The Battle for Love: Kindness

Thomas, a down on his luck, average brony, will be quickly pushed into the world he dreamed of, and a world he must stop from happening.

First Part of The Battle of Love

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Chapters (2)

Chapter 1:Thomas · 4th Jul 2012 · 2,008 words
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Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger · 4th Jul 2012 · 1,256 words
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Mr Ignorable

Mr Ignorable #1 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger ·

Mmm, you must not be from around here huh? And if you are, you do know that this stuff is generally looked down upon correct?

Okay story telling and grammar. So there aren't a whole lot of complaints on my end. But be wary for a flackstorm heading your way.

The Poster

The Poster #2 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1:Thomas ·

interesting

Thomas R

Thomas R #3 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger ·

858046 it worries me when you say that stuff like this is looked down upon, explain please

Mr Ignorable

Mr Ignorable #4 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger ·

858560 Welp, people hate whiny human characters. There are plenty of them in the in this fandom as it is. But I'm not gonna judge your's because it seems to have half-way decent grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Usually when I find one of these things I pound it into the ground so hard with my hate frying pan that the author cries themselves to sleep (I think).

needless to say, I've got my eye on you.

Thomas R

Thomas R #5 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger ·

Ahahahaha, aha, oh, that sir, was funny. To be honest I wasn't trying to make him sound like a bitch, just a bit emotional is all. He gets tougher as it goes on, but thank you for mentioning that. When you said that I thought you meant people hate stories like this, that had me worried. But thanks again.

PonyManne215

PonyManne215 #6 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger ·

i.imgur.com/CvMSb.jpg

Why?! Oh, and good luck...

Applebrap

Applebrap #7 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger ·

And now the obligatory
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I do like this story though, I can relate to Thomas in the sense I would probably faint in that situation

Thomas R

Thomas R #8 · Jul 5th, 2012 · · · Chapter 2: Meeting a Stranger ·

Ok, both of those were funny, and dont worry, its not self insert, Thomas is a character that I use in most of my stories, we look nothing alike. And yes, it gon git guuuuuuud

Alpha Scorpii