Believing that the essence of Harmony is threatened, Twilight plans to remedy that through a form of extraction. As her ambitions manifest, Twilight struggles through an internal war between her harmonious plan and the consequences of her acts.
Is it weird that I already knew what the antimony pentafluorine was? You can't even keep that stuff in glass containers cuz it goes through glass like water through paper. It needs to be kept in special Teflon containers. It has a PH of I think -32. It probably ate through the leg fast enough that it felt like someone cut it off with a knife. But why am I saying this, you already know it lol! Then again: since it's actually a mix of 2 acids, does that really count? You could have used carborane (ph-18) since it is the strongest non mixture acid but it's not good at dissolving stuff. YAY CHEMISTRY
1132716 Oh wow, you already knew about that? Cool! Yeah, I guess i could have used carborane, but I never ended up looking that one up so I didn't know about it.
Honestly, if it hadn't been for TV Tropes, I couldn't have known about half the chemical stuff (never heard of krokodil until I read about it on the High Octane Nightmare Fuel Real Life page on TV Tropes, for instance)
Oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo That eye extraction part won't be for a couple moar chapters then... I hope there isn't a long ass delay before the next chapter, this one was just as brutal and fucked as I wanted it to be...
1132683 I figured that C would be cringe-worthy (hey, that starts with a C too! ), so I have to say that you being unnerved by it was a fulfillment of its purpose!
And I'm glad you liked Rainbow being somewhat nice to Pinkie - just because Rainbow has no loyalty and thinks friends are a rediculous notion doesn't mean she has no capability for compassion on any level.
As for why Celestia hasn't come... well, Twilight's usually the one who notifies her about things, and at first they thought that maybe this was something that could be solved rather quickly, without bothering the Princess about it if, unless it was an immediate life-threatening thing. By the time that they all genuinely realized that there could be a severe danger, it was kind of too late. ... okay, so it was for story purposes, mainly.
1133161 My AP chem summer assignment required me to read a 700 page book on the different elements. This was mentioned in the antimony section, right after boron (which is used in carborane). Yeah the book didn't put the elements in a specific order that's why antimony was placed right after boron.
1137035 The picture isn't showing up for me, just as a blue little square with a question mark, but despite me being only able to see the text you put underneath... yes, Twilight is insane. In the words of the song "Miss Lucy Had Some Leeches"...
"Madness is a nuisance, And no one is immune, Your sister, mum or daughter Could become a raving loon!"
But yeah, Twilight's lost her marbles and had them ground into smitherines.
im gunna start suggesting some tortures as well. Its gunna be tough because twilight's kinda pressed for time here.
D: Dislocation, drowning E: electric shocks, F: Force Feeding (preferably making her eat one of the animals), Foot roasting, fire G: Glasgow Smile, Garroting H: Hamstringing, Heretic's fork, I: Intestinal crank, Iron maiden J: Judas Cradle K: kicking (all i could find) L: Ling Chi
I'm not too sure how far you plan to go next chapter but here's all i got up until L.
This is by far the best fan fiction of my little pony ever made and your best chapter yet! it only gets better from here. so awesome i cant wait to see what turmoil awaits poor fluttershy she must die!!!
1137484 I've read a lot of fanfics in my life and this one is easily the best one I've read not because of the gore and the mind-rape, but how all the ponies are in character and believable. How physical torture can break even the best of any-pony and make them become what they don't want to be, or how it can make the worst of nightmares come true. That's why its so great... I do feel bad for fluttershy, but after seeing the other ponies maimed and brutally dismantled, i think i can take it... it makes me wonder if she'll become cruel to the others in the purgatory that the others are in... Keep it up. Your doing great
I feel very conflicted. Part of me doesn't want you to go through the whole alphabet, because of the horrible, terrible things happening to Fluttershy. Another is fascinated by the information, if not necessarily the medium, and is willing to shut down my imagination. A third just wants to get to the part where the vengeful spirits of Twilight's friends wreck her shit.
All of me is looking forward to more, though as you can tell, for very different reasons.
Give Fluttershy LSD, and then make her listen to random static noise or make the light in the room flash for some time. That should make her sanity break.
Make her swallow small metal balls and then put her in a strong magnetic field.
I'm still loving this story. It's not just some random gorefic like a plethora of others that I've read. There's a pretty damn good story, excellent (and as far as I can tell, accurate) medical terms, and is overall quite believable. While Twilight is a bit OOC, I suppose that I could see her doing something as crazy as this if she really thought it would help.
That and there's plenty of ways for it to end, good and bad.
F for Fear or P for Phobias If you manage to have her rib cage exposed at X you could take a pair of short metal rods and turn the rib cage into a "Xylophone"
1145203 I had been conflicted on what to do for X, but that's actually a good idea - reminds me of SHED.MOV too.
Speaking of alphabetical death things, I remembered a song that I find incredibly catchy - I can imagine either Twilight singing that kind of thing at this point, of Jeff in The Creepypasta Ponies (in fact, maybe I'll have him sing the chorus a bit at one point...)
1145437 I actually got a great idea for Z - zero. The drugs wear off and Fluttershy dies. Wow at this rate the comment section will write up this chapter for you!
Hope this super-long chapter makes up for lack of an update for 2 months.
... Then again, it is Fluttershy in this chapter...
I wonder if shes going to try to get trollestia after this
1132525 Unless Trollestia finds out first and beats her with her awesome trolling powers...
AMAZING CHAPTER!
Is it weird that I already knew what the antimony pentafluorine was? You can't even keep that stuff in glass containers cuz it goes through glass like water through paper. It needs to be kept in special Teflon containers. It has a PH of I think -32. It probably ate through the leg fast enough that it felt like someone cut it off with a knife. But why am I saying this, you already know it lol!
Then again: since it's actually a mix of 2 acids, does that really count? You could have used carborane (ph-18) since it is the strongest non mixture acid but it's not good at dissolving stuff.
YAY CHEMISTRY
1132683 Wow, you got that feeling and you haven't even read it yet?
.... This pleases me.
1132716 Oh wow, you already knew about that? Cool! Yeah, I guess i could have used carborane, but I never ended up looking that one up so I didn't know about it.
Honestly, if it hadn't been for TV Tropes, I couldn't have known about half the chemical stuff (never heard of krokodil until I read about it on the High Octane Nightmare Fuel Real Life page on TV Tropes, for instance)
Oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
That eye extraction part won't be for a couple moar chapters then...
I hope there isn't a long ass delay before the next chapter, this one was just as brutal and fucked as I wanted it to be...
1132683 I figured that C would be cringe-worthy (hey, that starts with a C too! ), so I have to say that you being unnerved by it was a fulfillment of its purpose!
And I'm glad you liked Rainbow being somewhat nice to Pinkie - just because Rainbow has no loyalty and thinks friends are a rediculous notion doesn't mean she has no capability for compassion on any level.
As for why Celestia hasn't come... well, Twilight's usually the one who notifies her about things, and at first they thought that maybe this was something that could be solved rather quickly, without bothering the Princess about it if, unless it was an immediate life-threatening thing. By the time that they all genuinely realized that there could be a severe danger, it was kind of too late.
... okay, so it was for story purposes, mainly.
1133462 Yeah, you'll have to wait a few more chapters for that part, SonicWarrior. (Can I call you Sonic?)
Glad you liked the brutality, though!
Who knows, maybe Twi will use naplam or Iron Thermite next
1132651 I can just see that happening
1133161 My AP chem summer assignment required me to read a 700 page book on the different elements. This was mentioned in the antimony section, right after boron (which is used in carborane). Yeah the book didn't put the elements in a specific order that's why antimony was placed right after boron.
1134713 They should have at least alphabetized it.
1134857 With the creepy magic tendril things, I'm not surprised your putting money on that assumption.
Also, I spy Cupcakes avatar.
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Science! It's super fun!
1134972 Eeyup, that's one of those pics that pretty much describes this - she has a syringe and everything!
1135119 I definitely hope to have the next chapter out quicker than two months - my writer's block was finally banished.
I just hope twilight will meet the guy who beat this thing. The dude will probably massacre her into a pile of blood, bone and ashes
1135585 O__o I'm guessing that you hope that someone tears Twilight apart for this, right?
1135712
welllllllll........... the dude's most famous line is "RIP AND TEAR" after all!
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If you want to I can search Hidden Wiki and Onion pages for crazy shit.
1135985 Yeah, Twilight would be in trouble if she couldn't combat him with her magic or science experiments!
1136246 That would be great if you wanted to!
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TWILGHT IS INSANE!!!
1137035 The picture isn't showing up for me, just as a blue little square with a question mark, but despite me being only able to see the text you put underneath... yes, Twilight is insane. In the words of the song "Miss Lucy Had Some Leeches"...
"Madness is a nuisance,
And no one is immune,
Your sister, mum or daughter
Could become a raving loon!"
But yeah, Twilight's lost her marbles and had them ground into smitherines.
im gunna start suggesting some tortures as well. Its gunna be tough because twilight's kinda pressed for time here.
D: Dislocation, drowning
E: electric shocks,
F: Force Feeding (preferably making her eat one of the animals), Foot roasting, fire
G: Glasgow Smile, Garroting
H: Hamstringing, Heretic's fork,
I: Intestinal crank, Iron maiden
J: Judas Cradle
K: kicking (all i could find)
L: Ling Chi
I'm not too sure how far you plan to go next chapter but here's all i got up until L.
1137181 Wow, somepony's been doing a bit of research for me!
And while I did chuckle at "kicking", I found a few K ones on the List of methods of torture on Wikipedia: Kneecapping, Keelhauling, and Kia quen.
This is by far the best fan fiction of my little pony ever made and your best chapter yet! it only gets better from here. so awesome i cant wait to see what turmoil awaits poor fluttershy she must die!!!
1137471 Woah, you seriously think this is the best MLP fic ever made? Wow....
I'm surprised that you actually seem to want Fluttershy to die though...
1133515 Go ahead and call me Sonic! I dun care.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Spike_lolface.png
I'd prefer Panda IMO. I'm about to change my name to that in a bit.
1137511 Panda it is, then!
1137519 And here's the name change!
1137552 Spiffy name change! Sounds a bit like "black panther", which is one of my favorite wild cats.
1137579 Thanks!
1137593 No problem, friend!
1137484 I've read a lot of fanfics in my life and this one is easily the best one I've read not because of the gore and the mind-rape, but how all the ponies are in character and believable. How physical torture can break even the best of any-pony and make them become what they don't want to be, or how it can make the worst of nightmares come true. That's why its so great... I do feel bad for fluttershy, but after seeing the other ponies maimed and brutally dismantled, i think i can take it... it makes me wonder if she'll become cruel to the others in the purgatory that the others are in... Keep it up. Your doing great
1137700 Aww, thank you so much!
I feel very conflicted. Part of me doesn't want you to go through the whole alphabet, because of the horrible, terrible things happening to Fluttershy. Another is fascinated by the information, if not necessarily the medium, and is willing to shut down my imagination. A third just wants to get to the part where the vengeful spirits of Twilight's friends wreck her shit.
All of me is looking forward to more, though as you can tell, for very different reasons.
1137981 I like your detailed explanation of your mixed feelings.
Give Fluttershy LSD, and then make her listen to random static noise or make the light in the room flash for some time. That should make her sanity break.
Make her swallow small metal balls and then put her in a strong magnetic field.
1142129 Oooh, interesting suggestions! Especially the M for Magnetics one, I never thought of anything like that!
.... Poor Fluttershy, though.
1142216 E for..... Evaporation? A ponies body is mostly water after all.
S for sound. Low frequences can really mess with brain.
1142274 S for sound... oh my gosh, it's messing with Lavender Town!
I kid, I kid... that's for the Creepypasta Ponies.
1142283 Okay what the hell is lavender town? I have heard a lot about it but never looked it up in the internet.
Oh, and there are a shitload of low frequence shit on the internet.
I'm still loving this story. It's not just some random gorefic like a plethora of others that I've read. There's a pretty damn good story, excellent (and as far as I can tell, accurate) medical terms, and is overall quite believable. While Twilight is a bit OOC, I suppose that I could see her doing something as crazy as this if she really thought it would help.
That and there's plenty of ways for it to end, good and bad.
1142310 Allow me to enlighten you.
1142554 Well of course Twilight's a bit OOC - she's kind of lost her marbles to the moon at this point.
Glad you really like it!
F for Fear or P for Phobias
If you manage to have her rib cage exposed at X you could take a pair of short metal rods and turn the rib cage into a "Xylophone"
1145203 I had been conflicted on what to do for X, but that's actually a good idea - reminds me of SHED.MOV too.
Speaking of alphabetical death things, I remembered a song that I find incredibly catchy - I can imagine either Twilight singing that kind of thing at this point, of Jeff in The Creepypasta Ponies (in fact, maybe I'll have him sing the chorus a bit at one point...)
1145437
I actually got a great idea for Z - zero.
The drugs wear off and Fluttershy dies.
Wow at this rate the comment section will write up this chapter for you!
1145654 Lo, yeah - at this rate the readers will end up giving all the torture ideas!