Seven years before Twilight Sparkle, a curious creature arrives in Ponyville. How will they react to each other and this strange new world?
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The first edition feeled like it was way to faster and almost no-sense at all. Now... we love this story because of its variety of content, the proper grammar and the beautiful structure of the chapters.
Nice job.
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Thanks for the comments / comparison; the first version certainly skipped a lot of the character development / world building this one is trying to provide.
Sounds like someone would've made a move on Applejack but had cold hooves.
I fell so sorry for Doug he did not deserve that I hope they convene him not to go.I hope he's going to be OK.
Glad to see Rarity has figured out he is an alien and knows nothing of the world around him.
Really don't like the local guards for their xenophobia and corruption.
Yeah I can see Pinkie saying something like that. She really doesn't think things through and honestly doesn't take others feelings into account most times.
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That's the worst thing about Pinkie: Her character is inconsistent during the whole show! Sometimes, she seems to not give a shit about someone feelings, sometimes, she looks like she actually know how to stop and take care of everyone feelings. Between two episodes, she is not even the same character :/
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This is what happens when you don't have a consistent cast of writers, but hire out for scripts.
At least Rarity's on Doug's side now.
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Yeah, bless that girl's huge, sparkling, pure diamond heart for that. Lord knows the guy needs a couple of friendly faces in a new and unfamiliar world that seems to despise him for simply being human and not being a pony instead.
Rarity, despite her faults, is one of my favorite characters in this story right now besides Applejack and Fluttershy. Seeing as how those three girls are the only three ponies in the town who have given him a fair chance and not just treated Doug as if he were merely some violent and dangerous monster that needed to be run out of town.