A perfectionist’s plan goes awry.
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Well, Cozy's screwed. I guess this is what happens when she gets too emotianally attached to something. The next school day will be quite awkward.
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Many people had wondered before this moment when Cozy's schemes will suffer from some fallout. Well, I guess you no longer have to wonder. Now all that's left to be seen is what the results of that fallout is.
what the heck did Diamond do to Cozy ?
It could be Cozy’s trauma and pain her both parents did to her and seeing the fate of her Equestria self must of made the Hurt grew subconsciously, affecting her emotions and actions. It’s too bad they don’t have a Notre Dame in Equestria.
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You'll find out soon.
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There is all kinds of reasons that I attempted to hint at in the story. I think it's fun to watch my readers draw their own conclusions and I appreciate that feedback. Seeing you all question it tells me that I succeeded to give you a character that you all regard as having depth. Keeps her interesting, yeah?
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Cozy really did lose her touch, she didn't say "well your phone may be off, but Cozy's wasn't"
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I know I'm coming into this way late out of the gate, but it seems kind of obvious to me at least that Diamond was responsible in some way for Cozy's parents getting exposed in abusing her. Probably something as simple as saying she looked like she'd gotten the crap kicked out of her in earshot of a teacher, who then looked further into it and exposed the whole situation.
Since I'm commenting anyway, I might as well say that the story in general is pretty well done. My main qualm would be that the Sunset legal situation is extremely weak, implausible and unrealistic. She went from arrested to 'in jail' and just stayed there for months on end. She would have been out on bail in a week at most, free to confront Cozy at any point. The case against her would have collapsed when the prosecution couldn't find any corroborating witnesses. Her laptop wouldn't have stayed in evidence after they'd copied any data they needed, so that whole thread of being incommunicado with Equestria kind of falls apart as well. Beyond that, Twilight never fixing the portal in all that time is highly implausible, especially if you just let the laptop issue slide. Being cut off from Equestria completely would most likely rate as a BIG PROBLEM for quite a few people on both sides of the portal, not even taking into account what people on the Equestrian side of the portal would be doing to fix the situation.
So, a few angles need to be tightened up, but overall it's a good premise and executed fairly well. Might toss another comment in when I'm done with it. Til then
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