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Fluttershy is now an Alicorn and is greatly affected by Twilight's death; will she and her friends be able to face the mysterious Crimson Mare, or has Twilight died in vain? *Sequel to Fading Friendships*

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Comments ( 17 )

Mmm-hmm. Will track.

Wait.... Twilight's a ghost?!?
FUCKING GUINNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

No Twi's not a ghost, as much as I would love to say that. :raritywink:
She's more of a... memory. I'll tell you how that works very soon. :scootangel:

:rainbowderp: Wait, what the hat does this have to do with Guinness? I mean, I live in Ireland, where the beer "Guinness" was invented. What does this have to do with Guinness? :rainbowhuh:

116675
You live in motherfucking Ireland?!
Good sir, I envy you so much right now...

Back to the story:
It's... nice.
The plot will unfurl, so will refrain from talking about it.
But the characterization... What happened to Flutters?! She is not acting like fluttershy.

The text needs some work too.

Of course it does. I was so tired when I wrote it that I feel asleep on the computer. :ajbemused: Not cool dude, not cool.

Whadda ya mean, ya envy me? It rains 24/7 here. Not cool at all. :raritydespair:

This needs some editing. I don't want to sound like an ass.
Come on, flame. From this story to its previous, the quality has been dropping. What's going on? :applejackunsure:

I'm lost here. What exactly is happening?

I don't have an editor, which is probably why the quality's dropping... :twilightoops: I didn't have one in the first book either. Looks like I need to find one.
I need to rewrite this. BIG TIME. :facehoof:
If u any pony wants to help, send me a private message.

131959 I'm with you. The first chapter made some sense at the beginning, but now it makes no sense! Will it make more sense later on or was it intended to be as confusing as Neon Genesis Evangelion?

132090 As I stated in your blog. I'd love to help but I've got a shitload at my hands ATM.
Still, here's a hint. Go back and revise the two chapters before adding new ones. :pinkiehappy:

Yeah... :ajsleepy: that's the thing, ya see. The second chapter is a total piece of CRAP/SHIT/BUCK, etc, etc, etc. :flutterrage:
I am STILL looking for an editor and I am seriously considering to put this on "Hiatus". :applecry:
Again, if you would like to help please send me a private message. :raritywink:

:facehoof: I've done it again. I've made another freakin' fan fic.
:raritydespair: why oh why do I have to write something that makes no sense at all?

COMMENTERS AND VIEWERS, LISTEN UP.
I'VE FORGOTTEN THE PASSWORD FOR THIS ACCOUNT, AND I'LL BE POSTING UP A RE-WRITTEN VERSION OF THIS FIC AND IT'S PRE-QUEL.
THIS I MY NEW ACCOUNT THAT I SHALL NOW USE. SORRY FOR THE CONSCIENCE CAUSED. :applecry:

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