We all know that, when Celestia and Luna handed over the throne to Twilight, she accepted it. But what if that hadn't happened like this? What if Celestia was keeping a secret behind all of this?
When Celestia announces her intention to make Twilight the ruler of Equestria, her young student doesn't take it as well as she hoped, causing a rift in the friendship between the two alicorns.
Unfortunately, this incident happens with the arrival of a dangerous villain, who forces Twilight to flee her home, leaving her friends behind. Luckily, the princess of friendship will have the help of Tempest Shadow in this journey. On her side, Celestia teams up with Spike and the Elements of Harmony to find her student.
On this adventure, Twilight, Tempest and Celestia will have to face their insecurities and their pasts. And Twilight will discover the real reason why her teacher wanted to give her the throne. But the further they advance, the closer they get to the dark forces... and they are waiting for them.
This is my first adventure fic! Any and all feedback will be greatly appreciated!
My gratitude to Tim Ribbert and Phantom-Dragon for their advice. And to my friend from Youtube Mr Soarin for making me the image for this story.
Not bad for a first try
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Thank you very much
Apart from a few grammar errors, I find this to be a rather decent build-up. Not only does it address what Tempest has been up to ever since the events of the movie, but in doing so it acknowledges just what the mare's been up to during the events of the latter seasons. But it seems an old enemy from the time of the Storm King is reminding her of an old debt she still has to pay. And it seems things are only going to get worse from here on out.
Again a few errors are more mptan;e om certaom areas. Especially the mistakable use of terminology for genders. But seems at least we get a bigger explanation for what Celestia wants to do around Twilight Sparkle, why it is vital that she takes over as princess of Equestria despite the fact she lacks the experience as of the other alicorns. But it seems dark forces are still at work, a force that is sure to complicate the matter momentarily.
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I'm glad you like it.
Please, indicate the grammar errors that you have seen so that I can correct them.
Been waiting 4 an update, yay!
alright i'll bite let's see where this goes
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You will see. The excitement starts now.
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Yes! And this is just the beginning!
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An amazing story as ever and keeps giving. The drama is practically soapbox levels of good.
I am intrigued in seeing what role the Seven Deadly Sin creatures will play in this story and how our heroes will fight them.
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I'm glad you like it. I will try to keep the story exciting for you and everyone who reads it.
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I can't write spoilers, but I warn you that they will have a very important role in the story (and in the next chapter 😈).
So i feel like i am missing something for i still do not understand whats going on with the 2 group, Else got to say Celestia really put her Shoe in her mouth there, Like i don't know if she can say anything worse to Twilight then what she did, But else Great update Cheers