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Deflated Apples

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Scaramouche

Scaramouche #1 · Apr 7th, 2017 · · ·

Interesting that several folks are disliking this because it's well written despite a few odd mistakes which are typical and nothing to worry about.
It's an interesting idea to emasculate Mac, since he's the single most masculine character in the entire show. By the weakest characters too. I imagine that's what is shocking most readers, as it is a reversal of roles that they are unused to.
As a reader, I congratulate you on trying a different tact with an idea that could simply have been sex and turning it into something unfamiliar, unnerving but entertaining at the same time.
All good things

Starblade

Starblade #2 · Apr 8th, 2017 · · ·

I agree DuskHoof. This story was very well written. I think everyone just hates how it ended. Although they might be more lenient with you if you put up a "Dark" tag in the description.

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