This was a fun read, nice to see more of your writing from you again. Keep it up man.

Getting close to her son without realizing her was still her baby.

Bit of a typo there.

Also not sure why everything is center-aligned? It's not a bad thing, but it is weird. You also probably don't need nearly every single sentence to be on its own line.

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Fixed. I generally type in the center so it reads more like a script. Every sentence is like that because when I started posting stories on here the moderators said paragraphs were too close together so I type my stories this way now. I do find however it is easier to keep your place or find it again with the sentences spaced apart.

interesting little story, I must say so myself

I love it.
I can't wait to see more like this.
and to see what else has happened to Twilight from the Scent of Babyality.

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Generally most riders on the Internet, leave a line break between each paragraph. Instead of the whole indent thing.