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Aw... love the Celestia-Twilight relationship here. I feel like Fluttershy might actually be good for Twilight, if only she didn’t have that awful thing in her head. I also wonder what Fluttershy’s reaction to all of this will be - welp, guess I’ll have to wait to find out!

(PS. A warm cup of milk always helps me to sleep at night.)

Loving this so far. Looking forward to see where this goes.

OwO

Interesting...

The mythology you’ve created here is really interesting, just enough for us to understand but not too much so as to incentivize us to read more. Very well done. Excited to see where this goes.

That was good chapter. in the end Twilight was much more Princess of friendship that monster in start.
And Celestia must teach Twilight how defend herself againts mind magic better.

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Thank you!

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Even twisted and corrupted by this strange world - Twilight is still Twilight, and Twilight is kind.
For now, at least.

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Kind to her friends.
... Horror to her enemies...

Sees incomplete.
Waits.
Sorry, but I really don’t like reading a story just to have it breaking off in the middle. I put it in my “read later” list tho, so keep working! I really like the feel I get from the description, I’m sure I’ll love the story.

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A respectable choice.

This story is... intense. Also, that Private, oof. He failed his sanity check and paid for it.

Another chapter already? Neat.

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Clearly, I'm a vain creature that feeds off attention, and attention fuels my desire to write.

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I dub you
Scp-[redacted]: the fanfiction writer

Wonderful! I find this to be fairly reminiscent of my own writing style in my younger years. There are a few mistakes (though when I say few, I do mean it; I noticed them only in passing and barely had to consciously recognise them) for which an editor is likely a good idea; though, with the titanic growth of this story at the moment, I believe that shan't be difficult to achieve.

All-in-all, a unique universe that I haven't seen before and characterisation that is uncommon (a clever Celestia beset by her own moral compass, a monstrous Twilight with the capacity for great good and evil rather than one or the other, a Discord of some reason and willing to cooperate with Celestia) means that this story is of great note. I would recommend it to anyone using this website in a heartbeat, and hope more chapters are published.

As an afterthought, will this universe be open-source? That is to say, will other authors be able to write stories set in this universe - if so, must they use your own lore or may they come up with their own?

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Your praise is truly appreciated.

As for the mistakes - while autocorrect software catches most of them, I do tend to write in quite a hurry: and rarely tend to self-edit as that tends to result in the death or stagnation of my stories. A personal flaw, I suppose - but when writing for fun, not the end of the world. Regardless, I do tend to re-read my work and catch a few errors here and there - just, after the chapter's been published. ;p

As for it being "open source' - absolutely! If anyone wants to write something as a part of this universe, they're more than welcome to. I encourage it, actually.

of gods and monsters? What's that?

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A name for the alternate universe that this is set in. To copy and paste another comment that explained it quite well:

There is another story set in the Of Gods of Monsters universe - called Freedom's unRule.

I would like to emphasize that this story will be standalone. It will not require reading Freedom's unRule, or any other Gods and Monsters story I decide to publish. It might give a bit more context, though.
You might find it more enjoyable - going into this with a slightly heavier hint of mystery. Alternatively, here's an embed.

EFreedom's unRule

• MLP: FiM
• Dark
• Mystery

The laws of the universe are his pet puppy dog. Physics are a suggestion at best, while logic and reason are his scorned ex-spouses. A preview into Discord's life, and the History of Equestria. Part of Of Gods and Monsters.

• Alt. Universe
• Celestia
• Luna
• OC
• Discord

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10870326 Wonderful. Perhaps I'll have a go soon. It's an interesting universe, and ever since I stopped pursuing my short-lived career as an author, I've had few opportunities to sharpen my words. Thank you very much for even writing something like this! The fandom has taken on somewhat of a resurgence recently, and for this I am glad.

W-whoa....

I can't tell if this is anthro, Celestia is or isn't taking the form of a pony. The use of human terms is really throwing me off.

So... I have a lot of questions.

I don't think this story is fully explaining everything. Or atleast p, not yet.