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Princess Platinum, in the Flesh

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Little_Draco

Little_Draco #1 · Aug 20th, 2014 · 1 · ·

I honestly dont know what to say. I mean this could have so much potential if done right. It didn't have a background, character or much of a dialog. It felt rushed, sloppy, and it was already done before you can even start the actual story.
Again it has potential but it needs alot of work.

Friedrich Neightsche

Friedrich Neightsche #2 · Aug 20th, 2014 · · 1 ·

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Thanks for the feedback. My current writing background comes from RPs, so I would suspect that my initial writing il contain many of those same flaws. I'll keep an eye out for things like that.