Some things do NOT match. Oil and Water, Oil and Fire, Alcohol and Bets, and Alcohol and Magic. Sad to say, was it the latter two combinations that occured one fateful night when a sad man goes to a bar for and meets a sad, and strange, woman.
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OMG an alicorn male story ? I have read a bit about alicorn female but only once of an alicorn male story !!!! You have my attention unless he become an alicorn female in that case I'm ditching this story faster than lighting strike. Anyway the story seam good. I want more :)
8042196 I am very glad you like it. Wonderful when the first reviewer is someone positive. And you are the first reviewer on any of my fics on this site. This is my first, read approved, story on Fimfiction. I am currently working on chapter 2, chapter 1 is finished but I need to make some refinements to it.
And while it may be a spoiler so will I write the answer to your inquiry here. In a spoiler tag.
There is no Transforming A Male into A Female concepts here, except for maybe future ponies whose ancestors got scrambled because of time travel effects. But that's less Transforming and more Alternative Universe.
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8043377 Edited, along with other spelling errors I discovered, thank you for notifying me.
great opening love it
8046539 Thank you, glad that you enjoyed it.
This is a promising story so far, scrunching the Faustecorn herself is something, and make a promise to get her back home is very interesting. I can't wait to see what will happen next, we don't exactly know how he is supposed to to find a way to get her to come be welcome back to her world. I am sure this will be a very interesting story.
Oh, by the check out my DeviantArt and let me know what you think of it...
Great story so far really like it cant wait for teh next :D
Before I read this, what is the Dark, Horror and Gore tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
8047305 Death, war and blood. I am going to be describing the damages of dead, dying or battling beings. I might add more of it later on but that's what I got planned for the first ten or so chapters.
8046738 Thank you for your comment, it was wonderful. And so is your art. I find most of your work to be very good, and some exceptionally wonderful. I am an artist myself, went to art school, and I use sketches for ideas for my own stories, I will be posting some of them on my blog after I post the second chapter, I am currently working on chapter two, chapter one is just being edited a bit at the moment.
8046965 Glad that you enjoyed it. Hopefully I will keep up to your standards.
Weirddddddd.
being a sociopath I did not enjoy this chapter, emotions were flung around with no rhyme or reason, then for seemingly no reason at all sex was had, I greatly disliked this chapter. and yes I am a stick in the mud, sue me
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so for everything being all chaotic and making no sense what so ever i have one simple explanation.....ALCOHOL!
I don't tend to be to harsh on this, as it's a dead dialect, but there are specific grammatical rules on where to put thys and thous, mines and thines, and the like. Also the "be"s you use make her sound like a strange pirate. I'm not saying older dialects didn't use be's in that manner, but I don't feel like they're accurately used in this context. If you were trying to portray a rough warlike leader rather than a monarchal highclass ruler, I'd say you got pretty close.
I remember finding an article that laid out the rules excellently (I think I found them on this website, actually)
this is not anywhere near as comprehensive, but if you're interested check the grammar section on this, https://www.uni-due.de/SHE/HE_ShakespeareLanguage.htm#grammar
for a better source I just found, check this; http://unenlightenedenglish.com/2009/07/thou-thee-thy-thine-ye-shakespearean-english/
Your grammar is terrible and your grasp of The King's Merry Olde English is almost as bad, but there is enough here to keep me interested. I hope the grammar improves going forward.
I think you meant now instead of nwo, but I’m not sure, either way it’s still a great chapter.
...grammar definitely needs work, dialogue is blocky, and dry, plot is rushed...yep, I'm hooked.
Buuuuck, after all that she doesn't get to see her home, that's... a good way start story... huh gottagobye.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=Sg14jNbBb-8