Noice. Donovan needs to RIP AND TEAR THESE BITCHES And start to get a better life.

I really hope when the inevitable confrontation comes about that he gets a chance to explain himself (and proven to be truthful), especially when it's as he and Umbra said, his choices were:
A. Continue being ignored by the only people capable of helping him while working a thankless job and being a punching bag.
B. Accept the offer and (assuming he doesn't get discovered until later) prove himself to be more useful away from the forge as well as establish himself as someone to not fuck with.
B-1. Quit the guard and make a living with his new powers while depriving the guard of it's only blacksmith.

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So he decodes to let the evil bitch into his mind to do ehatever she wanta and be her pawn, ignoring that she's more likely than not going to fuck him over? Why not just kill himself, it'd be quicker.

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If you think about it, whether she lets him remain in control is another matter entirely, she'll still give him the power he wants/ needs anyway, he'll still likely get his revenge even if he's not the one holding the knife.

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See that alternate universe tag? Means the world and characters in my story is what I want it to be. So if I want Umbra to be somewhat considerate and not a bloodthirsty tyrant (at the moment) it's my business.

Queen Umbra
My second favorite female counterpart next to Gleaming Shield

And so it begins...
I wonder what excuse Sunbutt might try when questioned about pretty much never checking how he was doing, or when serious lack of ”harmony and friendship” towards non-ponies in her guard is pointed out?

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Why the fuck didn't he quit yet?

No seriously?

There's no other blacksmith in the whole castle.

He probabaly an A rank blacksmith judging by how well he does his job...

The chapter is titled “The Decision” but let’s be real here, he never really had a choice.

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He needs the money. No one else will hire him even though he would easily pass the background check and they have more than a few positions open. The military will accept almost anyone, whether they make it past training is another matter entirely. He could quit, but basically the only job he could get would be bounty hunting, there's no guarantee he'll even be paid for that though, and he has no reason to believe he'll get better treatment elsewhere. At least this job puts food on the table and has to provide benefits of some kind like healthcare.

When corruption will be complete I hope he will be able to change forms at will,into a darker one
Something like a Witch King, Nazgul

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Personally I don't think her being reasonable is much of a stretch. No one is 100% evil and when it comes to kings and presidents, the truth has often more to do with trying to get access to the other countries resources and lands. Winners always vilify the losers. The way to take things is by force. Military or sanctions, or international pressures. Either way your strong arming another country. You have to get your citizens to be OK with that, and so you make the victim country Evil, or backward, or say that their slaves to an oppressive ruler.

I personally like when Authors give villains actual depth. The best villains are the ones that you secretly root for. The ones that the readers like and admire. Darth Vader, Hannibal Lecter, Loki, Spike from Buffy, Q from Trek.

As for your story so far, Im liking it and you have a follower.

The Monk
“and brought her muzzle to his ear. “If you so much as hurt one little hair on her head, I’ll feed you to my cock,” she hissed.” -Some Leech

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I hope he quits being the black smith to and just decides to move out of the city and find some place to start training with his new powers.

Great Chapter! Things are starting to get very interesting, now that he's forced to choose the dark side because of the fact that if he continues to live the way he is now things won't change.

Hmm. You have my attention. Oh Writer, mine.

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DON'T WISH FOR ANYTHING!!!

I am interested

Count me in

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Perhaps I made a mistake. I've already wished for a slice of pepperoni. Only a slice.

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You have doomed us all...

I'd love for there to be a scene where Celestia and the mane six asks why he turned against harmony, and have him respond with basically a video montage of every misdeed done to him(even better if she interrupts after the first showing of a beating thinking its the only one and have him respond with some thing like "1 beating, no try every day sometime twice a day since I got here for no reason other than that I existed") Plus mention to why he never tried to tell them followed by him showing his results of him trying to.

Embrace the Darkness!

Revelry in the dark...

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*chuckles nervously* What? Did you want a piece? It's big pepperoni.

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Then be sure to say the following to them:

"If this is how you ponies, a race that basically preaches peace, love, and acceptance for all treats non-ponies, even allied ones like me before I accepted Umbra's offer, just imagine how much worse other races have it, especially the ones behind bars in this country of hypocrits and frauds. I'd be more surprised if they haven't served years in prison for something like petty theft, or if they even got a trial unlike me."

"You call me a traitor, but let me ask this, at what point in time did you give me any reason to be loyal? Loyalty is supposed to go both ways, and ignoring and treating someone like they're worth less than the air you breathe, especially when they're the only one supplying your weapons and armor isn't exactly a good way to keep them on your side. I tried, whatever diety you worship KNOWS I tried, but there's just no reasoning with you people unless it involves me groveling at your feet, referring to ALL of you as my superiors in every way, and apologizing for my existence!"

"What did I have to lose by accepting Umbra's offer? Losing a thankless job that according to most of your guards involves sitting on your ass and doing nothing! Losing freedom that I wouldn't have been able to enjoy anyway because of you racist fucks! Losing my life? I lost it the second I was transported here! You can't do anything to me that hasn't already been done in some way. To take action against me is to also say you condone everything done to me and you don't care about justice, something you claim is your duty to uphold. So which is it? Will you side with the real victim, or ignore him and force him to seek out his own justice?"

I might have gotten carried away.

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Nah, that's pretty good. Would be excellent if he was able to use his powers to show them all of their misdeeds while the monologue went on. Probably different wording, but that's just to fit the scene. Honestly, it would be cool for the Human to change Umbra to be a 'better' being... in the dark knight kinda way.
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New chapter when?

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maybe two weeks, depending on how my school stuff goes

I'm really interested to we where this goes, can't wait for the next chapter!

Darkness is the Heart's true essence.

Oh I can see myself enjoying this. A little dark story here and there is good for the soul and as I say “even someone shrouded in darkness can be the hero who saves the light” anyways I hope to see more of this VERY soon! Keep up the awesome work!

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Yes I agree with that whole heartily it tickles my guilty pleasure when the ponies see what their doing has warranted and the final breaking point of the MC in a twisted way it feels good to see them get fucked over due to their own doings!

a dead story?

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no, I'm just wrapped up in a lot of issues at the moment. Things aren't going well in the slightest. I have to worry about where I'm going to live on top of my schoolwork. I try and update as best as I can but my current living situation is subpar and destitute. Sorry for the hold up, but until my mom and I are able to find a real home to live in other than hotels or the streets, expect a slow update schedule.

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This is an understandable problem and I apologize for the inconvenience.

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No, it's not anything you should apologize for. You didn't know and I'm not gonna hold you accountable for something you didn't know.

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thank you very much :)

Wish you luck in finding a place.

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Thanks, man, I appreciate that

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And, from her reactions to how they treated Donovan, I think that Umbra is already more good-ish than normal.

Is this a dead story cuz it feel like it is

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Sorry, everything is just moving slow

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Oh sorry didn't know take your time

wow this fic is simply very good, I would like you to follow them, greetings from Mexico.

And the quality isn’t decreasing! You managed to make me like queen umbra. Great stuff

"I will eventually build up enough magic to reincarnate. Until then, I shall live rent-free in your mind. Feeding you information and knowledge."

Wouldn't the information and knowledge be the rent then?

Given how the ponies are acting, the goody goody princesses even, honestly Umbra is more of a "good guy" than any of them combined.

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Agreed.

Plus I think of the mane 6 saw any of this they would be mortified by this. Maybe even shining armor