You shifted into present tense when you started the sex scene there for quite a few paragraphs. You got back to using past tense shortly after, but it should probably get a pass over here sometime to align your tenses.
As for what's going on, my money is on pegasus or alicorn. Leaning towards the alicorn, though, as there've been signs of it, and cliches don't really mean much so long as you're enjoying the writing itself. Seems like plenty of folks are enjoying the story, too.
Discord's visit was also, ah, interesting. As he generally is.
I'm just happy his first time as a woman was with his girlfriend. It was a rather nice bonding moment between the two. And I don't think RD will be able to keep pretending they're not serious for long
8209057 It's his story, and things may not necessarily follow as the characters believe them to. Nothing is set in stone until it actually happens. Sides, we have no evidence to counter that alicorns would also gain said density. Events, generally, have led towards the belief that alicorn, despite the initial thoughts stated by Gyvon, could very well be the end result. Besides, it's also stated the specific type of pony would not manifest until near the end, so it could conceivably occur then. Who knows?
Now that Ben has all the plumbing, they could have a big orgy with him in the middle. E.g. lay him down on his back on a couch or table. One mare crawls underneath him and takes his ass. One stands behind him and pushes into his pussy. One in front going down his throat. One on top riding him and fucking his breasts. If there's anyone else left he still has two hands he can use. Not to mention they could take turns to let even more ponies in on the fun. I'm pretty sure he'd pass out from pleasure in that situation.
I'm really glad the anal virginity topic was mentioned. I of course really loved the clop to that with Twilight, but also worried about poor Rainbow Dash not getting a first go at it and instead hoped she would get his normal virginity instead. I'm glad exactly that happened and therefore really loved that chapter and also hope to see more of these two!
You know... speaking of world-building, there's one subject, and two ponies I'm really curious about just what they're like in this universe.
Mr. and Mrs. Cake.
Same deal for Cadance and Shining Armor, I guess, but the Cakes just have 'happily married' as such an integral part of their character, that I'm genuinely curious how that actually works in a sex-crazed hermaphrodite version of Equestria.
Surprisingly, it was Sunset who answered. "A sheet of star-silk the thickness of the average cotton t-shirt is strong enough to stop a fifty-caliber bullet, easy."
That’s pretty impressive, but at a minimum you’re getting broken ribs because even if star-silk stops the projectile, the energy still has to go somewhere. If it’s .50 BMG, your organs are gonna get turned into jelly by 13,000-15,000 ft-lbs of energy. On an interesting note velocity (a function of powder and barrel length) has greater impact on penetration than size.
I feel the rest of the Mane 6's interactions with Sunset was... kinda flat. Considering Starlight is there, it felt hollow the way Rarity spoke about Sunset.
Also, Ben does realize flight is still an option if he/she ends up a unicorn right? Starlight can easily show him as we saw her using her magic to levitate in the season 5 finale
8324696 Yeah. If you look at NIJ ratings for body armor all the testing specifications are done with M80 7.62x51mm NATO FMJ (.308 Winchester) rounds. The same body Type III hard plates won't necessarily stop 5.56x45mm NATO out of a standard 20 inch barrel*. Even the Type IV hard plates are rated to stop .30-06 M2 AP rounds. Keyword being .30.
Basically there's a cult (especially in the US) both in the civilian and military world that worships the idea that nothing less than .30 caliber will suffice, even if you can show a smaller cartridge is more effective (ballistically or terminally) with empirical evidence. While the idea of adopting a 6-7mm cartridge or even smaller has been around since the late 1880s, we stuck with larger cartridges until the 1960s (or 70s if we're talking about Russia) due to politics, logistics, cost of adopting a new cartridge and the all powerful .30 caliber cult.
In general to pierce armor there's 2 ways to to it if you're using an inert projectile (like most rifles.) Velocity and hardness. velocity is achieved by using more powder or a longer barrel or both, but if your barrel is too long you actually start losing velocity to drag as the expanding gasses aren't anymore. Hardness generally means a hardened steel, tungsten or depleted uranium penetrator. Mild steel generally doesn't pierce armor all that well, but is still (in US jurisdiction) considered to be "Armor Piercing."
* 20 inches used to be considered standard for .223 Remington/5.56x45mm. IIRC penetration of Type III plates could be achieved even with 55 grain lead/copper projectiles without a hardened steel penetrator.
"We don't talk about the Cheesecake Debacle," Rainbow said in a hollow tone. Her face had this haunted thousand-yard stare going on. Twilight suppressed a shudder, and even Spike winced in sympathy.
First, super props for the Q reference.
Second, I was surprised there was no hymen break in there.
Third, this thing is littered with typos. Do you need a proofreader?
I've been enjoying the heck out of this story. Looking forward to the conclusion, man!
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I second that motion; I'll gladly be a proofreader for you!
This was awesome! I'm betting he becomes a Pegasus. Huh male discord wasn't expecting that.
You shifted into present tense when you started the sex scene there for quite a few paragraphs. You got back to using past tense shortly after, but it should probably get a pass over here sometime to align your tenses.
As for what's going on, my money is on pegasus or alicorn. Leaning towards the alicorn, though, as there've been signs of it, and cliches don't really mean much so long as you're enjoying the writing itself. Seems like plenty of folks are enjoying the story, too.
Discord's visit was also, ah, interesting. As he generally is.
Interesting chapter, was expecting to see Erie though.
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Keep looking. We're a good ways away from the end.
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Odd. I looked for red marks last night. Only ones I left were names.
I kind of want him/her to become a Pegasus
Alicorn
I'm just happy his first time as a woman was with his girlfriend. It was a rather nice bonding moment between the two. And I don't think RD will be able to keep pretending they're not serious for long
I forget has or will his voice change?
8208644 wouldn't alicorn still require the denser bones of an Earth Pony?
8209057 It's his story, and things may not necessarily follow as the characters believe them to. Nothing is set in stone until it actually happens. Sides, we have no evidence to counter that alicorns would also gain said density. Events, generally, have led towards the belief that alicorn, despite the initial thoughts stated by Gyvon, could very well be the end result. Besides, it's also stated the specific type of pony would not manifest until near the end, so it could conceivably occur then. Who knows?
Only Gyvon, really.
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Mostly homophones or misplaced apostrophes and missed capitalizations.
There's also, "wa" "burried" and "lngth"
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It has changed
Now that Ben has all the plumbing, they could have a big orgy with him in the middle. E.g. lay him down on his back on a couch or table. One mare crawls underneath him and takes his ass. One stands behind him and pushes into his pussy. One in front going down his throat. One on top riding him and fucking his breasts. If there's anyone else left he still has two hands he can use. Not to mention they could take turns to let even more ponies in on the fun. I'm pretty sure he'd pass out from pleasure in that situation.
Alicorn.
Yay, an update! I'm enjoying your story and cant wait to read more!
Go pegacorn
I'm really glad the anal virginity topic was mentioned. I of course really loved the clop to that with Twilight, but also worried about poor Rainbow Dash not getting a first go at it and instead hoped she would get his normal virginity instead. I'm glad exactly that happened and therefore really loved that chapter and also hope to see more of these two!
Alicorn
You know... speaking of world-building, there's one subject, and two ponies I'm really curious about just what they're like in this universe.
Mr. and Mrs. Cake.
Same deal for Cadance and Shining Armor, I guess, but the Cakes just have 'happily married' as such an integral part of their character, that I'm genuinely curious how that actually works in a sex-crazed hermaphrodite version of Equestria.
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The Cakes: Nothing's different, they just have extra parts
Cadance: Oh, just you wait :P
I can think of worse things to be addicted to, and this chapter was quite enjoyable.
As for the outcome, I’m thinking either pegasus or alicorn.
I really Ben becomes a Ailcorn ,This was a awesome read.
Q-in-a-fursuit .
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I died
That’s pretty impressive, but at a minimum you’re getting broken ribs because even if star-silk stops the projectile, the energy still has to go somewhere. If it’s .50 BMG, your organs are gonna get turned into jelly by 13,000-15,000 ft-lbs of energy. On an interesting note velocity (a function of powder and barrel length) has greater impact on penetration than size.
I'm hoping for alicorn, just for the shock factor, but pegasus seems to be a nice choice for Ben.
I feel the rest of the Mane 6's interactions with Sunset was... kinda flat. Considering Starlight is there, it felt hollow the way Rarity spoke about Sunset.
Also, Ben does realize flight is still an option if he/she ends up a unicorn right? Starlight can easily show him as we saw her using her magic to levitate in the season 5 finale
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Huh, I didn't know that last bit.
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Yeah. If you look at NIJ ratings for body armor all the testing specifications are done with M80 7.62x51mm NATO FMJ (.308 Winchester) rounds. The same body Type III hard plates won't necessarily stop 5.56x45mm NATO out of a standard 20 inch barrel*. Even the Type IV hard plates are rated to stop .30-06 M2 AP rounds. Keyword being .30.
Basically there's a cult (especially in the US) both in the civilian and military world that worships the idea that nothing less than .30 caliber will suffice, even if you can show a smaller cartridge is more effective (ballistically or terminally) with empirical evidence. While the idea of adopting a 6-7mm cartridge or even smaller has been around since the late 1880s, we stuck with larger cartridges until the 1960s (or 70s if we're talking about Russia) due to politics, logistics, cost of adopting a new cartridge and the all powerful .30 caliber cult.
In general to pierce armor there's 2 ways to to it if you're using an inert projectile (like most rifles.) Velocity and hardness. velocity is achieved by using more powder or a longer barrel or both, but if your barrel is too long you actually start losing velocity to drag as the expanding gasses aren't anymore. Hardness generally means a hardened steel, tungsten or depleted uranium penetrator. Mild steel generally doesn't pierce armor all that well, but is still (in US jurisdiction) considered to be "Armor Piercing."
* 20 inches used to be considered standard for .223 Remington/5.56x45mm. IIRC penetration of Type III plates could be achieved even with 55 grain lead/copper projectiles without a hardened steel penetrator.
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I only understood half of the terminology, but I get the point. Thanks for the explanation :)
Was that a fairly odd parents reference?
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Yes it was
You would think they would take pictures of his transformation stage by stage right?
Rereading this and gotta say love the sex and how the characters interact also felt the relationship with rainbow dash is pretty sweet
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