Believing that the essence of Harmony is threatened, Twilight plans to remedy that through a form of extraction. As her ambitions manifest, Twilight struggles through an internal war between her harmonious plan and the consequences of her acts.
396367 It sure as hell was worth it! As for the whole girl thing, simply put, Pages of Harmony is fucking genius. The execution was done very well, so we got caught off guard when you put that you were a girl. That and female bronies tend to hate grimdark/gore.
396611 Aw, thank you for saying that it's genius! I'm actually hoping to have the fic get a reading on Youtube and a TV Tropes page once its all done. And I guess I'm one of the exceptions to the female brony/pegasister assumption - I LOVE grimdark/gore stuff, and I especially read Rainbow Factory a lot - I just like the concept. And I like Cupcakes, and I was listening to MicTheMicrophone's reading of Sweet Apple Massacre while I was writing that past chapter... yeah, I think grimdark stuff is kinda awesome.
Just read it and I must say, I'm impressed at how this fic evolved from something were gore was the main objective to a fic with an extremely well done plot. There's also the fact that from the beginning of this fic to now, your writing has improved tremendously! It's a pleasure to read a grimdark-gore that is so well written. This is at least how I see it.
397289 Hey, don't worry, I won't rush it! You know what they say - you want speed, you sacrifice quality. So, if the update periods aren't rushed, the chapters will be better! And I get out of school at the end of April, so I'll be able to start in May to devote my time to grimdark writing!
397833 Aw, thanks! I actually was inspired to write this initially from a Youtube comment, which I shall only fully divulge later in a kind of "FAQs and NAQs" thing once the story is done, because one part of the comment has a major spoiler for a future event... but when I initially sat down to begin writing this, I just wanted to try writing a gorefic, but as I started writing, I began to expand a lot more on the initial idea, and then I ended up getting the elaborate plot in my head! And thanks for saying my writing has improved a lot - guess it's from the practice.
399042 Hey, a pony vid seems to get decent attention no matter who does it! - plus, audio readings are fun to listen to regardless, especially chapter voices!
399300 True... I'll also put the link to the story on the Bronies page on Facebook, as well as The Lunar Republic page. And I mean this page, not the video on it.
"The amygdala at the top of the brain was overlayed with the pulse of emotions." psycheducation.org/emotion/bgtrans3gif.gif Um, I think we've got another case of plutonium shelves here.
...wow. Unintentional morbidity with that emoticon. And that one. Oof. I'm just gonna stop using those for the rest of the comment...
Anyway, this continues to be one of the most exquisitely horrifying stories on the site. I look forward to Twilight's inevitable comeuppance. Also, I was kind of hoping for Sweetie's magic to activate in a life-or-death situation, but I guess that would've interfered with the plot to an excessively messy degree. Oh well...
In any case, it is with both dread and anticipation that I await the next installment.
405154 As Chuggaconroy said, "The lovely scientists help me out once again!" Uh, guess I was tired or something when I wrote that bit, or didn't entirely pay attention to the Wikipedia article... change time!
And yeah, that was an unintentionally morbid use of emoticons there!
Thank you for the compliment, and the advice! And trust me, next chapter is gonna be... bad. Very bad. As if you couldn't guess by the fact that Twilight mentioned Pony Hell there at the end...
400234 Oh, hey, out of interest, is there anything in particular you are anticipating/dreading/curious what will happen in the next chapter? (besides the obligatory Fluttershy involvement)
411648 I'm more curious as to what will happen when and after shr kills Fluttershy. (in hopefully the most horrid, wretched, but beautifully written scene). And, given it's Fluttershy, there'll be lots of crying... After, I'm expecting the dead Elements to talk in her head/dreams (i.e. 'Why' 'You killed us...' etc.). Leading her to believe she has schizophrenia or some other mental disease. So she decides to work on her book a little more. But she leaves the door open, and Celestia's worried about her student. She sees the cleaned corpses, and Twilight's, malnourished (feels guilty, hasn't been eating/sleeping/bathing) form working on the book. Celestia starts to question Twilight, and Twilight answers. (Ever watch Death Note? Put Twilight in Light Yagami's shoes.) Eventually, Celestia breaks down. Convinced Twilight is gone, (and not exactly in the best mental state) she stabs Twilight. In her horn. Twilight tries to push past Celestia using magic, only to have violent feedback (like Rarity). The magic breaks bones and causes internal bleeding, and some ribs shoot out of her chest. Twilight, finally coming to her senses, says some bullshit, sappy stuff. Celestia runs over to her dying student. Once again, Twilight says sappy, pour her soul out stuff (i.e. 'Going where I belong' calling Celestia her mother, etc.). Then she bleeds out and Celestia just cradles her broken body. The element of magic floats out of it's dead owner's horn. And then there'll be an epilogue. I wrote everything after Fluttershy to be in a separate chapter. This is just what I think will happen.
413429 I'm not saying if you were or not - you could be completely right or really far off the mark or somewhere in the middle, you'll just have to find out! I will say one thing though: there will be more than one chapter after Fluttershy's done - my current guess is that this will come to about 10 chapters, possibly 11.
413892 Not to mention that while I'm writing it, I will likely be listening to creepypasta/grimdark fic readings... and this song: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rdB6TGonTms (which I'm currently listening to as I brainstorm ideas)
414347 Cookie! By the way, I just realized - having never really watched Death Note, I decided to look up Light Yagami like you mentioned... and wow, I am AMAZED at the similarities, from what I read on the wiki, Twilight's basically like Light Yagami in the form of a female pony. Go figure!
Just read the first two chapters. I really, really like this! By far one of the best fics I have read in a while! I plan on reading some of the other chapters tomorrow. Keep up the good work!
I'm going to make a YTP using this fic in order try to get it some popularity. I only need to do two things 1st: finish the one I'm currently working on, 2nd: find a reading of this. Also, I know this is REALLY after the fact, but did you ever find a BGM for that song? Cuz "seeds of time" might work.
501809 Youtube video of the fic? Sweet! As for a reading of the fic, there is one so far on Justin.tv, but it's not a solid reading with no intterruptions, so that couldn't entirely count.
If only oneone would do a dramatic reading of this fic and put it on Youtube... I mean sure, it's not done yet, but still.
501809 Oh, and as far as BGM for "All for Harmony", I haven't been able to find anything specific - closest I've come to was finding one song that was good for the slow beginning and another that was good for the quick-paced part through most of the rest of the song. I did, however, find quite a bit of BGM that fits different parts of the fic as a whole.
As for "Seeds of Time", just listened to it, but only downside is it's too long and such. Too bad I can't make my own music for it, or someone else can't.
I find women tend to be better writers, at least, on FiMFiction, so I was not at all surprised when I found out that the author of this superb piece of literature had a female writer. I very much enjoy stories like these, though I am unsure as to why. Oh well.
How long do you suspect it will be until you update next?
550735 Also, I could do a YouTube reading as well. I've been told I have a very good reading voice. I just need to...well, figure out how to use YouTube properly. I don't know how to upload videos.
Yes, I really have finally updated - not an April Fools prank, everypony!... in fact, it's so much not an April Fool's prank that it's super long!
395165 12,000 words? Made up for the months I had to go without this! And I just found out you're a girl too? Holy shit, you're good.
395389 Lol, I seem to surprise everypony when they find out that I'm a girl and not a guy. Oh well!
And I figured that a lengthy chapter would potentially make up for a lengthy wait - it may have taken forever, but it was still fun to write!
396367 It sure as hell was worth it!
As for the whole girl thing, simply put, Pages of Harmony is fucking genius. The execution was done very well, so we got caught off guard when you put that you were a girl. That and female bronies tend to hate grimdark/gore.
396611 Aw, thank you for saying that it's genius! I'm actually hoping to have the fic get a reading on Youtube and a TV Tropes page once its all done.
And I guess I'm one of the exceptions to the female brony/pegasister assumption - I LOVE grimdark/gore stuff, and I especially read Rainbow Factory a lot - I just like the concept. And I like Cupcakes, and I was listening to MicTheMicrophone's reading of Sweet Apple Massacre while I was writing that past chapter... yeah, I think grimdark stuff is kinda awesome.
396756 Welp, when this is done, I guess I'll have to read it and put it on Youtube then!
396949 *does Rainbow Dash ohmygosh voice* Seriously?! Thanks!
397032 No problem!
But just because I'm putting a reading of it up on YT doesn't mean you can rush the story.
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Just read it and I must say, I'm impressed at how this fic evolved from something were gore was the main objective to a fic with an extremely well done plot.
There's also the fact that from the beginning of this fic to now, your writing has improved tremendously! It's a pleasure to read a grimdark-gore that is so well written.
This is at least how I see it.
397289 Hey, don't worry, I won't rush it! You know what they say - you want speed, you sacrifice quality. So, if the update periods aren't rushed, the chapters will be better! And I get out of school at the end of April, so I'll be able to start in May to devote my time to grimdark writing!
397833 Aw, thanks! I actually was inspired to write this initially from a Youtube comment, which I shall only fully divulge later in a kind of "FAQs and NAQs" thing once the story is done, because one part of the comment has a major spoiler for a future event... but when I initially sat down to begin writing this, I just wanted to try writing a gorefic, but as I started writing, I began to expand a lot more on the initial idea, and then I ended up getting the elaborate plot in my head!
And thanks for saying my writing has improved a lot - guess it's from the practice.
397289 By the way, forgot to ask, what's your Youtube username?
398157 YT username... brandonbear1... heh...heh...
I'm not very famous ;_______;
399042 Hey, a pony vid seems to get decent attention no matter who does it! - plus, audio readings are fun to listen to regardless, especially chapter voices!
399300 True...
I'll also put the link to the story on the Bronies page on Facebook, as well as The Lunar Republic page. And I mean this page, not the video on it.
399523 Seriously?! Huh, I didn't know those FB pages existed, but thanks! *brohoof*
399660 *brohoof*
"The amygdala at the top of the brain was overlayed with the pulse of emotions."
psycheducation.org/emotion/bgtrans3gif.gif
Um, I think we've got another case of plutonium shelves here.
...wow. Unintentional morbidity with that emoticon.
And that one. Oof. I'm just gonna stop using those for the rest of the comment...
Anyway, this continues to be one of the most exquisitely horrifying stories on the site. I look forward to Twilight's inevitable comeuppance. Also, I was kind of hoping for Sweetie's magic to activate in a life-or-death situation, but I guess that would've interfered with the plot to an excessively messy degree. Oh well...
In any case, it is with both dread and anticipation that I await the next installment.
405154 As Chuggaconroy said, "The lovely scientists help me out once again!" Uh, guess I was tired or something when I wrote that bit, or didn't entirely pay attention to the Wikipedia article... change time!
And yeah, that was an unintentionally morbid use of emoticons there!
Thank you for the compliment, and the advice! And trust me, next chapter is gonna be... bad. Very bad. As if you couldn't guess by the fact that Twilight mentioned Pony Hell there at the end...
400234 Oh, hey, out of interest, is there anything in particular you are anticipating/dreading/curious what will happen in the next chapter? (besides the obligatory Fluttershy involvement)
411648 I'm more curious as to what will happen when and after shr kills Fluttershy. (in hopefully the most horrid, wretched, but beautifully written scene). And, given it's Fluttershy, there'll be lots of crying...
After, I'm expecting the dead Elements to talk in her head/dreams (i.e. 'Why' 'You killed us...' etc.). Leading her to believe she has schizophrenia or some other mental disease. So she decides to work on her book a little more. But she leaves the door open, and Celestia's worried about her student. She sees the cleaned corpses, and Twilight's, malnourished (feels guilty, hasn't been eating/sleeping/bathing) form working on the book. Celestia starts to question Twilight, and Twilight answers. (Ever watch Death Note? Put Twilight in Light Yagami's shoes.) Eventually, Celestia breaks down. Convinced Twilight is gone, (and not exactly in the best mental state) she stabs Twilight. In her horn. Twilight tries to push past Celestia using magic, only to have violent feedback (like Rarity). The magic breaks bones and causes internal bleeding, and some ribs shoot out of her chest. Twilight, finally coming to her senses, says some bullshit, sappy stuff. Celestia runs over to her dying student. Once again, Twilight says sappy, pour her soul out stuff (i.e. 'Going where I belong' calling Celestia her mother, etc.). Then she bleeds out and Celestia just cradles her broken body. The element of magic floats out of it's dead owner's horn. And then there'll be an epilogue. I wrote everything after Fluttershy to be in a separate chapter.
This is just what I think will happen.
411648 Welp, didn't see the whole 'in the next chapter'. I wrote my improv outline of what I expected for the rest of the story. So pro.
412433 Hey, I actually LOVE that you outlined your idea for the rest of the story!
As for your degree of accuracy, you shall find out!
413257 Wait, I was accurate?
413429 I'm not saying if you were or not - you could be completely right or really far off the mark or somewhere in the middle, you'll just have to find out! I will say one thing though: there will be more than one chapter after Fluttershy's done - my current guess is that this will come to about 10 chapters, possibly 11.
413435 True... You know how to make my mouth water for updates.
Here you go!
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413456 Sweet! *Legend of Zelda item-getting music* I GOT THE THIIIINNNNGGGG! (Sorry, Chuggaconroy trend in my head! )
I think you shall be liking these next chapters, 'cause I've got plans... wonderfully horrible plans...
413622 Chuggaconroy = WIN.
Also, wonderfully horrible plans?
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413655 *high fives for being a Chuggaa fan*
And indeed.... let's just say this page and I are gonna become good friends... http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_methods_of_torture
413769 Hoooooo boy.
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Shit just got real.
413892 Not to mention that while I'm writing it, I will likely be listening to creepypasta/grimdark fic readings... and this song: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rdB6TGonTms (which I'm currently listening to as I brainstorm ideas)
413943 Welp, I ran out of Me Gustas to put.
So have a cookie. *gives cookie*
414347 Cookie!
By the way, I just realized - having never really watched Death Note, I decided to look up Light Yagami like you mentioned... and wow, I am AMAZED at the similarities, from what I read on the wiki, Twilight's basically like Light Yagami in the form of a female pony. Go figure!
416725 This is all you need to watch to pin together Light and Twilight.
LINK
417159 Woah..... aside from the whole note thing and the other guy shooting Light, that's like... wow...
The motive, and killing others for justice... that's all the same, it's so Twilight...
Man, if I were really good at drawing, I'd do a picture of both of them, because that fit so well that it's not even funny!
417233 Yeah, I know right? Death Note is a badass show.
417377 *is so tempted to watch it now and look for more similarness to Twilight*
417611 You'd like it. Very dark stuff.
Just read the first two chapters. I really, really like this! By far one of the best fics I have read in a while!
I plan on reading some of the other chapters tomorrow. Keep up the good work!
424391 Thanks! Glad you like it so much!
I learned about the brain from reading a gorefic.
Lol
467950 Yay, my gorefic has provided education!
I hope angel is involved with her torture. cliche or not that bunny makes for a great psychological torture device.
I'm going to make a YTP using this fic in order try to get it some popularity. I only need to do two things 1st: finish the one I'm currently working on, 2nd: find a reading of this. Also, I know this is REALLY after the fact, but did you ever find a BGM for that song? Cuz "seeds of time" might work.
494041Oh, maybe he will be involved... and not just him... *laughs evily*
501809 Youtube video of the fic? Sweet! As for a reading of the fic, there is one so far on Justin.tv, but it's not a solid reading with no intterruptions, so that couldn't entirely count.
If only oneone would do a dramatic reading of this fic and put it on Youtube... I mean sure, it's not done yet, but still.
501809 Oh, and as far as BGM for "All for Harmony", I haven't been able to find anything specific - closest I've come to was finding one song that was good for the slow beginning and another that was good for the quick-paced part through most of the rest of the song. I did, however, find quite a bit of BGM that fits different parts of the fic as a whole.
As for "Seeds of Time", just listened to it, but only downside is it's too long and such. Too bad I can't make my own music for it, or someone else can't.
I find women tend to be better writers, at least, on FiMFiction, so I was not at all surprised when I found out that the author of this superb piece of literature had a female writer.
I very much enjoy stories like these, though I am unsure as to why. Oh well.
How long do you suspect it will be until you update next?
550735
Also, I could do a YouTube reading as well. I've been told I have a very good reading voice. I just need to...well, figure out how to use YouTube properly. I don't know how to upload videos.