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Filly à Deux

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Sweetie Belle finally gets her Cutie mark, and it seems that everything is perfect. She soon finds out that nothing could be further from the truth.

Set a couple of years into the future.

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iCuddles

iCuddles #1 · Sep 6th, 2012 · · ·

I dont get the ending. The phrasing is wierd. One minute scootaloo was painted in sweetie belles colours, then what?

Your Antagonist

Your Antagonist #2 · Sep 6th, 2012 · · ·

That was very good, a nice descent into hysteria, however I can't help but feel as though this work is little bit incomplete. That ending wasn't solid enough, and there's still so much closure to be given to some characters, but the story, oh the story was glorious.

Tom Brady

Tom Brady #3 · Sep 6th, 2012 · · ·

That was completely and dangerously insane.

UmberRose

UmberRose #4 · Sep 6th, 2012 · · ·

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Hello, thanks for the feedback!
I see what you mean about the ending... I didn't want to get too exposition-y at the end, but maybe I erred too much on the side of caution?

UmberRose

UmberRose #5 · Sep 6th, 2012 · · ·

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Completely and dangerously insane in a good way?

chronicLurker

chronicLurker #6 · Sep 6th, 2012 · · ·

Reminds me of Perfect Blue. In a good way! Well done.

One little thing, though: "...but I felt her reassuring hand on my head as she gently stroked my mane."

UmberRose

UmberRose #7 · Sep 7th, 2012 · · ·

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Thanks! If my stories are even the smallest percent as epic as Satoshi Kon's work then I can die happy
And thanks for pointing that stray hand out, I'll get right on it.