Some things do NOT match. Oil and Water, Oil and Fire, Alcohol and Bets, and Alcohol and Magic. Sad to say, was it the latter two combinations that occured one fateful night when a sad man goes to a bar for and meets a sad, and strange, woman.
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Added the missing music video, hopefully you will enjoy the destruction, carnage and despair with this fitting music.
Well that's one way to make a really spectacular entrance along with a horribly bad first impression to you your girl friend's children. Not only will he have to do an up hill battle to get their trust, be become their step dad, but now they can actually "reasonable" argument to their mom as to why she shouldn't hitch herself with him. Still this was a really good second chapter, and it makes me hungry for more of this. Looking forward for the next chapter then.
8050468 Making some rather wild assumptions there buddy. The relationships haven't even been established, the only thing that Laura and the poor sod has been through is a one night stand, not a dating service.
I like this idea and look forward to the next chapter.
8052612 Glad to hear, Chapter Two will take a bit of time though, I am hopeful that I will have it up and running before the end of the month however.
bit confusing and sad but goodjob I guess
Prince of Terror indeed.....
What a cruel twist of events... as the saying goes: power rarely comes without a cost....
And this time the price is grievous indeed.....
Must say......very nice choice of music for this moment.
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Thanks, I try to fit in the music into the mood of the scene and not just randomly pick a song. I want to make it possible to feel the music as you read and get a sense of how it feels to imagining that scene, with the picked music.
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If nothing else the music hit me abit more since I am a fan of the ME-verse.
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Heh yeah, that piano music is both epic and heart-aching.
The constant shifting in the styles of english are very jarring. At one point you have some correct forms of archaic english mixed with phrases and conventions of modern day english. The biggest issue is inconsistency. I see thee's and thou's, dost's and hath's, but I also see does's and have's. Also, unfortunately, your thee's and thine's get mixed up quite often.
I don't think I can read more, it's just too jarring, but thank you for reigniting my interest into archaic english dialects. I'm going to be researching them for a few hours now at least.
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Who ever down voted this should be hung as karma. They were stating an opinion and had very good reason to dislike reading the fiction. I personally think archaic language like this is hard to read, but I find the story fun and entertaining. So I slog through the inconsistency. But, this is a perfectly valid complaint and reason to not read the story.
'strangeth' has never been a word in any language. That said, the verbal imagery was excellent to a point I have rarely ever seen.
Thy grasp on old speak is little. However, thou story is impreessive to the point we do not care.
Beside, most people cant do old speak really good. Not even me.
ok ya me atrapo
Hoooop, that turned super dark, super fast.
Grim as hell, but i like the old fey tales vibe, gotta be careful what you wish for.
Jesus Christ... Zero to ten in about two seconds. That got really dark, really quickly
.......I AM INSPIRED! MORE BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD! *begins to vigorously write in own fanfiction with loads of gore*
Beginning of chapter: everything seems to be great! Wonder how the MC will come in?
After reading:
That went dark pretty fast i must say.
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Very fast
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Indeed, I don't think I've read such disturbing details of gore, brutality, and death on this site since.... Mordane Stronghoof probably? And Hell Followed got pretty close. Damn it might have been a recent Cupcakes-esc fic but out of a hundred I can only think of four where the author got close to this level.
Bravo dear author btw. You made my personal top on the capacity for brutal gorey descriptions. I can already see the Doom levels of blood-spatter that scene would have looked like in a movie or game.
Wait. Hold up. Clever Clover? As in, who would become Clover the Clever? As in, Twily's ancestor? Ooooooh boy, if so shit just went wonk ways very early on........
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Clover the clever isn't twilight ancestor at best it's STAEswirl
May you live in interesting times..
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Some say it's a blessing