A long time ago, a whole manor, and everypony inside it, mysteriously disappeared without leaving any trace.
But it reappeared at the edge of the Everfree Forest, and Twilight decided to go investigate followed by her friends, only to not come back. Worried, and not wanting to miss an occasion to get their Cutie Marks, the Cutie Mark Crusaders entered the manor at the start of the night, only for two of them to be foalnapped by ghosts, and for the third to barely escape with the help of an old stallion.
Now armed with the Poltergust, a powerful tool to capture ghosts, Apple Bloom returns in the manor, ready to save everypony, even if she has to fight every ghosts in this manor.
A long night of terror starts for her.
Happens between season 2 and season 3. Also possesses some Dark and Drama
The saga now has a TV Tropes page (spoiler for the whole saga).
Now has a Narration: Link
Oddly enough, I was just thinking about Luigi's Mansion a few minutes before seeing this fic
Gasp. Astory thats not Sweetie in Dreamland? OH boy i cannot to see the whole Gooigi thing.... GoobleBloom?
This will be good. I loved that game!
So after this and sweetie belle, what is scootalo’s adventure going to be?
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Probably because Luigi's Mansion 3 is about to come. You can be sure that I will play it!
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The Gooigi, right. I will have to find something if I decide to do the other games.
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Me too! One of my favorites! I finished it at least ten times! I know it almost by heart!
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Good question. I don't have a Scootaloo story in mind right now, but I will find something once this one is finished.
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Scootaloo and Metroid with Samus or Zelda or Pokémon or Pokémon Mystery Dungeon or Earthbound or Advanced Wars or Rune Factory or Inazuma Eleven or Mario and Luigi Super Star Saga or Disgaea or Wario World or The Legend of Zelda.
Woops. Two Zelda's
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Yes, so much possibilities.
Well, this makes a Luigi's Mansion story for each of the three original Cutie Mark Crusaders. Congratulations!
This will be a lot of characters for me to remember, though.
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Since they are all named after gems or precious minerals, excepted Pearl's wife and Jump Scare, I don't think it should be a problem in the long term. Here are also some tricks to remember some of the names: Ruby and Sapphire for the twins, because they are red and blue, like in the game. Pearl, because he's as round as a pearl. Crystal Ball, because she's a medium. Golden and Silver Shoes, because they're dancers. Zircon, because he's as white as snow. Jump Scare because he likes doing "Bouh!"
Most of the names have been chosen to reflect a particularity of the equivalent portrait ghost those characters are inspired from. Others however, like Emerald or Lapis Lazuli have been chosen because I didn't have better in mind excepted random colors.
Who’s Pear? Did you forget an l?
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Yep, corrected. Thank you.
Ghost Trick
There is a "Take" near the end that I believe should be tap. I'd put the section in one of those grey boxes but I no idea how to.
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I found it, thank you. To quote a passage of the story, left click on it and a black bar with "Read", "Bookmark", and "Quote" should appear. Click on "Quote", and the passage will be put in quote in your message. Like that:
I'd do the same thing. That ghost looked pretty casual... too casual.
When I read this part, I expected Golden Hair to pull a Medusa on Apple Bloom and turn her to stone or something.
So, that's why children are especially creepy in horror movies; they're deviously playful. Also, you misspelled strength.
Chapter Name: Act 1
Just keep your eyes and ears wide open, and if you feel your fur suddenly stand on end, turn around and push the button without asking questions.
Other than that, I didn't find any other errors.
So I take it Bogmire isn't the Area 2 boss? Okay, but here's an interesting plot twist I came up with.... Actually I probably shouldn't say it, because then it wouldn't be a plot twist if you decided to use it.
I like this story so far and I can't wait to see more of it.
Hey, this story will continue after the manor right?
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And don't forget about all the blood.
I also had it in mind when I wrote this.
But now, thankfully, she didn't gain the power to turn ponies into stone when dying.
Yeah. You can't trust children in horror movies. They act all innocent, and before you know it... ☠ Thankfully, those ones simply tried to sufocate Apple Bloom by trapping her in the closet. And they really had good intentions in mind, even if it was twisted by the curse.
Also, corrected. Thank you.
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Corrected, thanks.
For Bogmire, I won't confirm or deny anything. As for your plot twist idea, you can always put it in spoilers, and like with Bogmire, I won't confirm or deny if it will be that or not.
Also, thank you. I'm glad you like it.
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Well, at first, I thought to only do the first game, but deep down, I also wanted to adapt Dark Moon, but I'm not sure yet how. But yes, I want to continue writing Apple Bloom's adventures as a ghost hunter after this manor.
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Sequel?
I am so excited I think my head might... (BOOM!!) Man thats the tenth head I blown up... this week, oh well there not hard for me to grow back anyway great story so far and I see you decided to leave out the boos and king boo.
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Probably. But I don't know if it will be an original story, or an adaptation of Dark Moon with a different plot like this one.
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), and the final boss will be more epic.
Thank you! Yeah, no Boos, King Boo, and Boolossus. No, the third boss will be worse (I don't mean more annoying like it was to capture that last bucking Boo, but I mean more dangerous. After all, we are in the MLP, what kind of ghost could do a perfect boss?
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Will there be dark magic Wraiths?
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Maybe in the last few rooms, one or two will decide to haunt the manor.
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Blood magic, Chaos magic, Etc...
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I don't think so.
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To much?
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Yeah. And I don't think there are much ghosts using chaos magic. For the blood magic, it wouldn't be useful because as a manor full of ghosts, there aren't much blood, and the blood left from the bodies of the Gem Family isn't fresh at all.
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Well there are many kinds of ghosts like animators and possessors or even poltergeists you know what I mean.
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Yep. But I was talking about ghosts of species of the MLP world. We already got earth ponies, pegasi, unicorns, griffons, donkeys, mice, bats, and you can guess that there will be some zebras.
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Necrotic or eldritch? Or is the big bad this?
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Nope and nope.
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Well how about dragons or changelings.
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Well, remember that most of the ghosts in the original Luigi's Mansion are painted by Van Gore. And in this story, you understood that Pyrite was playing his role. However, one thousand years ago, changelings weren't known, so no painted ghost changelings. After, yes, there may be some real ghost changeling poping here and there. As for dragons... Well... You will see... *smirks evilly*
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Elemental Specters?
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Hippogriff, Siren, or alicorn Ghosts?
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Yes.
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Probably, maybe, and... you will see.
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Fire, Ice, Water, Earth, Air, Lightning, Plant, Acid, FrostFire, Etc...
Also Pheonix Ghosts?
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The most basics, so already the three we see in Luigi's Mansion, as well as lightning. Maybe more later.
As for phoenix ghosts, I didn't think of them, but I don't think they would be hostile ghosts. But Pyrite may paint a few ones toward the end.
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Okay if you insist. Here it is:
After Apple Bloom captures Bogmire at the end of Area-2, the curse isn't lifted. And it won't be lifted until she finds and defeats the traitor who wished for all this in the first place.
Well for Dark Moon, King Boo was the one who broke the Dark Moon but he doesn't exist in this universe so... maybe Pyrite can take his place? As for the boos in that game, I have no idea. Maybe you could have him find an unknown, undiscovered ghostly species in Equestria and they could take the Boos place for Dark Moon.
As for how you'd set yourself up for it, I have an idea. Like I said earlier, Pyrite can take King Boo's place. I'm not sure what you have planned for this story, but I think the traitor's best saved for the final boss. In my eyes, it's the perfect climax. Apple Bloom captures Bogmire but it isn't enough to break the curse so Smart Spirit determines they have to find and defeat the one who freed Bogmire and made the wish. And at the end when Luigi/Apple Bloom confronts King Boo/Pyrite, Apple Bloom learns just how depraved and selfish a pony can get. And after the adventure is over and her friends and sister are safe, though they try to set Pyrite's spirit free, It doesn't work. He's to corrupt to even want to move on. And that is what I think would be able to pave the way for your Dark Moon Sequel plan.
I hope all this helps you and I am looking forward to area 2.
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And this makes another idea I just had very valid and doable.
So you said Pyrite is taking Van Gore's place as the one making the ghosts in the mansion. Well what if he manages to get away and goes to the Secret Alter, he'd still drop the key to the room.
Sorry if I'm inputting to many Ideas here. My brain is just teeming with ideas for how this story could go.
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I have never played Luigi’s mansion.
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Fake timberwolves, bone Hydras?
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And they are interresting theories! But there's already one thing that I can confirm to you: Pyrite will not be the final boss. Like in the game, he will be the penultimate boss. But I have something special prepared for him. As for who will be the real final boss, they are the one who talk at the end of the preview.
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None of them are planned.
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Well that's fine, it's your story, but what I've suggested still helps give you ideas for an adaptation of Dark Moon, right?
Also, are you excited for Luigi's Mansion 3? Because I am, and I don't even have a Switch.
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Yep, it gave me ideas. So, thank you!
And yes, I'm exited for Luigi's Mansion 3. I can't wait to play it. Especially with the return of "human ghosts" that were really missing in Dark Moon.
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Well, I know why this isn’t a sequel to a sweetie dreamland.
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Maybe you could toss Scootaloo into the Paper Mario or Mario Galaxy series?
Just a thought
Is this in any way based off of Sweetie's Mansion?