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Sam Cole
Just a veteran writing love stories for fun. If you want help or just to chat, hit me up, I always love to meet new people.
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Your story was so good, it broke Fimfiction and turned the mature filter back on.
I very nearly couldn't read this.
Very pleased I could.
This was great. really good story.
all I have to say is... Pseudo, not Sudo.
Aside from that, VERY well done.
Twirity.... I'll have to give it a read, I guess....
You never disappoint me with your stories. I'm gonna say you're my favorite comedy writer.
Really good. Wish you hadn't released it all in one go. Probably won't get as many hits as it deserves.
This is the best story ever! I hope there is more!
I'll admit to being disappointed at chapter one, as I was expecting Spilight shipping. But at least you remembered to treat Spike like the main character he is, give him some good moments, make clear that Twilight cares about his feelings (even if Rarity doesn't), and remember that any one of the mane six has six friends, not five. Props to you.
That was a most excellent story. I never really entertained the thought of most of the pairings presented here, but you totally made it work. I found this funny, romantic, and even a bit suspensful at times and am only sad that it's over. Great job.
Going to wait till the end before I give more in-depth feedback.
One note though:
Too = also (meaning you could replace 'too' with 'also' or 'as well' and the sentence would still be functional), or the idea of having an excess amount (too much). 'she walked too quickly'. 'I want to go too'.
Every other situation, you want to use 'to' instead.
Well that was entertaining. Some pretty good comedic moments in there. I think my favorite was Pinkie confessing to Spike why she acts so silly.
Don't know if it was intentional since it's a comedy, but everyone was pretty OOC, and everything developed much too quickly to feel genuine, at least in the beginning. Sometimes that's intentional in comedies, but I thought I'd mention anyways since I couldn't tell if it was or not.
1998604 Thanks boss, fixed now.
2005278 Thank you as well amigo. And yes, it's all OOC. This was a 'Just for fun, hope you enjoy' sort of thing.
1997970 Thank you Miss Rarity, glad you enjoyed
Applejack calls Spike's feelings a crush, Fluttershy calls him a spoilsport, Rarity gives him no warning before flaunting her new relationship right in front of him … man, they don't give a SHIT about his feelings. Rarity may as well have said, “Spike, I don't care what feelings you have over the fact that the two most beloved ponies in your life just kicked you in the balls and stabbed you in the back simultaneously, but I expect you to approve.”
I'm ambivalent over giving an upvote for doing such a great job writing Spike or a downvote for writing a Rarity that thinks nothing of him whatsoever. Considering it was never meant to be taken seriously, an upvote is more likely. Here's hoping this will end with both mares having sex on top of him or something. Either way, that was a pretty good Doctor Who reference. Most people just hint at the TARDIS or some untold adventure.
Well, Pinkie has redeemed herself, although I still wish Rarity would get chewed out for the crap she pulled. When you typed, “...stroking his spines,” I kinda saw another word at first. An anagram of “spines,” though there would have been an extra 's' in it. Just my hopeful imagination.
You have no idea how much I loved Dr. Horse M.D. It takes really stellar gag for written humor to make me laugh out loud. If given the opportunity, I may just use the same character.
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Whoops, I just realized I never really explained anything in that comment or offered any constructive portion. Sorry bout that
Thought of the points during reading, but slipped my mind afterwards. I think that the biggest thing that made it seem OOC (and difficult to tell if it was on purpose or not) was their word choice. Some of the sentences just didn't fit to their respective speaker. Krazy the Fox has a blog about writing Applejack, but he addresses word choice and it's applicable to all characters. Here
Just going to post it anyways in case it might help someone.
Anyways, it was an enjoyable, silly story. Take it easy~
Atta girl.
Loved this story, it was so beautiful. I know it was just a fun little story, but I thought it was fantastic.
Pretty great read. I loved the little bits of Pinkie Spike, and the fact that Spike took action like the hero he is. It would have been appropriate for Rarity to suffer some repercussions or to see how deeply she hurt him earlier. You did a fine job writing my favorite character.
this was good... odd but good
magic you say?
approval rating +1
I do love a story where everyone is happy in the end... Well, seemingly at least. I don't really understand what AJ's thinking, but she seems... busy?
Yeah, I don't really get that one. Still everypony got their special somepony in the end, that counts for a lot to me. Also, as much as I would usually prefer canon relationships (even if one-sided) Pinkie x Spike feels weird enough to work.
Really since chapter 3 I knew it was the crystal ball. I call lord of the rings, doctor who, and house reference. I'm sure there were more but that's all I have. I'm, by clinical point of view, 'reasoning retarded' my personal term for it. I can't spot subtle queue's, I can't place part a and part c without being spoon fed part b. and I get what's wrong with her how is OCD unicorn not noticing?
What Swashbucklist said... hey! Quit it!
Anyways, I also found Horse M.D. to be absolutely hilarious. I didn't even pick up on it until he popped some pills and told Twi to shut up. Then, it was on.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
Great story.
Good from the very start and it got better and better as it went on just picking up speed. Very few stories I have read are capable of that. Most just slow down or let their quality fall but you managed to do the opposite. Great work. I'll have to check more of your stories once I get rest of my reading backlog dealt with.
Keep up the good work.
This fic deals with my worst fear as a male.
I loved every chapter of it and it's already addded to my favorites.
I think....I'll just be a bit more open minded...?
Why does this only have about 70 likes?! This story is FREAKING AWESOME! I've lost count of the re-reads!
2745826 Because I launched the story as one whole piece. Killed the amount of traffic I could pull. But thanks for the props amigo. Glad you enjoyed.
loved the story and for some odd reason i want to read a sequel
who cares if the characters where OOC, i loved it, and the story was very well written that's what counts to me, if you ask me they started very much in character, but changed by the events, and that is something i greatly enjoy reading stories 
For someone to do that, you dont deserve her spike.
One of my most treasured stories. I loved this
Fantastic story.
Classic DERPY
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I am glad it isn't a Spilight or a Spity (how ever Spike Rarity shippers put it) I think any of the mane 6 are to old for him and a relationship with one of them creeps me out. Now that's not to say I wouldn't ship Spike, in fact Sweetie BelleXSpike is probably one of my more favorite long as it stays innocent. That means no clopping for Spike.
5496163 You must be new! It's called "Sparity".
To each their own. I like to think there are a decent handful of ways to circumnavigate Spike's limited years. paleowriter utilizes one in an excellent adventure story called "Of Age". An innocent clop-free story, to be precise.
Read this story awhile back, just wanted to stop by to say that it's one of my all time favorite stories that's just plainly fun to read. And reread. Thanks for writing it!
Should been called a Pic-me-up-nic
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You do know at the most the main six are only 7 years older then Spike right? At the least it's only 5 yrs for twilight. But I could be wrong, since we have no real idea about Twilight's age when she hatched Spike. Also we don't know how old the main six are right know as well. In fact the only real reason why he's called a baby dragon is because of how long dragon's tend to live.. Which is hundreds or thousands of years. Hell if we want to be absolutely honest Spike is an adult. If you look back at the secret of my excess episode. He became a full adult in both body and age. Going by inverse dragon biology the more shit a dragon hordes the bigger, and more powerful they become. To protect and defend their horde. I'm guessing if Spike was raised by dragons, that his mother would have been giving him bits and pieces of her horde. To make sure that he wouldn't go mindless. But, looking at the dragon culture which appears to be warrior based. If he did go mindless like he did on his B-day, she probably would of let him work it out on his own. Since it's something all dragon's have to go through to become mature/ fully grown. He had to revert back to his baby form because of plot. And, to be honest "I believe" other dragons would be offended by this if Spike told them. They may even be sickened by it because viewed as a right of passage into adult hood. To not allow Spike to go through it or to reach the finish, is to force him to stay a child. If you look at it like that spike isn't a baby he's just a dawrf. If we're being 100 percent honest.