For those of you who have played the game from Google Play, and have always enjoyed watching every video clip of the series, we find out what happens when a certain cute, little green monster ends up in Equestria. Lost, hungry and alone, he travels the Everfree Forest in search of the candy the spiders have stolen from him, until he ends up in Ponyville, while attracting the attention and interest of none other than Equestria's party pony, Pinkie Pie!
After taking him in, she later finds out that this guy's diet is comprised mainly, and only of candy.
Chapters (1)
3 words and 3 words only: I like it
Its a bit short for the First chapter but its not a bad start
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Thanks. 😌
I don't mean to make it short, but I'm just being careful as to how many words I put into this chapter, like the next one that I hope to write soon
Other than that, thank you.
And if you have any ideas on how I can make this chapter a tad longer, feel free to DM me.
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Your welcome
You do what you do the only problem here is a bit of lack of details and how Pinkie Pie managed to sneak Om nom to Sugarcube corner or well How and when they got there is more in Question. other than that its all good
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Ah, I see.
Now that you mention it, that's something that hadn't really thought about, but I'll think of a way to work them either into this chapter, or the next.
So, thanks for pointing that out.
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No problem
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How does it look now?
I'll work the Cakes and the rest of the Mane 5 into the story in the next chapter, but I included some gifs to give the story a bit of improvement, and better visualization.
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Not bad I say the Gifs were a nice touch to it it gives the chapter a better look and gives of a better visual and more details compared to last time
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Thanks a bunch.
You were very helpful to point out that one mistake that I had left out. 😁
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No Problemo
I need more
also good chapter 👍
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As soon as I come up with a chapter name for the next one, and figure out a plot for it, then I can add it to the story.
Otherwise, thanks!