Potion Mare

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Silver_Scroll

Silver_Scroll #1 · Aug 2nd, 2017 · · · Sacrifice. ·

Aaaaa, oh goodness, this chapter. Just... I did not expect this. And so well-written, too. We get answers, but also oh so many more questions. What is going on? What has already happened? I can't wait to find out.

The first two chapters grabbed my interest. Now I'm hooked.

*watches intently*

Minus

Minus #2 · Aug 4th, 2017 · · · Sacrifice. ·

This went from just being really nicely written, to hitting every single one of my interests! Now it begins, going through the agony of checking every day for a new chapter. I really can't wait to see where the heck things go from here!

Easysnuggler

Easysnuggler #3 · Aug 10th, 2017 · · · A Day In The Life. ·

Your tenses are all over the place. Pick present tense or past tense. Actually scratch that pick past tense, as hardly anyone can pull off present tense. Just search for verbs and bote the ones ending in ed, and youll see you mix he two. The story itself is ok so far.

BlacklightBuggo

BlacklightBuggo #4 · Aug 10th, 2017 · · · A Day In The Life. ·

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Thank you! I appreciate the advice, and I really hope I remedied it in the latest chapters.

Silver_Scroll

Silver_Scroll #5 · Nov 3rd, 2017 · 1 · 1 · Discovery. ·

Eeeeeeee!! I’m so happy this is getting regular updates again! And what a chapter this is. This story really has come a long way from where it started, and I’m very curious to see where it will continue to go from here. There seems to be so much more to One than we first thought... Poor Lily. Very nice action scenes once again. Anyone who isn’t caught up on this is missing out. <3

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