A changeling tell's his tale to Twilight, in the process he drinks a potion giving him emotions, and maybe to much emotion for Twilight
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the scarlet spider
im here to tell you about who i am i got edge for comedy a soft spot in the heart love romance thats were its at but what about tragedy i love stuff along with action
the scarlet spider
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just tell me what to fx and i'll fix it ok, i think thw story was all and all ok.
looks interesting, added to read later
A time frame would be nice
it seemed like he was there for a day
anyway
I loved it
This was an amazing read With a few grammical
Errors here and there, but i can look past that.
Have my favorite, and like!
This is your best story yet. Keep it up!
WOW! a story that people actually like, thank you all
900113 thank you mustache man
I really enjoyed the stroy.
But if I am not wrong the proper way of writing AJ is Applejack. Again nice story bro.
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You should make this a multi chapter story
900301
What does what mean?
900456 thanks i gife you this:
' that will be in your nightmares
900552 ok thanks ill get to work
900556 yeah, thought there was going to be a happy ending didnt you?
I almost cried
900660 wow first time thats ever happend.
900722
ee'yup
BRAVO
i believe this is FABULOUS
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901130 thank yeh, i need a minute
, ok im good
can't stop cryin.
902110 wow did i really make it that sad?
902128 No!! It's just so moving. Good message my friend. I am inviting you to join my group to write on behalf of the changelings, this is my group.
902149 wait give me a minute...*deep breath* ok im good
902163 In our universe, he will have existed, and the world will have changelings integrated into normal pony city. essentially racism in the world has gone down.
902281 ok that makes sense
902285 All stories will be integrated, the dalek invasion will have happened later after your story. When we get enough people and stories, we will set up the time line. I will be creating The Jestors story tomorrow.
902610 alright'y then
Too bad that he's dead :(
A sequel would be awesome.
This is by far one of my favorite short stories.
Good work.
There is just a small amount of fanfics that are so sad that they made me cry.
This was one of them.
902665 thank you, and yeah couldnt think of a sequel after killing him
Your probably thinking ‘of course you have feeling’s’, well I ask you what does a feeling feel like.
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Well, this is an... improvement to your last story. I can tell you tried. There's still lots wrong; mainly, you need to slow waaay down. You breeze through this whole thing so fast it's like you get scene whiplash. Remember, pacing is quite important. Also, there's still lots of errors with formatting and the general prose. Keep trying though, and you'll get it right eventually.
The story is an interesting concept. However It moved FAR to quickly. To do this idea justice It should have been like 5 times the length at minimum. And the characters are off. Twilight wouldn't just sit there writing when he's there dying not to mention that if twilight really was that opposed to her feelings for a changeling then she wouldn't have brought it up in the first place. Ramn wouldn't just spit up in public like that and blow his cover changelings may not have emotions but that doesn't mean they lack common sense. Applejack would have been very skeptical of him and would not have just let him inside her head like that. The idea is good but how you wrote it is lacking quite badly.
917510 yeah you have a point, thanks
920559 thanks
You earn my thumbs up by *Insert pun about a small amount* much. Good concept but this thing is riddled with errors and moves much to quickly.
973991 yeah i know, you know a freind of mine is actually remaking this
im woundering what he's going to do
hey man the remakes almost over, just wanted to tell you, and again thank you so much for letting me do this, its such an honor
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whoa, that coment was from a wile ago, i'll consider cheaking out the remake.
1646754 its almost done...well the first chapter, it will be out once i get the cover art.
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in which case i'll try to swing by in a few days and see it. hopefully i like your remake as much as the original
1658068 my fingers are crossed
Like some have already said, it's a good story, but too rushed. And in a way that make me think that the more you wrote it, the more you were hurrying to have ended it.
From the picture I thought the changeling will be a zipping all over the place cause of emotion overdose.
Oh god my Herat
Congratulations you are now a murder
Goat.