Donovan Crowley works as a Royal Blacksmith for the Guard. Ever since his arrival he has been ridiculed and tormented by everypony he meets. One night in his dreams, he meets an enemy once thought to be destroyed.
Also,he is a blacksmith, so he could create an enchanted/magical artifacts like ring. Of course with all the security placed inside, so it would only listen to him ,etc .Like the original One RIng or even more and better than it.
I'm mean he had to at least watched movie or read a book or played the game
Huzzah, it lives! And with some good sounding gear shown too. Almost can’t wait to see steel wreck gold plates... And ok to see that Sunbutt seems to still remember our protagonist with a smile and wave. Wonder what are her thoughts of him at the moment? Haven’t exactly seen fit to go and see in Person/pony how the only blacksmith of the guard, whom she aided a little bit (and no more),is doing.
Awesome to see an update for this story! Always love a good story of the ponies causing our MC to crack and become what they fear, it feeds that itch for some good violence. Keep up the awesome work and hope you’ve kicked that writers block aside and manage to get these chapters out more frequently again.
"Shall we continue, Mr. Bitsby?" Although she never found the time to sit down and talk with me about my grievances, Celestia was the only pony; besides Umbra, of course, that seemed to give me a modicum of respect,
Does she do it in front of others?
"Donovan, you must take your armor and weaponry to the tournament. It would make even Celestia view her Sabre of Dawn as inadequate." I stroked my beard for a moment as I pondered her words,
Sabre of what?
"Why thank you, Donovan," She smiled briefly before hardening her features. Her horn was alight in a purple aura, which hung around my body. Umbra nodded and halted her magic. "Good news, it seems that your corruption is complete. Do you feel any different?" I shook my head,
Corruption?
"Donovan," I turned to meet her gaze and noticed the lines of gouged earth in front of her hooves. Umbra's look was wild as she peered into my eyes, "I understand that you wanted to keep up with my commands. However, that was something we can never allow to transpire again."
11258374 Yes, Celestia does it in front of others. I haven't had a chance to show it yet because I'm more focused on Donovan's training. I'm trying to get better at pacing myself. Celestia's Sabre of Dawn is the fated sword she would use in her younger days during periods of war. Corruption was something I'm sure Umbra had explained in the previous chapters, but it's the process of dark magic dispelling the harmonic magic that naturally attaches itself to organisms. Finally, I understand why you may be confused at Umbra's demeanor toward Donovan, I want to establish a less abrasive side of her before I start to show the maniacal and deranged side of her.
Really hope this continues, the big payoff for me will be when Celestia learns how her ponies and sister have been treating Donovan, driving him down this path.
11432576 The latter. I still have plans to write; the current obstacle is finding the time to do it consistently. I've made good progress on Chapter 5 and have started a Chapter 1 rewrite on my other story.
11417078 I didn't know this was an issue as I'm still pretty green when it comes to writing. I appreciate the info and I'll try and implement that in my latest chapter before doubling back and doing the same to prior chapters.
I was expecting a Bastard Sword, both as it has roughly the same reach of a Long Sword and the implied insult to others!
Funnily enough, in the modern parlance (such as in the context of HEMA and such) the two terms seem largely identical -- the “long sword” absolutely does have a grip intended for primarily two-handed use and is a more late-Medieval-to-Renaissance era development coinciding with the increasing obsolescence of the shield on the battlefields of the time, not to be confused with the one-handed weapons of earlier knights and such. But that’s just my inner armchair nerd talking.
Alright new chapter!
Nice return. Though it is disappointing that he's been treated this way.
Oh come one ,why not become a Nazgul ?!
Also humans probably can when it comes to will and determination working on magic
But yeah it's also an idea how he can use his magic
Ever played Shadow of War?
Some abilities as an example:
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Also,he is a blacksmith, so he could create an enchanted/magical artifacts like ring.
Of course with all the security placed inside, so it would only listen to him ,etc .Like the original One RIng or even more and better than it.
I'm mean he had to at least watched movie or read a book or played the game
Huzzah, it lives! And with some good sounding gear shown too. Almost can’t wait to see steel wreck gold plates...
And ok to see that Sunbutt seems to still remember our protagonist with a smile and wave. Wonder what are her thoughts of him at the moment? Haven’t exactly seen fit to go and see in Person/pony how the only blacksmith of the guard, whom she aided a little bit (and no more),is doing.
I have been dying for an update to this story. I can’t wait to see the devastation that Donovan will bring to both the Solar and Lunar Guards.
Huh, I completely forgot I was tracking this story lol welp, re-read time so I can understand what's going on lol
When I read the description of what his magic aura looked like, I immediately thought he was gonna go full Palpatine lol
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I was thinking the same, but Galen Marek instead of Palpatine.
Hey, an update! I've been waiting for this.
Lovely to see an update.
Lovely to see an update
Nice.
Muhahahhaa l can't wait to see him totally cream those asshole guards....
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i kinda want to see the sun guards try stab him and their swords just do nothing to the armor.
New chapter yay, been waiting for this day.
Soon... Someone will experience humiliation beyond compare.
Awesome to see an update for this story! Always love a good story of the ponies causing our MC to crack and become what they fear, it feeds that itch for some good violence. Keep up the awesome work and hope you’ve kicked that writers block aside and manage to get these chapters out more frequently again.
Ay it back
Great chapter! You have me completely intrigued with how your portraying everyone. I'm really looking forward towards your next update. ☺
Does she do it in front of others?
Sabre of what?
Corruption?
Are we sure she’s a villain?
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Yes, Celestia does it in front of others. I haven't had a chance to show it yet because I'm more focused on Donovan's training. I'm trying to get better at pacing myself. Celestia's Sabre of Dawn is the fated sword she would use in her younger days during periods of war. Corruption was something I'm sure Umbra had explained in the previous chapters, but it's the process of dark magic dispelling the harmonic magic that naturally attaches itself to organisms. Finally, I understand why you may be confused at Umbra's demeanor toward Donovan, I want to establish a less abrasive side of her before I start to show the maniacal and deranged side of her.
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Oh ok. I think I get it now.
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I like this depiction of Umbra, she has an agenda but does seem to care for old Donny boy on some level.
I was expecting a Bastard Sword, both as it has roughly the same reach of a Long Sword and the implied insult to others!
Is his armor Full Plate from head to toe or is it the more flexible Half Plate suit?
So is he gonna go all Palps on someone in the future? It would be hilarious for him to scream “UNLIMITED POWER!”
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It is full plate and there may be a Palpatine moment in the near future.
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"Blacksteel Armor"
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I can see it now. He's talking to Umbra and tell her the tragedy of Darth Plagueis The Wise.
Doin pretty good so far, definitely would like to see where this could go. Keep it up✌
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That has to be the coolest fucking thing I’ve ever seen in my life. Like seriously I’m making a character out of that!
This story has intrigued me, will wait for more but I won’t guarantee that I’m going to be patient.
Ya I'ma need more of this there are not enough finished human becomes a villans because everyone hates him storys I'm excited to see where this goes
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Then you wanna read a manga by the name of "Berserk". Its a dark fantasy manga, that is very, very good.
Really hope this continues, the big payoff for me will be when Celestia learns how her ponies and sister have been treating Donovan, driving him down this path.
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Agreed.
And when she sees his weapons and armor are better than. What they have.
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Is this story gone or just busy to work on it?
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The latter. I still have plans to write; the current obstacle is finding the time to do it consistently. I've made good progress on Chapter 5 and have started a Chapter 1 rewrite on my other story.
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Ah gotcha.
Thanks for answering my question.
And hey at your followers of this story your alive still or have plans to work on it.
But I’m all cases thanks for responding and answering my question.
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I didn't know this was an issue as I'm still pretty green when it comes to writing. I appreciate the info and I'll try and implement that in my latest chapter before doubling back and doing the same to prior chapters.
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Funnily enough, in the modern parlance (such as in the context of HEMA and such) the two terms seem largely identical -- the “long sword” absolutely does have a grip intended for primarily two-handed use and is a more late-Medieval-to-Renaissance era development coinciding with the increasing obsolescence of the shield on the battlefields of the time, not to be confused with the one-handed weapons of earlier knights and such. But that’s just my inner armchair nerd talking.