Dunno. I write shit.Simple as that. Okay? Okai. crackheads unite
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By the beard of Zeus. Those are some pretty short chapters you've got there.
EDIT: OH BOY HERE WE GO
Woah, woah. I think the main character is more talented here; they can pronounce tildes.
You need to italicize thoughts.
Wait... this became a human story...?
Ponies are always nakes, unless MC is in fact a human. Then you need the human tag.
You don't capitalize words after ellipses. I'm guessing this was written on a mobile.
>facing Rainbow Blitz, and shakes his plot dangerously close to your face
>and shakes his plot dangerously close to your face
>and shakes his plot dangerously
>his plot dangerously
>plot
PLOT IS NOT A GOD DAMN ANATOMICAL PART OF AN EQUINE. GOD. IF YOU WANT PEOPLE TO FAP TO THIS, MAKE THEM FAP TO WORDS THAT ACTUALLY MEAN SOMETHING.
I'm done now.
Wants.
Why haven't you added the human tag?
You don't need the comma after "just", even if that's a pause. Maybe a dash or an ellipsis.
All right. Gay human clopfic, but at least it wasn't written with one hand.
Question time: Why didn't you stick yo dick in him? And what happened to Blitz?
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It was enough to satisfy my sick mind. I'll be writing much longer chapters when I write the reader x Elusive one.
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I've edited my comment with a review. I also liked the story, but the fact that you didn't warn of humans was enough to stop me from faving it. What an unpleasant surprise.
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Like I said, I wrote it for myself more than anyone, I just wanted to see what other people thought.
The criticism is appreciated though. I'll take that into consideration next time.
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Oh and to clarify, I missed the human tag. Didn't know there was one. I figured "Crossover" kinda would make you think, but I guess I think differently than people.
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You're welcome.
Protip: Next time you make something that's more for yourself, host it on a private site.
I notice you have the Crossover tag. I believe you mean Human. Crossover refers to the MLPFiM universe being thrown together with another (Team Fortress 2, Negima Magister Negi Magi, Dragon Ball, anything fictional).
Double-edit: You can edit your comments instead of making a new one with the little pencil-and-paper button.
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Meh.
I'm in a proofreading group, I'll post my next story in there first.
So is this mm or is the reader female?
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MM.
Hai
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Hai bbygurl <5
Ugh. Just...
Bleh.
The chapters were damn short... aside from that, it wasn't bad.
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It sucked.
Srsly.
A bit too short, but otherwise alright.
Oh. My. Gawd. I love this fic so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Its like on the brink of adorable and making me totally wet between the legs!
this was nice can't tell if the main protagonest is a guy or girl but apert from that its nice