Co-Written by 'CPL, Colourfulpony' of the Manechat discord server
THIS WAS PLANNED AND PARTLY WRITTEN BEFORE CHAPTER 4 OF MAKE YOUR MARK!
A year after Unity was restored among ponykind, Sunny and her friends finally defeated Opaline Arcana.
Who is this she that Opaline refers to? And what's a human, and why do they want to go to the Crystal Empire?
15/03/2023: Violence tag added due to references of torture and blood.
03/04/2023: Sex tag added due to references of sex in the most recent chapter (Chapter 19).
Chapters (37)
I like what I’m reading so far, but those line breaks man, you gotta use them.
For example. This
Would look so much better as this.
But besides that? I’m liking what I’m seeing.
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i'll be honest, the proof reader who i had look this over before submitting didn't raise these as an issue
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Oof. I mean, it’s readable but it still looks like a massive wall of text, especially when the dialogue is so long. I only used a shorter example to not have a long ass comment.
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yeah, i'll keep tinkering with it until its perfected
wait what
Wait what. Im so comfused
Ok this is so god dam comfusing
WHAT!?
But you said you were in a car on the road, and that meant you were on Earth...
THE CRYSTAL EMPIRE IS GONE!!!
Thanks Posey
So you'll abandon them like that without a goodbye?
wow
yikes
LIKE HELL NO!!!!
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Posey: The Local Karen
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rest assured, all will be revealed in time
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What do you mean by that?
That was incredibly stupid of him. All in can say is plead temporary emotional insanity.
Wow. Very good.
When will the next chapter be uploaded?
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to be honest and im not trying to be rude, but when its ready, since both me and my co-writer work full time and write after work. doesn't help we're in different timezones so we only have about 3 hours to write between when i finish work and when they have to go to sleep
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OK.
Oh... Poor Opaline. I hope Argyle lives and Opaline meets him once more
Is this a sequel?
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a very loose sequel, but yes
did Misty read opaline's diary? Now she knows Opaline ..... or she doesn't know anything yet.
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she has read every page of it
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I mean... Misty found out that Opaline has a daughter
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yes, but is not aware that Sunny is Stellar
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I'm waiting to see what happens. I hope Misty will return to her adoptive mother.
Oh so cute
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glad you like it :)
Oh Misty arcana. I love it . 😀
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hehe
Hi. This story continues, right?
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yes, just having major writers block right now
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Oh so bad
Hi . How are you?
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as fine as anyone can be given its winter
OMG
Sooo cool
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I knew they got married secretly. It seems my thought was right.