I'm liking where this is going, you've explained his power up from normal dude to muscular guy, his weaponry, and future skillset whilst setting up that ponies were pricks for no reason. Also even setup a situation where he acquires magic and a rule 63 queen umbra for a waifu later.

Only thing is you didn't clearly explain was if the ponies had a reason for their dislike of humans, why doesn't he just head to ponyville, or which time this is that sombra came back. In the past before Luna's banishment to the moon or season three sombra. This along would answer why Celestia didn't send him to twilight and her friends.

Do later chapters address this?

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calm friend, it is only the first chapter, give him time to develop the story I am sure that all questions will be answered throughout the story, these things do not rush.

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I'll brush over that subject in later chapters, yes. I'm happy you enjoy it.

Good story. I'll definently keep this on my tracking list.

Can’t wait for more!

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Well I bet the "reason" is very stupid or garbage. And as a excuse of being Xenophobic/Racist jerks. Karma will come crashing down on their heads.

The only fun part about being this damn job is my side projects.

I think that’s a grammar mistake.

"What would you say if I offered to teach you how to use my magic?"

I would talk to Celestia and Luna about how the guards treat me, and if they can’t or choose not to do anything, then I would take the deal.

This is a remake of something?
May I see the original?

Are you going to finish this story

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I'll do my best, I'm currently in my senior year of highschool and this online school shit is so time consuming.

Donovan the Accursed... sounds familiar.

Donovan the Accursed... sounds familiar.

Don't piss off the blacksmith, it'd be a real shame if that armor broke after just one strike. A smith who likes you and a smith who hates you could be the deciding factor on whether or not your equipment does it's job. Much like a cleric, it'd be a real dick move if they ressurected the thief instead of the tank because the tank is an asshole.

What

Have not read the story yet.
But the description is very, very, very interesting.
So, I'm willing to throw away caution out the window, and follow your story.
... I just hope I won't be disappointed in a permanent hiatus, or drop of interest (like so many others).

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Bruv, this is quite accurate to the show.

It's blatant racism, the only difference here is that these ponir sthink themselves the predator and act with agression while the show's ponies think all which is not themselves as savages and react with fear and blatant distrust.

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Sorry I see Donovan and I can't help myself

You have my attention. Can’t wait for more!

Okay, I’ll follow this.
Also kinda imagining Donovan looking a bit like Isaac from Castlevania animation.

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True dat. Would be a shame if cleric could not heal ya ’cause your ”soooo faar awaay”. Or your armor fails due to not getting enough work done to it, due to constant interruptions.

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"What's that? Your golden helmet didn't protect you from that wooden club? Well, shit material aside, quality armor would be wasted on someone who not only doesn't even try to properly care for his equipment, but treats the one who makes and repairs it for a living worse than the criminals on death row."

"Your sword broke on contact with chainmail? Well that's just unfortunate."

"Remember, I'm your only blacksmith. I decide when you get your repairs and replacements as well as the quality of such. You need me a lot more than I need you. Just remember that, because I might just 'accidentally' give you faulty equipment if you keep this up. I could also fake an injury after a 'friendly' visit from you and ruin your career. Do you really want to play this game? Because it's going to entertain me a lot more than you can hurt me."

"You may be above me on the pecking order, but I'm the one who has the final say on whether or not you stay there when your job gets dangerous."

Ok. This is good shit. I'll read it. Honestly. Take the deal Donovan. Show the ponies who's boss and snap their necks

Why would you pick on your blacksmith? They have a +3 strength modifier just for picking their profession.

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this is also why you don't piss of medics or chiefs

Wow, I am loving this! I hope to see more.

Also was it just me or does Umbra honestly Care for him? Like she sounded honestly sad about what was happening to him.

Also Obligatory "Welcome to the Dark Side, We have Cookies!"

Love it already so please dont get discouraged, your doing great!

I'll watch Donovan's career with great interest.

Great start, I’m enthralled so far.

Am loving this

Ah, Queen Umbra...... nice