After finding out Scootaloo’s secret, Princess Luna decides to take her under her wing. Not content with how Princess Celestial is running the country they decide to plot a rebellion.
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Well this looks like fun I hope to see more in the future, also I wonder if Luna has an army of some sort.
This is very good. I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Hope to see more of your chapters, and remember:
Keep your dreams alive. Understand that achieving anything requires faith and belief in yourself, vision, hard work, determination, and dedication. Remember, all things are possible for those who believe.
Here's a song that will make so whatever it takes. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/HcNcOnIkQQU?si=rJ17h-w0G7ZQkeGj
Along with seeing Scootaloo doing some training, too. I can't wait to see of great she'll be
like the idea for the story, but its very fast. You are sprinting through these chapters. Slow down. Add paragraphs showing what Luna thinks. Add paragraphs showing what Celestia thinks. Add flashbacks. You can add two or three paragraphs just on personal thought based on whats going on in the chapter.
Monk
"if Celestia is the nation’s mother, then Luna is its bitter aunt who hangs around renaissance fairs and World War II reenactments." -Some Dickhead (authors actual name)
So much bitterness and hate here and all due to a different opinion.
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True, this have a lot of potential, but you are moving it a little to fast, let us enjoy the ride
You can add some background or flashback about Luna, Celestia, or the threstal, and earth ponies can use magic to?.
You have a lot of material to work whit, use it.
Take you time and dont waste a good story
In John Cleese Voice "Chapter 2: There is NO Chapter 2!
Chapter 3, No Sunbutt!"
Is Princess Cadence going to appear in this story?
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Is it wrong that when I first saw your comment, I thought you were talking about the comments to this story?
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HaHa, I've only just noticed, in my defence I was writing this at 1 o clock in the morning