No one should enter in the Everfree forest during the night, this is a given for ponies but sometimes curiosity kills the impatient....
(09/04/2023, Buona Pasqua! Fixed some punctuation errors and now Evenfree is Everfree)
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There’s a typo in the short bio. “Evenfree” should be “Everfree”, right?
ETA: Oh, the typo is all throughout. I can’t recognise it as a theme, so I assume it’s a typo. That being said — there’s trouble with the dialogue, mostly with spaces between the quotation marks and the dialogue tags, and the punctuation at the end of lines/paragraphs.
ETA 2: The story is a bit too fast paced for there to be much “Mystery” behind it and I wouldn’t really depict it as “Dark”, but I suppose that’s subjective, and I wouldn’t remove it myself. Perhaps “Horror” is more fitting over “Thriller”?
(I saw the end note — and your English isn’t the problem I’m picking out, in case you see this comment and think otherwise. The problem is with punctuation and typos where words are missing. There’s a few typos concerning things like “cry” instead of “cries/cried”, but those pale in comparison to the punctuation within dialogue.)
I liked it, despite my nitpickiness. It’s quick-paced, but that’s not necessarily bad beyond the fact that it’s supposed to be a mystery (this could just be me, though). And I upvoted, because — as I said — I liked it. A simplistic horror. We don’t get many of those, nowadays.
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Sorry man this was a very stupid error
For the punctuation sorry again, i tried but apparently i have to re-read the general guide
Thanks for the comment
(The stupid error and the punctuation will be fixed tomorrow)