WARNING: My very first attempt at a fic, only one person has reviewed it, and it slightly references a .MOV. If you don't want to read utter stupidity turn away now.
Brothers Shed and Jeffrey Bradshaw are caught off-guard when they meet some rather strange people across the forest from their farm. Except, they do not seem to be “people” .
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You might want to put an actual synopsis up there. Just saying.
Yeah, asking people to read or not to read is going to get you a negative response. If you're going to write a stupid fic, you have to at least make an interesting description.
The blatant SHED.MOV reference actually kinda threw me off. It seemed utterly random and it feels like there's no relevance to the story whatsoever.
Like Ninjabrony said, an actual synopsis is probably a good idea. I didn't know what to expect.
Paragraph structure seems to be in order, although press the "tab" button when starting a new paragraph (Unless it's the first paragraph of the chapter, then it's optional).
A thousand apologies about the synopsis, I spent a half hour trying to write out one that would not spoil the chapter. I made the idiotic mistake of not putting one in at all.
I suppose I should just remove this disgrace that cannot even be merited as a story from the site?
This was actually pleasant. Thank you for putting some effort into this first chapter.
My advice: aim for creativity and originality,
For your first fanfic, great job!
1042459 Yeah, I noticed that I seem to rely heavily on references, and not so much originality. Thanks for letting me know.
1042571 Thanks for the feedback. I dabbled around with writing intros to stories that I never really got going, but other than that I have as much experience as Scootaloo does with flying.
If enough people want me to write a second chapter, I will get right to it. (Also, I want to apologize for some odd paragraph spacing at random times. I wrote this out on Notepad, and when I pasted it onto FIMFiction, the paragraphs must have moved to fit the larger size of the FIMFiction text box. Or something.
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I've never written a fanfic so... Yeah
You really should write a second chapter!
1045132 Well, I'll be sure to when I get some time. My band and I are touring around at the moment, so I don't get much time to even reply to these comments. Once I get some time, though, it'll be one of the first things I do.
(Also I'm kinda writing as I go for some parts, so I honestly have no clue what's going to happen in Chapter 2.
If you have any ideas, go ahead and post them. It would be most appreciated. 
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