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Doctor Perseus

I'm just a guy who loves to write.



This story is a sequel to Doctor Whooves Episode 14: Work of Fiction

The Doctor, Twilight, and Derpy finally arrive in the Doctor's universe, and just in time for Christmas. The Christmas cheer ends, however, when a group of odd enemies attacks a cozy country hotel. In order to defeat these strange foes, Derpy will have to face something from her past and Twilight will have to help the Doctor reunite with a lost friend.

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I like this alot, please continue!

I knew the moment the women said oi she was a time lord :D

Great ending, fantastic story!
Until next adventure, Allons-y!!!:rainbowdetermined2:

an amazing ending, and a final act of redemption, usualy that sort of thing is kinda overdone but this was done quite well.

"Welcome, intruders. Allow me to escort you to the sac,"

Sounds like the antibodies XD

Uh oh.

Return of Donna Noble

I REALLY hate Derpy's mom now.

DONNA NOBLE!!! :pinkiegasp:

Cue Doctor Whooves theme:

While the Doctor was busy flirting with Twilight :twilightsheepish:, he fails to notice that something is very wrong with Derpy. :derpytongue2::pinkiecrazy:
You need to step up your game Doctor.

Somehow it seems Twilight's magic was able to absorb some of the Time Lord knowledge in Donna's head. Interesting.

"Why go by an alias, Derpy...er...Ditzy...er-"
"Please don't start calling me Ditzy, Doctor. I gave up that name long ago and I intend to keep it that way."

So that's why the New Doctor calls her Ditzy in The Good, The Bad, and the Derpy. :derpyderp1:
So Derpy's mom is an evil spider-pony thing. :twilightoops:

I really like the rapport between Donna and Twilight. :twilightsmile:

The story of the death of Derpy's father is almost beyond tragic. :pinkiesad2: Not only is his death tragic but to die at the hands of a falling piano... is almost kind of funny. :derpytongue2: That makes it even more disturbing. :pinkiecrazy:

More Donna and Twilight bonding. :twilightsmile:
The fact that the giant ice worm is called Jimmy reminds me of "The Long Game" where The Mighty Jagrafess of the Holy Hadrojassic Maxarodenfoe is also called Max.

Donna Noble is back in the saddle again! :rainbowderp: What an apropos aphorism.

Shaun in the ending here kind of seems like Rory's Dad. This story shows us how good Doc Perseus here is at writing Donna Noble, along with everyone and everypony else. I especially liked her interactions with Twilight. :twilightsmile: I look forward to the episode where Donna and Twilight are talking about the Doctor's quirks and he walks in and start laughing at him, just like Rose and Sarah Jane in "School Reunion". Donna makes an excellent addition to the story. With Donna on her way to Equestria in the next episode, she become another player in the massive multiplayer crossover that will come to an EPIC showdown with the Dark Doctor of Discord and an army of Cybermen apparently. Also, Jimmy the Worm is a very convincing original Doctor Who style villain, as well as Derpy's mother Dahlia. Her relationship with Derpy kind of reminded of the relationship between Regina and her mother Cora from Once Upon a Time. (I have to finish watching that.) This story also marks a decidedly dark turn that will carry on in the next episodes. Anyway, as always keep up the good work.

um....that will not end well if donna remembers the doctor by seeing his ponified version......

well shit, somehing seems to want donna to remember, and why is it calling to ditzy..er...derpy? eh, whatever, i like the name ditzy better for some reason. anyway, this is a puzzle fit for a yautja-timelord hybrid! -leaves to solve puzzle but manages to solve it after reading the story- stupid fourth wall! leave me be! -but why? i love to tease you.- you know, you suck most of the time, i will enjoy breaking you. -good luck with that.- ok, shut up wall. -'sigh' fine, i will shut up, for now-

whatever is happening, the main antagonist better not piss me off. i already know they will though, my comments are months off from when this was written...but i will rp anyway! ditzy, i will protect you with my life, which, ironically, never ends. i die, but i dont stay dead. once i die, my ka'kari devours energy in any form to heal my body and return me to the waking world.

shit, now we have two being with time-lord knowledge that shouldnt have it.

derpy, ditzy, it doesnt matter what we call you. your still the same awsome, adorable, sometimes clumsy, person we all want to have a role as a main character in the new season coming up. just because your mom is evil, doesnt mean you are. most beings think that i, as a yautja am a being bent on killing all in my path, while in truth, i go the peaceful route until someone, not just somepony, pisses me off, and when that happens...well, just ask slendy's skull and spine here on my trophy wall.

ditzy, if it makes you feel better, my biomask, has a lie detecter, and all of what you said was truth, and everything your "mother" said set it off hell, she hasnt said anything else and it's already going off by how her heartbeat is reacting to her lies.

-looks at derpy's mother- the doctor and i are both over 900 years old. dont you dare tell us that it was her fault. if you even try anything i even remotely don't like, i will end you and your new husband. i may be peaceful most of the time, but i dont have the self control of a full blooded time-lord. ditzy was, as the doctor said, a 5-year old pony with mental disabilities. she believed everything her father said. it makes sense she didn't warn him, hell i am guilty of the same mistake (character, not me in real life, just trying to work on my character's background), but even then, no one blamed me. so i say again, blame ditzy one more time, and you will become a pile of ash.

2844087 she will now suffer the infinite wrath of the night angel. -becomes he night angel-

huh, i like how this turned out. hell, this is way better than what i thought would have happened. in short: donna remembers, donna burns, donna saves everyone/everypony. but your ending, perseus, is infinitely better than what my mind thought would happen.

Meh id rather rose or amy than donna show up

Hmm the redemption was alittle too sudden but the rest of this was amazing i kinda dislike that the doctordonna is gone it made her more bearable :applejackunsure:

"First you two, then the Lady Time-Lord and her band of annoyances, then the hotel above us, and then-"

"Let me guess. The world?"

"Exactly! I know that sounds clich├ęd but...I don't really care at the moment."

Despite the gravity of this situation, Jimmy's rebuttal was funny as all hell. :rainbowlaugh::trollestia::twilightblush:

Now if doctor perseus can just figure out how to make her 100% Time Lord....:pinkiecrazy:

"Go to her," said the voice of Donna Noble.

reference to Fathers Day? When Pete died, Theta told Rose, "Go to him. Quickly."

hey... Ever wonder if were part of some story? A tv show, movie, fanfiction?
:pinkiegasp: that's... Interesting... But what could we possibly offer for entertainment, MM?
perhaps the conflicting emotions and that thing with Parker from down the str-
DONT GO THERE, MAX. Just don't. Were friends. That's all there is to it.
for him, maybe. For you? Nope. Nopenopenopeeeee.
she's got a point. You've been thinking about him ever since last year when he rejec-
since when have you two ever gotten along?! And I could say the same of YOU, Max. What about Doc?
oooohhhhh. BURN.
okay, okay. I'll just go buck myself, all yout two heartless beings care. *muttering*heroes, geez.
do you really think we could be part of a story...?
:rainbowderp::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: NAHHHHH
:rainbowderp::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: NAHHHHH

Snow. I hate snow. (See what I did there? Indiana jones? Snakes?)
Your a loser.
hey, we did this about twenty four hours ago to the T, so STOP.
But Max, she's supposed to be YOUR inner demon.. Not mine.
this is what you get for inventing my world, Ja-
SHUSH. Not my name,remember? Even MM doesn't know it currently, just you and me. I'd like to keep it that way. You of all people should know why.
ummmm yeahhhh what is your name, anyway?
Ive always loved the Discorded Doctor, how about you?
what? Oh, right, distract- yeah, I can't help but think he's adorableeeee:rainbowkiss:

deja vu...
yeah... Seriously
this is... Wow that's... I mean... WOAH.
Max... It's like you and you're dad... All over again...
except without the icy hands and stuff
yes well there was the brainwashing of friends.
right I forgot.
sooo now we know why Derpy was being refered to as ditzy...

yup... Definitely Max and her dad
you forget, though. I didn't know who he was until I was a teenager. I had NO ONE for most of my life, guys. At least Derpy had someone to hate for her bad luck.
Max. We've talked about this, I understand, okay?
she also made you go through that. Remember she controls what happens in our world...:trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright:
MM has a point, J.
but- don't listen to MM!! I may have controlled some but most of that was Parker. He's the bad guys. I gave you the fun stuff, the comebacks and insults and nicknames and battles.
lets talk about this later, guys. Remember, this story doesn't have anything to do with us. And people might be reading.

youre weak.
shut up, MM. It's alright. This is natural.
yeah, for weaklings.
she has a very active imagination. You know she can't shut it off. Remember that time her mother took her to the specialist?
yeah. They said she had a problem with retreating into a dreamscape when reality was too much. I loved it.
s-she's right here, guys. I can h-hear you. And my stupid condition is why your here. You help me deal with stuff without recessing into a corner of my mind only he can- into my imagination.
hey keep talking about how you cry every time a character from a story dies. Every pony would LOVE to hear it.
MM, go buck yourself.

hey, Max. Ever been puked up by a giant worm?
no... But I have been kidnapped and drugged by a giant spider.
and turned a lava dragon into stone.
right! And fought that stupid Helmet...
the Helmet of Darkness? Yeah... I miss him.:ajsleepy:
of course you do, MM, you're evil, he- no, it- was evil... To bad your not a helmet!! Lol
don't use text-speak on me, normal, unextrodinary person.
mM, don't make me get K-
okay, okay, im shutting up!

again, with the crying! When will you stop doing that?
leave her alone, MM. I saw you sniffing too.
w-Wwhat?!? Nonnnnnnooooonope never even heard of tears. Heh.
Max said nothing about tears. Heheheh.
shut up J.:trixieshiftleft:

Return of the Donna Doctor.:heart:

Here's the cast list:

David Tennant - Doctor Whooves
Catherine Tate - Donna Temple-Noble
Tara Strong - Twilight Sparkle; Thalia
Tabitha St. Germain - Derpy Hooves; Rarity; Luna
Andrea Libman - Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie
Ashleigh Ball - Applejack, Rainbow Dash
Cathy (Weins-luck) - Spike
Nicole Oliver - Princess Celestia

Special Guests:

Matt Smith - Future Doctor
Karen Gillian - Ginger Girl/Amy Pond; Opal
Arthur Duvall - Montague
Alex Kingston - Matilda
Kathleen Barr - Trixie; Chrysalis
Christopher Eccleston - Ninth Doctor
Billie Piper - Rose Tyler

...Not all of them are in the chapters, but I like covering my bases. Besides, Married Couple that traveled with the Doctor...isn't that so...pond-like?

Anypony I've missed? It was either Matt Smith or Peter Capaldi as the Future Doctor.

I thought it was a 'Lady Time-Lord' + Unicorn metacrisis

Thats what you get for flirting with twilight :facehoof:

My face throughout this chapter
~:rainbowhuh: :facehoof: :pinkiehappy: :raritycry: :derpyderp1: :twilightangry2: :rainbowhuh:

Ok great how many turn the world into a playground thing have we had like really

My faces throughout this chapter
~:pinkiehappy: :rainbowhuh: :pinkiesick: :twilightangry2: :rainbowhuh: :twilightangry2:

My face throughout this chapter


No one has put their faces throughout this chapter, so I shall.


Basically, wake up, sad memory, Shaun telling Donna to go, and then the end. Happy tears all around!

Twilight let out a series of hoarse breaths.

... :rainbowkiss:


... :rainbowkiss:


Cause she's a... HORSE!!! HAHAHA!!!


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