Sunset stood on the edge of a bridge that overlooked Canterlot City, a completely dull look in her eyes as she watched the people go about their business. All of their happy cheers and warm smiles gave Sunset a rather strange feeling, like she was a ghost among the living. A sad smile crossed her face as the irony of such a thought sunk into her mind. She cast her gaze to the clear night sky, drinking in the natural beauty of the stars and full moon.
So pretty, she thought as she took off her coat letting the winter chill caress her body as her gaze shifted to the dark water in the stream below.
It's like a giant mirror.
Immediately, memories of Equestria jumped to the front of her mind.The time she spent with Princess Celestia, learning all kinds of spells as her personal student. All the late nights she had a nightmare as a foal and snuck into the solar Monarch's bedroom for comfort. There was even a time she helped the Princess pull a prank on her personal aid, Raven, that backfired brilliantly. Then she remembered how it all ended, and a grimace crossed her face. At that point, she didn't need anymore reasons to go through with her decision. It was funny in a way, not everyone knew how their story was supposed to end, but now that Sunset found herself closing in on her own final chapter, she found that there could be no better way for it to end.
Not wanting to have any regrets, she leaned up against the bridge's guardrail and yelled, "I AM NOT ANON-A-MISS!!!"
Her voice echoed across the otherwise silent landscape, taking her last display of defiance with it. With all of her obtainable regrets fulfilled, she climbed atop the railing, took one last look at the sky and closed her eyes.
It's a beautiful night to die.
She jumped.
Or at least she tried to. At the last second a feminine voice screamed and Sunset felt the kind of pressure around her chest that only a pair of arms could give as she was slowly pulled back onto the safety of the bridge. With a loud flop, the two landed back on solid ground, Sunset's savior panting heavily for her efforts.
"Whew! That was close!" she said, voice shaky as she continued to hold Sunset tight. "If I had been just a second late-"
She finished her thought off with a shiver.
"Anyway, are you okay Sunset?"
The girl in question laid there atop the other girl, her mind running at a million miles an hour trying to piece together what had just happened. Slowly, she lifted her head to get a look at her rescuer only to be met by the mismatched golden eyes of the last person she expected to see.
"D-Derpy?"
The grey girl gave a weary smirk and said, "That's my name."
Sunset blinked, her head still a mangled jumble of emotions slowly processed what was happening.
"B-But why?"
"Huh?" Derpy asked, head tilted in confusion.
"W-Why did you save me?"
Derpy gave Sunset a gentle smile and said, "Because you're not Anon-a-miss."
As Derpy's words sunk in, the shield Sunset held over her heart finally broke. Right there, in the arms of someone she had treated worse than Fluttershy in her darkest days, the damaged girl cried. Cried in shameful sorrow for her situation and what she tried to do on this god forsaken bridge, but also in joy. Joy that in spite of everything, there was at least one person who believed her, who knew that she wasn't Anon-a-miss. As the tears fell, Derpy held her tightly, giving her both the warmth and security she desperately needed. As she did, a single thought ran through her head.
I don't know who you are Annon-a-miss, but when I find you, I'm gonna make you pay for what you did to Sunset.
"D-D-Derpy?" Sunset sniffled.
"Yeah?"
"Thank you."
"No prob," she smiled. "Now, think you can walk?"
Still shaking, Sunset nodded then rose to her feet.
"At'a girl," Derpy smirked as she got to her feet."Now c'mon, lets get out of here."
Again, Sunset nodded.
With that, Sunset put her jacket back on and the two girls made the long trek down the path off of the bridge and into a nearby parking lot where a light grey bug with blue bubble decals on the sides greeted them. Without saying a word, Derpy opened the door for Sunset before quickly walking around to get into the driver's seat. Not even a second after putting the key in the ignition, the gray teen turned on the heater, more for Sunset's benefit then her own as the poor girl had been shivering the whole way. Granted, how much of that shiver was from the cold was something Derpy wasn't willing to explore if Sunset wasn't. For a while the two sat in silence, basking in the warm air Derpy's car produced, but eventually, the awkwardness of their situation became too much for them
"So," Derpy said, tone forcefully cheerful. "Where do you live?"
"Huh?" Sunset mumbled.
"Where do you live?"
Sunset grimaced, then in a tone that was a strange mix of shame and resolution said, "The corner of 4 and 7."
Derpy rased a brow, confused.
"Like 4th street and 7th street?"
"No," she answered, trembling as she fought to hold back tears of shame. "Dock 4 and 7."
The awkward silence from earlier returned with a vengeance as Sunset turned her attention towards the passenger side window when the implications of Sunset's words sunk in.
No way. Are you kidding?
"Well," Derpy said, aggressively shifting the warmed car into drive. "That makes this a bit easier."
"W-What?" Sunset asked, jolted out of her doldrums by the vehicle's sudden roar to life. "Where are we going?"
"My place, silly," Derpy smiled. "I'm not gonna save you just to let you freeze to death in some warehouse."
"Y-You really don't need to do that," Sunset stuttered, shocked by the girl's act of kindness after being denied such a curtesy for so long.
"Nonsense, I've got more than enough room."
"B-But-"
"Nope, my car, my rules. And I say you are going to sleep in a warm bed in a nice safe house. You got that?"
"Y-Yes ma'am....."
With that, a smiling Derpy and thoroughly floored Sunset drove off into the night, but as the two closed in on what was going to be the first comfortable bed in days for one of them, the other was silently seething.
When I find you Anon-a-miss, I swear I am going to end you!
A Sunset & Derpy story!? Where is chapter 2!? This has my full attention!
Angry Derpy is scary Derpy. II approve!So does she!
Prologue, not prolog
You've got my attention! I am anxious to know what's next!!!
An Anon-A-Miss story with Derpy?
An interesting start. I'll definitely keep track of this one!
Sounds like there be no happy ending for the Rainbooms.
Wow. not even up for a day and it's already this popular? Hell, no complaints here. Hope you all like my take on the Anon-a-miss story line.
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Thanks, I'll fix that when I get the chance.
Awesome looking story so far, can't wait to see what happens later into the story.
Hope ya'll have a wonderful day.
Sincerely,
Sar Meister
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This stuff got me dying of laughter
Great story
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You're very welcome & I hope to see chapter 2 soon, but do take your time. I can wait.
I like it!
Is Derpy gonna have to choke some bitches?
Anyone else getting a fluffle puff EQG story vib from this? not that it's a bad thing!
Mathematically speaking, there has to be a good Anon story.
Sadly, I haven't found it. Have a red thumb for the bland bandwagon material here.
When derpy gets mad u better run.
There's only one 'n' in "anon". And it's "a-Miss", not "o-Miss"
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Have you checked out Myriad Thoughts by Tale Swapper ? Its a really good. Atleast for me it is.
It’s spelled “Anon” not “Annon.”
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It's actually impressive seeing people make errors like that.
You'd assume that words consisting of less letters than a hand has fingers wouldn't be misspelled, but people here still manage to bungle such simple things.
>mfw displaced writer thinks wide receivers being tackled is a sack
>mfw self-insert "author" manages to misspell the word "this"
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Maybe, but at least I'm stepping away from using the shadow bolts or the dazzlings. Seriously, those characters get used in these things so frequently that they almost make one fanfiction singularity.
Fuck 'em up, Derpy, fuck 'em up!
*Than.
Anon-a-miss.
Only two 'n's, not three, and only one 'o' - the second one in the quote above should be an 'a', which you got correct the other times you used the username.
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That’s our Derpy! She’ll save Sunny and mess em’ up good.
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I know I got the user name wrong. I do intend to fix it when I have the time but in the mean time, please be patient.
I give you points for using the often overlooked background characters as Sunset's rebound friends instead of the Dazzlings and Shadow Bolts. Especially DJ-PON3-she's awesome.
However, please don't be too mean to the Rainbooms or vilify them. In their defense the whole Anon-a-Miss comic was a horribly written story. Please make your story more then just another copy and paste "Reason You Suck" speech to the girls.
And far too many Anon-a-Miss response/"fix" fics make things worse for the characters doesn't really address or 'fix' the issues the story itself had. How does making the situation even more unpleasant for the characters suppose to make things better?
so if this was just posted,, why i s the chapter publish date in june?
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Okay; I wasn't meaning to be rude, but I apologise if I came across that way.
Go on, you have my attention. Couple of spelling errors that other commenters have pointed out, fairly fluid chapter, and bonus points for Derpy. I shall impatiently await the next chapter!
Man... why are there not one but two fics in the Feature box about Sunset attempting suicide?
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You know, maybe they'd feel like improving more of you didn't come across as a dick, Seabreeze.
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*If, not *of. You managed to provide me another example, so thanks for proving my point.
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Seabreeze?
when's the next chapter?! I LOVE IT!
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Well they do deserve some anger because they did suck. The problem is when a story goes out of it's way to punish them too harshly I.E. expelling them or when they make them out of character in order to make those harsher punishments more understandable I. E. Writing them as violent and having them get revenge on Sunset with force, unlike their character would normally.
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http://mlp.wikia.com/wiki/Seabreeze
A fitting comparison, I thought.
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Huh, I did misspell that, completely unintentionally. So sorry for making one minor mistake that somehow invalidates my whole point.
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i left the chapter on the back burner for a while and only just recently got it officially published.
"Minor mistake" he says. You managed to misspell a word consisting of only two letters.
You know you're on a site dedicated to writing, yes?
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Okay pal, WHAT IS YOUR DEAL?! I've only gotten the first chapter of this thing up and you've ripped into me for the same issue for the past couple of days it's been up. It's fine if you want to point out a few errors I've made, but dont give me this shit!
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Amen! You tell him, Arc!
Dude this is awesome! I love me a great Anonamiss fic, and this looks so promising. Great job!
This is good , I look forward to seeing this story’s arc ... so MOAR PLOX :D
But honestly well written
A week later and it's abandoned, is my prediction.
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Is that a challenge my good sir?
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More of something that seems to keep happening.
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I know context is a really complicated thing that can't be taught, but did it occur to you, just once, that my response wasn't directed at you?
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"LeaVE ArC aloNe!"
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I can't help but find it amazing that even while attempting to defend your case, you still dig yourself into a hole. Allow me to show how things look from my perspective.
1. You give me grief over a small, easily mandible error that should've began and ended with it being mentioned.
2. You claim I have no dedication to writing even though I have a YouTube channel dedicated to help other fanfic writers improve themselves and by extension let's me look at my own works in a different way.
And 3. All of your comments are written in a condescending manner that makes it seem like you don't want to take responsibility for your trash talk and instead want to dump the blame onto the guy you're harassing.
If you want to point out the flaws in my work, that's fine. But do it as a means to help improve the story, not to just be a dick.
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The hell is a "mandible error"? Are you trying to spell *manageable?
That being said, because I hurt your fee-fees, I'm making a moot point? Is that what you're saying?