I'm not even sure what the heck I'm reading. It's badly written and confusing. The grammar is bad.

“You saying your home. You are never fucking home. Always working all the time and shit” She growled as she pulled her covers up over her already concealed body. As if she has a fucking fever.

“Rainb-” She tackles me on the ground and starts punching me in the face.

Really hard. Like fight hard not ‘Let’s play wrestle’ hard

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Stopped reading. Got bored of figuring out what you're trying to point out in this story.

My first fanfic awwwww!! Criticism is well appreciated. Kinda like your first time playing overwatch. You get on Rein and think you are gonna do 300 damage but you are holding a shield till you get better.

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I...wow. Someone made a reading of my very first fanfiction? I thought... Thank you for sending it to me. Imma watch it.