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Didn't expect this to update that fast, just found out this existed an hour ago. A surprise, but a welcome one.
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We're just happy we could get some writing done today.
HAHAHAHAHAHA!!! I love what you did with Alastor! Can't wait for more from this!
Sad He got Nerfed and wish He was like from Hazbin but otherwise a good chapter.
:D
That's three syllables.
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Derp
They're waiting outside aren't they?
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He must have jumped on that, it said 3 syllables when I read it. That right there is a great author.
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We try to catch everything before posting. Some things we miss. If somebody catches something, I fix it.
Im wondering if Gilda is going to get so annoyed she takes out her frustrations on Alastor.
Put him in a bunny suit and ride him like a Harvey?
If he was trying to drag her to hell, I doubt he can be trusted very much given what people tend to try and hunt Luck Dragons down for. And it may be a bit harsh, but trusting him at all seems plain stupid. With what he tried he should be facing the prospect of being stuck in equestria as a mortal if he doesn't behave himself. Plus making aherd with him of all people is absurd given he doesn't fill any catagory of compatability with either John or Lorraine, nevermind both of them.
Speaking of herding, since both of them are in a commited monogamous relationship in a society where that isn't done them adding a third wheel seems disingenuous. I don't see it happening without cheapening what's already there.
Uuuh love Johns dialogs.
Keep up the good work, looking forward to the next chapter.
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Not sure if I can explain without spoiling things but Alastor trying to drag Lorraine to Tartarus was the equivalent of releasing a pet mouse into a room full of people terrified of mice, she's horrified at the mere implication she has the power to harm someone. This would've caused widespread panic and kidnapping a luck dragon wouldn't have sat well with those topside either. So, if Alastor wants to meet the noodle dragon, then fine, The King of Tartarus basically drafted Lorraine to deersit/reform Alastor.
Our main characters are happy with each other but it won't stop ponies shoving the idea of herds into their face whenever they step outside, the behavior of the ponies in town has been the norm for centuries and noodle dragon has already stated that she has no idea what the future holds in regards to actually starting a herd or if she even wants to.
Lorraine is an Alastor fangirl and Alastor is now aware of that and will abuse the hell out of that information for entertainment. It has also been shown that Lorraine kinda just tries to roll with everything until she's too stressed to handle it and has a breakdown like the minor one she had after argueing with Applejack.
Does that help clear up things? Sorry, I don't really see these kinds of comments on my own work so I'm doing my best to explain.
I could actually see this happening in the show.
You integrated Alastor nicely into the story with this chapter, nice work.
I wasn't so sure in chapter 1 and 2... but by this point the story has definitely gotten me to have a few legitimate chuckles that I was not expecting. Commendable work, this will definitely be getting put on my tracking shelf.
It's certainly gonna be interesting
A fanfiction
Very true
I like the incorporation of Alastor in this.
Honestly Alastor popping up was somewhat left field but I am actually fine with it. Compared to some nonsense authors pull out of nowhere this is rather tame and believable to some moderate level.