbolts, in hospital and unable to perform for the next show. Rainbow Dash has been asked to take her place, a mission she accepts. But, not everything is as angelic as it seems when Rainbow is asked to keep her position a secret, and much less when she learns more about the Wonderbolts history...
Well, it's good.... sort of. You're description is riddled with errors, and that alone is enough to earn you like 6 insta down-votes. Generally, you write fairly, but you need a lot of work with grammar and word choice. Punctuation is a huge issue too; there are fragments and splices everywhere. If you had gotten a fair editor before you had submitted this, it would have turned out a lot better. I am giving you a thumb up to compensate for the dislikes you will get, because you will get dislikes.
Good but as Sorren said, it needs work.
Other than that- I like the story! have a moustache for your effort! :D :P
Great. Five mustaches for you.
You're right, your writing is an awful lot better now!
I wish I could have edited this one for you, but as I said my internet has been down for about a month now XD
Actually, I can still do this for you, if you want. I wont need to do as much with this as I did with the original ones.
holy sht what the buck happened to spitfire? was she sobbotaged somehow?
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Thanks! It would be great if you edit it... I always loose all my marks from grammar...
more please?
more more more
You misspelled when. But great story! Is fleetfoot and soarin have a connection or relationship with each other? Just want to know.
2732713 I have yet to proof-read it. As for your question... It'll get complicated, and there will be shipping in this story. Quite a bit of it, too.
Okie dokie lokie
any spitfire shippings in here?