This is the story of one Green Highfire Lines, former oddjobber, now technically mailpony with lost and found characteristics.
Confused? So's he. But he has a bagfull of mail, some very high authority figures hanging over his shoulder, and the lovely hoof of responsibility carefully reminding his spinal collumn of his newfound obligations.
...at least he might get paid.
...r-right?
A tip, at least?
P-pretty please?
Starlight over Detrot is an excellent story.
I have a single quote though, that for some reason caught my eye.
It is said: “You steal the mail when it arrives, you steal the mail before it leaves, but nopony steals from a mail carrier’s bag.” There’s a record of an incident where a new mail carrier left her bag (presumably by accident, but this has never been verified) in a remote train station. To the best of anypony’s knowledge, it is still there, sheltered under a propped up umbrella, waiting for somepony with sufficient authority to pick it up. As trifling with the mail means trifling with the Royal Equestrian Mail Service, nopony has stepped up to take the risk.
...yeah it took like a few hours to start writing this whooooooo
Well, I certainly am liking the story so far, I am always a fan of the mailpony design and outfits from the show and I really like the main characters, being a happy go lucky bum who gets conscripted into the becoming a mailpony and is an expert at bull shitting his way though things making it very promising for many high jinks and adventures. Would love to see the deep dive into the world of the Equestian mails service, from the sound of it it's a world on to itself.
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I read, ‘Punch Celestia in the face’.
Hopefully, he doesn't get his spine snapped by Moonbutt or beaten up by Twilight, AJ, or RD afterward.
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Eh, she's survived worse. It's actually by royal edict that one can make an appointment to punch her if one wishes. The paperwork is tremendous and so nobody actually bothers usually.
It'd take someone of substantial power to even leave a bruise; sunpone is tanky.
Well sense you actually put un the effort into proofreading the chapter this time around the quality of the writing is noticeably better now. The Zebra was a fun character with all her quirks. So the Equestrian Mail Service are aware of Green and have dispatched two mailponies to retrieve him, I hope it won't be that easy as it looks. I am surprised that Green just accepted being a mailpony now, but seeing that he apparently had a lot of jobs and got promptly fired for it, I am guessing that they won't want him for very long, stability and consistency doesn't seem to mesh well with Green. What a shock it would be to find out that he actually like being a mailpony, especially doing the difficult deliveries and wants to stay in the organization after all. I think Green would need to do one mail delivery, an especially difficult one, before he is captured and retrieved by his future colleagues and brought back to HQ and get his formal induction and training into the service. From the looks of it the Mail service is a lot more militant then what we would usually associate them with, this is going to be a lot of fun to read.
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What's proofreading? :P
On characterization: probably soon.
But yes I am aiming for real live laugh love type beat with him to some extent.
potentially, slapping the go button on a story concept little.more than twink pegasus mailstallion was a poor move.