Seven years before Twilight Sparkle, a curious creature arrives in Ponyville. How will they react to each other and this strange new world?
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Up until now I really don't know how to feel about this fic. I mean Doug's cowardice is gross and he doesn't seem to be very smart so that's frustrating. What really get me is that this seems to be another fic were the human is like "OMG everything about Equestria is the best thing ever!" coupled with all of the passive aggressive human bashing makes me think eventually he's going to be turned into a pony. Also let's not forget how the story and the MC failed to mention how everyone except Fluttershy, Applejack the News filly and maybe Rarity all of the rest of the ponies have been straight-up douchebags.
This is beyond enjoyable I can't stop and I'm loving it .
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First, thanks for the comments! Second, I disagree with everything you said!
Okay, on a more serious note: he's not going to turn into a pony. Applejack only saw his dick when it wasn't erect, and she (mainly) has her brother to compare him to. If he seems overly in awe or impressed, and less... observant, and not omniscient? Then that's true, and maybe it'll forestall the Mary Sue complaints for an extra chapter or two. For cowardice, if you're talking about running away from Rainbow, what would you have liked him to do? Shout at her and eat a lightning bolt to the face? Then the story would have been ~15k words and completed. If about him hiding from Granny's rant, he's going to prove he can do the work the only way that matters: doing the work.
Re: Ponies being dicks: some of them have given him a fair shake. Others have gone off misconceptions of what he did or is. Sadly, they, too, are not perfect.
I swear, Judge! When dicks get hard we just can't stop! That's why it's not rape!
Seriously, he's been there less than 24 hours and he wants to fuck horses. This guy had problems long before he got to Equestria.
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My favorite part about this comment is the fact that your avatar is a picture of exactly that.
I suspect that you're rewriting this to incorporate info of the past revealed after you wrote this story the first time. Buttercup's being left behind after marrying Bright Mac.
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To be honest, I've only seen the first two and last three episodes of season nine; I really need to get around to watching the rest of it. Come on, Netflix! And while I do try to incorporate elements from the various flashbacks and whatnot into the story, I'm actually using a lot more of what I wrote in Continuity Disrupted and Errant Finale and expanding on that worldbuilding.
The main reason for the rewrite was to provide more conflict and character growth. Alas, I don't think I've accomplished as successfully as I would have liked, but certain areas are better. And it's longer, which I guess counts for something.