Believing that the essence of Harmony is threatened, Twilight plans to remedy that through a form of extraction. As her ambitions manifest, Twilight struggles through an internal war between her harmonious plan and the consequences of her acts.
THE END... of the Extraction story arc. I was originally thinking about having the story arcs be separate stories, but then I decided just to make the whole thing one big story so that it's all connected.
Whew, FINALLY I got this chapter out! I apologize that it took so long, and posted it within less than 10 hours before the Season 4 premiere, but I just wanted it to be perfect when I did post it, especially with Twilight's "Empress of Harmony" transformation sequence, with all its Mind Rape and Body Horror and all that, especially how Twilight got torture inflicted on herself for once.
Oh, and "the brony gamer" deserves credit for, "I journey into the unknown every day. It's called tomorrow"—I loked that wording so much on a forum post he did I couldn't help but use it.
So, next story arc will start soon, which means I intend chapters to come out sooner. So here's some things to expect:
1. Will more characters be involved? Yes. 2. Have we seen the end of torments? Nope. 3. Will we see what Twilight's reign is like and how she interacts with her "students"? You bet your biscuits! 4. Will we see more of the spirit ponies and Twilight's conscience? Absolutely. 5. Will Twilight's conscience get a name? Eventually. 6. Can you tell us what it is? Not yet, you can guess your own though!
So, the Extraction Arc ends and the Cleansing Arc begins, so feel free to go nuts wuth the TV Tropes addings and Wild Mass Guessings! And for those of you who wanted to do readings but wanted to wait til the fic was over, you can just do the Extraction Arc if you wish.
As another note, if anypony feels like making a different better cover art, please feel free to do so, I'm not sure if my own long-held one does the fic's message justice.
3526762 Aww, thanks! It was fully my intention to basically have Twilight having that whole conflict going on, being like an epitome of evil and yet believing it to be good. Don't plan to stop it here, don't you worry. 3526865 *in Light Yagami voice* Just as planned.. 3527055 Depends which pony's point of view you see from and side with. 3527316 That is indeed an appropriate reaction to an insane character suffering a painful transformation and turning into an immensely powerful magic-and-science empress. 3527332 Hey, considering Diamond Tiara in canon has been shown to not really care about the feelings of others (namely in Ponyville Confidential), she likes to be on top, and the only time she's been something close to afraid is when Babs threatened to tell her parents about her and Silver Spoon being bullies, I figured that if any pony tried to stand up to Twilight at this point, why not have it be her?
ALL HAIL EMPRESS TWILIGHT! MAY SHE FREE US FROM CELESTIA'S DISHARMONIOUS RULE, AND BRING ORDER TO THIS CHAOTIC LAND! I'll let you guess who I decided to side with.
All in all, a brilliant chapter. Twilight's trickery and ascension were great, and the broken elements seem to be getting close to breaking free, although I wonder if it's still possible for them (or anypony else) to stop Twilight. Also, the conscience is getting a name? Sweet! I look forward to the cleansing arc, where our glorious leader will free Equestria from chaos.
I've been following this story for a long time.....and to be honest......this is beyond brilliant. Don't you dare stop, or I will hunt you and tie you to your computer.
3527427 Oh yet me guess, you're on Celestia's side! (just kidding of course—Empress Twilight would be pleased). Glad you liked reading about Twilight's ascension, I really wanted to make sure it was good before I posted it. 3527500 I don't intend to stop it, that's for sure, especially not now... stuff just got real. And don't forget, Twilight intends to go far beyond her puny little planet. 3527505 Aw, thanks, I'm flattered!
3527552 The fact that she basically became an insane god (I have a love for insane gods), combined with the fact that another story on this sight has made me want Celestia to suffer made it an easy decision. Also, you definitely succeed with making the ascension good.
3527698 BronyWriter's KillerRarityverse, starting with The Secret Life of Rarity, although primarily the Word is Fear (alternate ending side story to the third story in the main trilogy). I wont go into detail as to why, because spoilers, but by the end of it Celestia wasn't exactly my favorite pony. If you haven't read it, I would definitely recommend it. It's an amazing story, and one of the best fic's I've read on this site. (As is this one.)
Seriously, you should stop writing this and go and read it now.
I'm smiling. Why the heck am I smiling? Have you cursed me, Twilight, into enjoying and believing your completely insane beliefs? Or was it you, Ms. Shadowed Rainbow, with your neigh-flawless writing and ability to tell a story, no matter how dark it is?
Drama is fun. Well, the good kind of drama anyways. And yes, I'm trying to get the reading done ASAP. I've taken up a little more than I can handle right now. I'm sure you know how that is. Coupled with my perfectionist mentality... Yeah, that makes it a little hard to finish anything. 3 stories, 2 original, 1 re-write for a friend, 1 PMV, and now 1 piece of cover art for a gore story. I really, really need to not get so much at once. Having school doesn't help either.
Sorry, spouting problems that no one really cares about. My fault for having them.
Now, for actual story related things: Alicorn Twilight. Why was I able to see that coming? Probably because of S4. And it made sense. And you said there would be more characters... I wonder how Discord would react, seeing Twilight this way. All in all, a great story.
One last thing.... You hurt Derpy. Well, it seemed like. Perhaps, if you leave her in the "saveable" group of Twilight's reign, I'll be satisfied.
Keep writing!
...That's kind of a stupid thing to say, isn't it? That is the plan after all.
3527724 Oh, I've heard of that one! 3527884 Perhaps it's both my writing and Twilight influencing you from a parallel universe?
Haha, it's okay, take your time on the reading! Time may wait for no human or pony, but other things can. I honestly xan't wait how you portray Twilight's craziness and Rainbow's anger. And when you say "and now 1 piece of cover art for a gore story", do you mean drawing a new cover art and using it for the reading? If not, I want to see the cover art for the gore story anyway, I'm all for drawings!
As for Alicorn Twilight, I wanted her to have some sort of transformation that elevated to a sort of god-like entity of opposing extremes, so I though giving her ethereal wings like that would be cool, in addition to her color changes—plus, it seemed reasonable considering things.
And even if I didn't hurt Derpy physically, I sure did emotionally.
3527958 Yes, the art is for Pages of Harmony. I'm not much of an artist (or an animator for that matter), but I have some friends who can help me out.
Ok, that gave me an idea that makes me worried about my psyche. I just thought, "Why not animate PoH?" Jeeze... And I'm a Blender worker too... It'd be in 3D. Stop it head, I don't like your thoughts.
Plus, animation takes a long time. Have you watched/listened to SlyphStorm's Pegasus Device? That's what I'm making the PMV for.
3527958 Have you read it yet? Because you should read it. It's very good. Amazingly fantastically brilliantly good. You should go read it. Right now. Just drop whatever your doing and read it. (In case you haven't guessed, I really like this story, and I think you should read it.)
3527969 I don't know about you, but I like your head's thoughts! PoH being animated?! That would be SO awesome! *squees* Haha, I am aware that animation does take a long time though, and while I haven't listened/ssen Pegasus Device, it sounds like it relates to Rainbow Factory, which is one of my favorite fics/ songs in the fandom! 3527997 Well, I'm a little busy tofay, but soon enough, I shall! 3528109 Yeah, she really is like Light, isn't she? All that's missing is her saying "I am Kira", though in a way she did do that with the whole "I am Harmony Incarnate" thing.
3528245 It is. It was made as the song for the official sequel. Slyphstorm, the guy who made it, is a Blender animator, and a good friend of mine irl. He's helping me out with the animation. Perhaps, when we're finished, I can take up this project.
Look at me. Already I'm giving myself more. Stop it self.
3528284 AWESOME! Being a huge Rainbow Factory fan (though I haven't read Pegasus Device yet), I can't wait for that animation, regardless if you do make a PoH aniation or not afterward (if you did though that would be the most EPIC thing ever... I wonder what parts you'd animate anyway...) 3528286 My reaction exactly! I guess I was halfway channeling Light there with that line, considering how since someone pointed out the similarities I've become a huge fan of Death Note. Also... Twilight: I will become the god of this new world! 3528300 I remember hearing a bit about the project, but just a name mention.... but now I REALLY want to follow that project, I ADORE Rainbow Factory! 3528363 Thanks for catching that error—there always seems to be at least one mistake some chapter or other.
This was honestly a bit hard reading after watching the Season 4 Premier episodes, but still I am finally glad I can read this. I've been dying to see what would happen next.
3528412 If you manage to get our glorious ruler Empress Twilight to say on of Light's lines in this fic, you will become one of my favorite people, and may even consider doing some bad fan art or something. Especially if it's the potato chip line. Surely you can't resist an offer like that!
...I'm going to have to re-watch/read Death Note to be able to notice if you do, aren't I? Oh well, there are many worse things I could be doing with my time.
3528412 I'd probably animate the worst parts. Because, you know, why not? Course, that means no YouTube... But that's a while away, so I'm not going to worry about it too much.
3528591 I guess because it had to do with the Elements of Harmony, huh? 3528603 Fan art FTW! I may include a line of Light's later, or at the very least an allusion to it—I've only seen a lot of episodes of Death Note and haven't read the manga yet. 3528962 Why no YouTube? Just curious. Anyway, can't wait for the reading and the Pegasus Device animation! 3529861 Wow, that pic is similar to Twilight's transformation, and I never even saw that picture before!
I saw this coming, but I still wasn't prepared for it. Good job on this. This is officially on the list of stories that absolutely need to be finished, but don't rush it. Perfection can't be rushed.
The atmosphere was great, and I wonder how you're going to finish it. Either with Twilight being curb-stomped by Celestia and Luna, or with a disillusioned god controlling a sizable chunk of the Universe.
3530173 I've watched Cupcakes HD. Really didn't do much for me. Though I played it at school once... That was the funniest thing I'd seen in a long time. Couldn't stop laughing for hours.
No, I'm referencing the fact that I once found an animation of SAM on YouTube. Didn't watch it of course, but I found it. Not even 2 hours after it's upload, it was taken down. Though I guess the CMC's rape could have had something to do with it. Though surely they didn't animate that. Doesn't matter. Maybe I can do it then.
3530009 I may end up drawing the fan art anyway, as I've started thinking about it now. However, the emphasis really is on bad. I am not an artist, and this will be drawn on MS paint with a cursor.
As for one of Light's lines, I did start re-watching Death note. (So far I'm on episode 4.) I can't help but notice similarities between Light and the glorious Harmony Incarnate. I also saw one line at the end of the second episode that I thought could easily fit: Light/Empress Twilight: Evil? I am justice/harmony! I protect the innocent and those who fear evil!
3530129 Your right, that is what I should have done. Oh well, too late now. Maybe next time, if I remember.
3530186 Ah, so that's where that quote is from! And don't worry, I'm completely with you there on the not-rushing thing—as the toy repair guy in Toy Story 2 said, "You can't rush art!" And I do intend to have the ending be built up by a lot of action and such I can tell you that... no way will I spoil what I have planned though. 3530238 I'm pretty sure that it was the potential CMC-rape that got it taken down, I've seen gore all over the place on Youtube. Don't worry, I don't plan on having anything like that in here (that was just a shock-value thing, after all), so I think that if you do decide to do it, Youtube is fine. 3530370 Wel, sociopaths do only seem to care about themselves, after all. 3531027 Don't worry, I sympathize—almost all my dA stuff is picture/vector edits with pixlr.com, with a few exceptions. I noticed similarities between Light and Harmony!Twilight since those early episodes, and I actually have been considering using a line like those in episode 2 for a while now—it may be the 2nd episode in the series, but it's one of my favorites. 3532968 I wouldn't necessarily say she's an idiot, just deluded—she feels that because a being like Discord only caused disarray, she should counter it. Plus, in that pivotal moment in Chapter 12, she got a first-hoof look at how order and chaos work as a balance in harmony, how the traits of the Elements can be used as both virtue and vice.
Fluttershy's gaze filled with anger as she began to see ponies she believed had or would hut her.
hurt ______________
"Oh be quiet," Bon Bon snapped. "The point is, Twilight's friends seemed to be the main targets in all this. And then this happens, Fluttershy gone and Twilightbattered and beaten!"
Twilight battered _______________ OMC! This chapter is every bit as amazing as I've come to expect from this fic. I love what you've done, and yet I'm slightly sad that Twilight's consciousness is still not aligned / seeable to the spirits as well as the fact that said spirits are still trapped. Still, just wow. I eagerly await your next arc. *applause and gives congradulatory cup cake*.
3533862 Thanks for catching that, figures when you think you catch every error and then some points out you missed one or two.
Glad you really enjoyed the chapter, and don't worry, there'll be plenty of stuff with thedead ponies and Twilight's conscience—Twilight's conscience is even going to get a name.
Yay! I can't wait to see what you name good Twilight and the stuff with the dead ponies. Is Good Twi ever going to quest with the Dead Bearers? Make an Undead Mane 6?
3534205 I'll have you guess what her name is going to be. I'll be glad when I do finally bring up a name for her in the story because then she won't be just "her conscience" or "double" or "doppleganger", especially because of the fact that Empress!Twilight looks completely different from her old self.
3534298 Aw, thanks! Yeah, I included Conscience!Twilight for a reason, after all, somepony has to occassionally try to keep Twilight in check, Jimminy Cricket-style!
(No, Conscience!Twilight's name is not going to sound like Jiminy Cricket)
Awwww! And here I thought Conscious!Twilight (tm) would talk the Empress into going out with "dames", and get into under age drinking / labor rinks, or even get swallowed by a whale while trying to score a date with a magical fairy goddess. Who happens to be 1/3rd troll.
Seriously though. Good Twi must feel totally useless since she can't talk to anyone who matters, and is constantly ignored by a meglomanical, Red Maged (8 bit theater style), Evil Goddess. I feel sorry for the poor girl. Although a part of me now sees Empress off to the side, changing her stats mid battle, or ignoring damage because she forgot to write it down (after all if her horn or mouth was damaged how could she calculate it?). While Conscious!Twi is off to the side telling her that she doesn't get a bonus for being chaotic evil.
** Conscious!Twi: Neutral Good Empress: Chaotic Evil
Rarity: True Neutral Dash: Chaotic Neutral Pinkie Pie: Neutral Good Apple Jack: Is hard to place. I'd say she's True Neutral, but that's a tricky one. She's not violent, nasty, or cruel. But is unable to tell the truth if it's not a statement or a question. Fluttershy: Chaotic Neutral
3534561 Haha, that Pinnocchio parody would probably be how PoH would go if it were a parody thing. XD
Conscience!Twilight and Pinkie are in a similar boat when you thin about it, since both of them are largely incapable of communicating with the others around them—Pinkie can be seen by the others but is only really understood by Rainbow who harbors disdain for her, and Conscience!Twilight is both seen and capable of speaking to one pony, but only the one who she's metaphysically connected with and said pony sees her as nothing more than an annoyance. *looks up the 8-bit Theater thing* Oh, so that's who Red Mage is, a bizzare strategist who writes his own rules and sees life as a game that needs to be won... very fitting.
Yay, character alignment listings! It's kind of funny how Twilight seems to see-saw between the three levels of Evil, since she started out swinging between Lawful and Neutral... she'd hate that Chaotic distinction and be in complete denial.
3533129 The second episode is great, especially the confrontation between Light and L, through L's stand in, (who's name I'm already having trouble remembering...) as it shows the first confrontation between L and Kira, and that Light will be willing to kill anyone who gets in his way, criminal or not. 3534561 Your not alone in feeling like a nerd. Your comparison to Red Mage led me to having an internal debate as to whether or not our glorious Empress could be compared to Black Mage. I ended up coming to the conclusion that it would be a poor match because A) She's not as ruthlessly evil, and actually has a reason for her actions, and B) She's actually competent. Also, I wouldn't let her hear you calling her chaotic, if I were you. 3534665 Red Mage doesn't so much make his own rules, rather he abuses the existing rules and doesn't always follow them, and whilst he does see life as a game that needs to be won, that is actually the case for him. By the way, you should read 8-bit Theater as well as The Secret Life of Rarity.
THE END... of the Extraction story arc. I was originally thinking about having the story arcs be separate stories, but then I decided just to make the whole thing one big story so that it's all connected.
Whew, FINALLY I got this chapter out! I apologize that it took so long, and posted it within less than 10 hours before the Season 4 premiere, but I just wanted it to be perfect when I did post it, especially with Twilight's "Empress of Harmony" transformation sequence, with all its Mind Rape and Body Horror and all that, especially how Twilight got torture inflicted on herself for once.
Oh, and "the brony gamer" deserves credit for, "I journey into the unknown every day. It's called tomorrow"—I loked that wording so much on a forum post he did I couldn't help but use it.
So, next story arc will start soon, which means I intend chapters to come out sooner. So here's some things to expect:
1. Will more characters be involved? Yes.
2. Have we seen the end of torments? Nope.
3. Will we see what Twilight's reign is like and how she interacts with her "students"? You bet your biscuits!
4. Will we see more of the spirit ponies and Twilight's conscience? Absolutely.
5. Will Twilight's conscience get a name? Eventually.
6. Can you tell us what it is? Not yet, you can guess your own though!
So, the Extraction Arc ends and the Cleansing Arc begins, so feel free to go nuts wuth the TV Tropes addings and Wild Mass Guessings! And for those of you who wanted to do readings but wanted to wait til the fic was over, you can just do the Extraction Arc if you wish.
As another note, if anypony feels like making a different better cover art, please feel free to do so, I'm not sure if my own long-held one does the fic's message justice.
And for those who want a visual representation of what Twilight looks like now... have two of them!
i.imgur.com/5IOWN1r.png
i.imgur.com/tI8Ud3N.png
Beautiful.
3526675 Thanks.
I've seen many stories turn Twilight Sparkle into a murderer.
I've seen many stories turn Twilight Sparkle into a sadistic torturer.
I've seen many stories where Twilight rises against Celestia.
I've seen many stories where Twilight brainwashes ponies into serving her.
Before this, I had yet to see them all at once, with the inclusion of Twilight turning into a twisted all-powerful omnicidal visionary.
Harmony Incarnate indeed.
For the love of Empress Twilight, don't you dare stop. It's beautiful.
Man, Twilight better get fucked up someway or somehow, cuz things are lookin' bleak.
I keep reading in the hope that things will get better eventually.
Can things please get better?
.................mer gerd
Already....good
3526762 Aww, thanks! It was fully my intention to basically have Twilight having that whole conflict going on, being like an epitome of evil and yet believing it to be good. Don't plan to stop it here, don't you worry.
3526865 *in Light Yagami voice* Just as planned..
3527055 Depends which pony's point of view you see from and side with.
3527316 That is indeed an appropriate reaction to an insane character suffering a painful transformation and turning into an immensely powerful magic-and-science empress.
3527332 Hey, considering Diamond Tiara in canon has been shown to not really care about the feelings of others (namely in Ponyville Confidential), she likes to be on top, and the only time she's been something close to afraid is when Babs threatened to tell her parents about her and Silver Spoon being bullies, I figured that if any pony tried to stand up to Twilight at this point, why not have it be her?
ALL HAIL EMPRESS TWILIGHT! MAY SHE FREE US FROM CELESTIA'S DISHARMONIOUS RULE, AND BRING ORDER TO THIS CHAOTIC LAND!
I'll let you guess who I decided to side with.
All in all, a brilliant chapter. Twilight's trickery and ascension were great, and the broken elements seem to be getting close to breaking free, although I wonder if it's still possible for them (or anypony else) to stop Twilight. Also, the conscience is getting a name? Sweet! I look forward to the cleansing arc, where our glorious leader will free Equestria from chaos.
I've been following this story for a long time.....and to be honest......this is beyond brilliant. Don't you dare stop, or I will hunt you and tie you to your computer.
Hmmm... I can't wait to read about Dashie and Flutters tearing her to shredsI think it's safe to say that this is the best grim dark pony fic ever.
3527427 Oh yet me guess, you're on Celestia's side! (just kidding of course—Empress Twilight would be pleased). Glad you liked reading about Twilight's ascension, I really wanted to make sure it was good before I posted it.
3527500 I don't intend to stop it, that's for sure, especially not now... stuff just got real. And don't forget, Twilight intends to go far beyond her puny little planet.
3527505 Aw, thanks, I'm flattered!
Can't wait to see Celestia and Luna's reactions when they catch wind of this :D
I get the feeling that Discord is eventually going to come into play too... But that's just a hunch.
Either way, let the cleansing begin!
3527552
The fact that she basically became an insane god (I have a love for insane gods), combined with the fact that another story on this sight has made me want Celestia to suffer made it an easy decision. Also, you definitely succeed with making the ascension good.
3527588 They are gonna be shocked, that's for sure.
3527670 All hail the Empress! What fanfic is that involving Celestia, by the way?
3527698
BronyWriter's KillerRarityverse, starting with The Secret Life of Rarity, although primarily the Word is Fear (alternate ending side story to the third story in the main trilogy). I wont go into detail as to why, because spoilers, but by the end of it Celestia wasn't exactly my favorite pony. If you haven't read it, I would definitely recommend it. It's an amazing story, and one of the best fic's I've read on this site. (As is this one.)
Seriously, you should stop writing this and go and read it now.
I'm smiling. Why the heck am I smiling? Have you cursed me, Twilight, into enjoying and believing your completely insane beliefs? Or was it you, Ms. Shadowed Rainbow, with your neigh-flawless writing and ability to tell a story, no matter how dark it is?
Drama is fun. Well, the good kind of drama anyways. And yes, I'm trying to get the reading done ASAP. I've taken up a little more than I can handle right now. I'm sure you know how that is. Coupled with my perfectionist mentality... Yeah, that makes it a little hard to finish anything. 3 stories, 2 original, 1 re-write for a friend, 1 PMV, and now 1 piece of cover art for a gore story. I really, really need to not get so much at once. Having school doesn't help either.
Sorry, spouting problems that no one really cares about. My fault for having them.
Now, for actual story related things: Alicorn Twilight. Why was I able to see that coming? Probably because of S4. And it made sense. And you said there would be more characters... I wonder how Discord would react, seeing Twilight this way. All in all, a great story.
One last thing.... You hurt Derpy. Well, it seemed like. Perhaps, if you leave her in the "saveable" group of Twilight's reign, I'll be satisfied.
Keep writing!
...That's kind of a stupid thing to say, isn't it? That is the plan after all.
Rambling. Sorry. Finished.
3527724 Oh, I've heard of that one!
3527884 Perhaps it's both my writing and Twilight influencing you from a parallel universe?
Haha, it's okay, take your time on the reading! Time may wait for no human or pony, but other things can. I honestly xan't wait how you portray Twilight's craziness and Rainbow's anger. And when you say "and now 1 piece of cover art for a gore story", do you mean drawing a new cover art and using it for the reading? If not, I want to see the cover art for the gore story anyway, I'm all for drawings!
As for Alicorn Twilight, I wanted her to have some sort of transformation that elevated to a sort of god-like entity of opposing extremes, so I though giving her ethereal wings like that would be cool, in addition to her color changes—plus, it seemed reasonable considering things.
And even if I didn't hurt Derpy physically, I sure did emotionally.
3527958
Yes, the art is for Pages of Harmony. I'm not much of an artist (or an animator for that matter), but I have some friends who can help me out.
Ok, that gave me an idea that makes me worried about my psyche. I just thought, "Why not animate PoH?" Jeeze... And I'm a Blender worker too... It'd be in 3D. Stop it head, I don't like your thoughts.
Plus, animation takes a long time. Have you watched/listened to SlyphStorm's Pegasus Device? That's what I'm making the PMV for.
3527958
Have you read it yet? Because you should read it. It's very good. Amazingly fantastically brilliantly good. You should go read it. Right now. Just drop whatever your doing and read it.
(In case you haven't guessed, I really like this story, and I think you should read it.)
Loved it. She is so Light Yagami now.
3527969 I don't know about you, but I like your head's thoughts! PoH being animated?! That would be SO awesome! *squees* Haha, I am aware that animation does take a long time though, and while I haven't listened/ssen Pegasus Device, it sounds like it relates to Rainbow Factory, which is one of my favorite fics/ songs in the fandom!
3527997 Well, I'm a little busy tofay, but soon enough, I shall!
3528109 Yeah, she really is like Light, isn't she? All that's missing is her saying "I am Kira", though in a way she did do that with the whole "I am Harmony Incarnate" thing.
3528245 It is. It was made as the song for the official sequel. Slyphstorm, the guy who made it, is a Blender animator, and a good friend of mine irl. He's helping me out with the animation. Perhaps, when we're finished, I can take up this project.
Look at me. Already I'm giving myself more. Stop it self.
I'll look into it though.
3527969>>3528245
Pages of Harmony animated? Yes. Yes Yes YES YES!
And yes, she is Light. Also, that last line just made me think this:
Empress Twilight: I AM KIRA-, I mean, HARMONY INCARNATE!
Speaking of animation, are you watching the Rainbow Factory Movie Project?
FLITH = FILTH by the way: I love you!
3528284 AWESOME! Being a huge Rainbow Factory fan (though I haven't read Pegasus Device yet), I can't wait for that animation, regardless if you do make a PoH aniation or not afterward (if you did though that would be the most EPIC thing ever... I wonder what parts you'd animate anyway...)
3528286 My reaction exactly! I guess I was halfway channeling Light there with that line, considering how since someone pointed out the similarities I've become a huge fan of Death Note. Also...
Twilight: I will become the god of this new world!
3528300 I remember hearing a bit about the project, but just a name mention.... but now I REALLY want to follow that project, I ADORE Rainbow Factory!
3528363 Thanks for catching that error—there always seems to be at least one mistake some chapter or other.
This was honestly a bit hard reading after watching the Season 4 Premier episodes, but still I am finally glad I can read this. I've been dying to see what would happen next.
3528412
If you manage to get our glorious ruler Empress Twilight to say on of Light's lines in this fic, you will become one of my favorite people, and may even consider doing some bad fan art or something. Especially if it's the potato chip line. Surely you can't resist an offer like that!
...I'm going to have to re-watch/read Death Note to be able to notice if you do, aren't I? Oh well, there are many worse things I could be doing with my time.
3528412 I'd probably animate the worst parts. Because, you know, why not? Course, that means no YouTube... But that's a while away, so I'm not going to worry about it too much.
Twilights transformation reminds me of this pic: th00.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2012/125/9/c/dear_princess_celestia____by_aguantegrimtales-d4ync6v.png
3528591 I guess because it had to do with the Elements of Harmony, huh?
3528603 Fan art FTW! I may include a line of Light's later, or at the very least an allusion to it—I've only seen a lot of episodes of Death Note and haven't read the manga yet.
3528962 Why no YouTube? Just curious. Anyway, can't wait for the reading and the Pegasus Device animation!
3529861 Wow, that pic is similar to Twilight's transformation, and I never even saw that picture before!
3530009 YouTube isn't exactly known for its acceptance of hard-core gore. Hey, that rhymes! So I'd have to find something to do about it.
3528286 Pssh, this is how you do it! XD
3530129 Youtube not accepting of hard-core gore? ... allow me to introduce you to these:
And when I read that post I read it in that Twilight voice.
I saw this coming, but I still wasn't prepared for it. Good job on this. This is officially on the list of stories that absolutely need to be finished, but don't rush it. Perfection can't be rushed.
The atmosphere was great, and I wonder how you're going to finish it. Either with Twilight being curb-stomped by Celestia and Luna, or with a disillusioned god controlling a sizable chunk of the Universe.
Either way, I know It'll be good.
3530173 I've watched Cupcakes HD. Really didn't do much for me. Though I played it at school once... That was the funniest thing I'd seen in a long time. Couldn't stop laughing for hours.
No, I'm referencing the fact that I once found an animation of SAM on YouTube. Didn't watch it of course, but I found it. Not even 2 hours after it's upload, it was taken down. Though I guess the CMC's rape could have had something to do with it. Though surely they didn't animate that. Doesn't matter. Maybe I can do it then.
I'm going to puke. Sociopath's definitions of things a sociopath appreciation of are all shallow.
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I may end up drawing the fan art anyway, as I've started thinking about it now. However, the emphasis really is on bad. I am not an artist, and this will be drawn on MS paint with a cursor.
As for one of Light's lines, I did start re-watching Death note. (So far I'm on episode 4.) I can't help but notice similarities between Light and the glorious Harmony Incarnate. I also saw one line at the end of the second episode that I thought could easily fit:
Light/Empress Twilight: Evil? I am justice/harmony! I protect the innocent and those who fear evil!
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Your right, that is what I should have done. Oh well, too late now. Maybe next time, if I remember.
Twilight is an idiot. She's completely mistaken order for harmony and chaos for disharmony.
3530186 Ah, so that's where that quote is from! And don't worry, I'm completely with you there on the not-rushing thing—as the toy repair guy in Toy Story 2 said, "You can't rush art!" And I do intend to have the ending be built up by a lot of action and such I can tell you that... no way will I spoil what I have planned though.
3530238 I'm pretty sure that it was the potential CMC-rape that got it taken down, I've seen gore all over the place on Youtube. Don't worry, I don't plan on having anything like that in here (that was just a shock-value thing, after all), so I think that if you do decide to do it, Youtube is fine.
3530370 Wel, sociopaths do only seem to care about themselves, after all.
3531027 Don't worry, I sympathize—almost all my dA stuff is picture/vector edits with pixlr.com, with a few exceptions. I noticed similarities between Light and Harmony!Twilight since those early episodes, and I actually have been considering using a line like those in episode 2 for a while now—it may be the 2nd episode in the series, but it's one of my favorites.
3532968 I wouldn't necessarily say she's an idiot, just deluded—she feels that because a being like Discord only caused disarray, she should counter it. Plus, in that pivotal moment in Chapter 12, she got a first-hoof look at how order and chaos work as a balance in harmony, how the traits of the Elements can be used as both virtue and vice.
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OMC! This chapter is every bit as amazing as I've come to expect from this fic. I love what you've done, and yet I'm slightly sad that Twilight's consciousness is still not aligned / seeable to the spirits as well as the fact that said spirits are still trapped. Still, just wow. I eagerly await your next arc. *applause and gives congradulatory cup cake*.
3533862 Thanks for catching that, figures when you think you catch every error and then some points out you missed one or two.
Glad you really enjoyed the chapter, and don't worry, there'll be plenty of stuff with thedead ponies and Twilight's conscience—Twilight's conscience is even going to get a name.
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Yay! I can't wait to see what you name good Twilight and the stuff with the dead ponies. Is Good Twi ever going to quest with the Dead Bearers? Make an Undead Mane 6?
3534205 I'll have you guess what her name is going to be. I'll be glad when I do finally bring up a name for her in the story because then she won't be just "her conscience" or "double" or "doppleganger", especially because of the fact that Empress!Twilight looks completely different from her old self.
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You are best pony .
3534298 Aw, thanks! Yeah, I included Conscience!Twilight for a reason, after all, somepony has to occassionally try to keep Twilight in check, Jimminy Cricket-style!
(No, Conscience!Twilight's name is not going to sound like Jiminy Cricket)
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Awwww! And here I thought Conscious!Twilight (tm) would talk the Empress into going out with "dames", and get into under age drinking / labor rinks, or even get swallowed by a whale while trying to score a date with a magical fairy goddess. Who happens to be 1/3rd troll.
Seriously though. Good Twi must feel totally useless since she can't talk to anyone who matters, and is constantly ignored by a meglomanical, Red Maged (8 bit theater style), Evil Goddess. I feel sorry for the poor girl. Although a part of me now sees Empress off to the side, changing her stats mid battle, or ignoring damage because she forgot to write it down (after all if her horn or mouth was damaged how could she calculate it?). While Conscious!Twi is off to the side telling her that she doesn't get a bonus for being chaotic evil.
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Conscious!Twi: Neutral Good
Empress: Chaotic Evil
Rarity: True Neutral
Dash: Chaotic Neutral
Pinkie Pie: Neutral Good
Apple Jack: Is hard to place. I'd say she's True Neutral, but that's a tricky one. She's not violent, nasty, or cruel. But is unable to tell the truth if it's not a statement or a question.
Fluttershy: Chaotic Neutral
I feel like such a nerd atm.
3534561 Haha, that Pinnocchio parody would probably be how PoH would go if it were a parody thing. XD
Conscience!Twilight and Pinkie are in a similar boat when you thin about it, since both of them are largely incapable of communicating with the others around them—Pinkie can be seen by the others but is only really understood by Rainbow who harbors disdain for her, and Conscience!Twilight is both seen and capable of speaking to one pony, but only the one who she's metaphysically connected with and said pony sees her as nothing more than an annoyance. *looks up the 8-bit Theater thing* Oh, so that's who Red Mage is, a bizzare strategist who writes his own rules and sees life as a game that needs to be won... very fitting.
Yay, character alignment listings! It's kind of funny how Twilight seems to see-saw between the three levels of Evil, since she started out swinging between Lawful and Neutral... she'd hate that Chaotic distinction and be in complete denial.
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The second episode is great, especially the confrontation between Light and L, through L's stand in, (who's name I'm already having trouble remembering...) as it shows the first confrontation between L and Kira, and that Light will be willing to kill anyone who gets in his way, criminal or not.
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Your not alone in feeling like a nerd. Your comparison to Red Mage led me to having an internal debate as to whether or not our glorious Empress could be compared to Black Mage. I ended up coming to the conclusion that it would be a poor match because A) She's not as ruthlessly evil, and actually has a reason for her actions, and B) She's actually competent. Also, I wouldn't let her hear you calling her chaotic, if I were you.
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Red Mage doesn't so much make his own rules, rather he abuses the existing rules and doesn't always follow them, and whilst he does see life as a game that needs to be won, that is actually the case for him. By the way, you should read 8-bit Theater as well as The Secret Life of Rarity.