WAAAAAAAGGGGHHH!!!!!!!
the guttural cry to war bellowed from the throats of greenskins, or rather the threat of an unsuspecting greenskin fan, Jacob smith now grimgor ironhide via the machinations of merchants and the gods Mork and Gork (or Gork and Mork?), it is holy duty to fulfill the will of the greenskins gods, to unleash a WAAAGH of a scale unmatched, the planet equiss trembles in fear of its new war hungry natives
(Authors note: For those wandering, this is fantasy greenskins not 40k orks, just clearing that up)
Chapters (2)
Oh wow, you're new. Reminds me of my first story.
You're using commas where you should put periods a lot of the time, turning 6 or even 10 sentences into one.
I have to go to work in 5 minutes, but during my break I'll see if I can't help you out. Keep up the good work.
Also, there's a Warhammer 40k group page(name is Warhammer 40k, but we accept Fantasy stuff too) feel free to post this in the Group.
I really enjoyed those keep up the good work can't wait for the next chapter