Ivory Moon crashes into Rarity and after some bickering, they find that they may have something special. Over time, the two grow to like each other as friends… and then as even more than friends. But a week before the wedding, travesty strikes, and Rarity has been kidnapped. When Ivory Moon hears about this, he sets off on an epic quest across Equestria, searching for his beloved. His loyalty, courage, and love will be put to the ultimate test as he endures struggles and challenges that no pony should ever have to face. His legendary journey is anything but just another love story.
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As you wish
Was that a princess bride reference?
Thank you guys.
More coming soon.
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interesting
I see spike in the character list......i can only imagine him being the kidnapper, you know, jealousy.
Excellent
smoooooooth man
still smooth man, awsomenesss
I knew it was the diamond dogs in the beginning! Still awsomelly smooth ivory mostly at the proposal
I am following man
He just offeed to clean up after the CMC. Poor, foolish colt.
How sweet.
They harmed Fluttershy. SPARTANS! TO ARMS!!!!!
Third Rarity ship i have read. I really should read more of these.
forgot to add, "Men, we are going to the diamond dogs again. This time, not to shoot a sleep dark but shoot an RPG!"
still following man
2 gentlecolts on a quest, working as partners to save the lady they both love. Oh my, this sure has a lot of potential! Keep up the good work, i am loving every single bit of this story.
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Thank you. Trust me, this is where the story gets good.
aaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this is like partners till the end
Amazing fic so far! keep up the good work bud!
I'm so sorry to keep you all waiting for so long, but with Christmas stuffies, I haven't had a moment to breath. Next chapter tomorrow.
It was ok, even tho it felt....short. Of course the word count betrays me, but it felt like that.
89644 Understood. This was a short chapter, I will try to fix that for later chapters.
This is good please continue
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Love it! Moar! I DEMAND IT!
Firstly, I am sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo sorry to all of my readers and fans that it took so long to get this chapter. I had so much trouble with this one chapter, and it just wouldn't go away. Every time I tried to type more on it, I couldn't think of anything. And even now, I'll admit, this is probably the worst chapter so far. But I have to get it out of the way. I hope you guys like it, I assure you, the next chapter will get the plot moving again and I can assure you it will be better.
Its not that BAD, come on stormy charge, have more faith in you. I will tell you what i didnt like of this chapter, sorry if i am kinda harsh.
Again the story felt kinda short, and again the word counts betrays me. I notice that when you write the details regarding items and places you tend to write it in such way that you write a lot of words, but you dont give much detail. Let me give you an example
"Spike looked around, and then smiled a small smile"
Here you state what spike does, which consist in a simple gaze around the cave and then a small smile. But what you are doing is "Telling" not "Showing"
You could say the same stuff but with other words, more detailed and without you having to use complicated descriptions of the place of using hard words.
Here is something that will probably help you. It helped me wonders during the production of my upcoming fanfic: the dreams we used to cherish
http://www.waynesthisandthat.com/writefanfic.htm
Now, dont think that it is an insult, just because it is aimed to new writes, it has also a good list of words you can use to give details to situations, what to add and what to avoid when making a description of a place. Give it a try.
111233 please, don't be sorry. I have to hear criticism, harsh or not. It's the only way I'm going to get better.
I know this chapter is short. Chapter 6 was eleven pages, while this one was only eight. But nothing happens in this chapter. I kept coming up with ideas and then tossing them out. It was just one of those chapters that wouldn't go away.
But thank youuuuuuuuuu for your input. The reason I type like this is: that is how I aced High School English. My teachers loved my style of writing, so I still use it. But by no stretch of the imagination am I a pro. I appreciate the criticism and will try to put it into effect in the next chapter (which will hopefully go much, much smoother)
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Wish you the best of the outcomes then.
If Ivory doesn't survive, you won't.
I loved the lullaby. It was amazing. I wish I could come up with stuff like that. After writing Baking Perfect Pie, I've kind of gotten into this slum of getting ideas, but not writing them down. The Aura Of Music is really one of the fics that I really hope to do well... I mean, I have everything planned out, but It's a pain writing chapter three because of the fact that nothing interesting happens in the chapter. Keep up the amazing work Stormy. I hope that one day we can finally get started on 'Pink Sand'
But y'know. Whateves. I still have to figure out who I'm going to ship next... I found out one thing about me: I really don't have any other ideas for stories other than romantic ones, and even then I'm not good at writing romance stories... See how Baking Perfect Pie came out? It has a TON of flaws... But yeah, keep up the good work!
(I Lol'd at Epic Sax Spike
OK, So I haven't posted a new chapter in a while now, and with good reason. I've got quite a lot on my mind and this next chapter is just getting to the part I've been wanting to write. So I'm trying to make it really really good. But I would rather wait until Saturday to post it when people are free to read it. So, here's the deal, I promise at the very least two new chapters (three at the most) on Saturday.
Also I feel it only necessary to give credit where credit is due: Kumare Tanamaru helped me type a particular scene in the upcoming chapter nine, as well as helped type a scene in chapter two.
Again, I am sorry for the wait, but I promise, you guys won't be disappointed next Saturday.
Love the fic. Rarity ships are always good.
This chapter was awesome, can't wait for the new chapter. Also Stormy, big coincidence but you and my OC have the same first name
160688 Thank you so much for feedback, it makes it infinitely easier for me to type when I get some comments, positive or negative. Two new chapters on Saturday, possibly three if I have enough time (and if I feel like typing).
Really now? Our OCs share the name Ivory? How interesting.
161020 No you interpreted that wrong. My OC is named Stormy just like your username. I found this story while looking up my own fanfic so that I could check its stats.
YES!! Gilda to the rescue!
Lemme guess. He shows her the picture of Rainbow Dash to prove he's an acquaintence with her?
...or at least he would if he still had his bag, assuming the guards took it.
And nice Princess Bride references. Don't think you can sneak those by me.
167777 It's almost like you see through my delicately woven plot.
And can I help it if The Princess Bride is the greatest romance story of all time?
168334 I've never actually seen that movie. I only recognized the reference because of the mention of Inigo (for his famous line) and Vizzini (because I did a rap battle including him for a forum).
168344 I would highly recommend you see it. I was actually inspired from that movie to write this fic.
And wow. May I see this rap battle?
168474 Okay, I'll message you a link.