Rend is your basic Changeling soldier, albeit a rather tough one. Loyal to his Monarch- Queen Chrysalis- and willing to die for her and the good of the hive.
That loyalty was tested, though, when Princess Cadence and Shining Armor blasted almost every single Changeling out of Canterlot with Love Energy.
Almost every Changeling
Rend has the misfortune to be caught between a building when the blast hits him- nearly killing him. That was bad enough. Things go from bad to terrible when he tries to feed and a Royal Guard pony intercedes.
Things go downhill from there.
Chapters (3)
Seems to be going well, I saw no typos or errors and the story has a good starting plot. Not bad for your 1st story?
7721484 Thank you! I've written stuff before, but this is my first MLP story, and the first fanfiction thing I've ever written.
Good good
7722016 Thank you! :D
It's good a cliffhanger though but good.
7722008 Your welcome and sense your just starting out here tell u what i'll keep my eyes out for typos and errors and let u know if i find any, good day and will wait with
for the next chapter 
7722224 Why, thank you! I'll have the next chapter up in a jiffy.
As far as I can see you don't need a editer.
Have a thumbs up.
Oooo, this is a nice little find. Certainly looking forward to more of it.
It's a good story! However, I have one criticism. In writing, it is customary to make a new paragraph every time the speaker changes. There are several instances where Rend and Tower's dialogue appears in the same paragraph, and this makes it very confusing to read.
For example, this:
The pony blushed. “Uh… sorry. Continue.” With a theoretical sigh, Rend continued. “As I was saying before some-pony interrupted me, we can sense emotions. The stronger they are, the better I can perceive them. And if those emotions are positive, we can feed off of them,” he explained. “Feelings of gratitude, friendship, and compassion are all delicious treats to a Changeling.”
should be this:
The pony blushed. “Uh… sorry. Continue.”
With a theoretical sigh, Rend continued. “As I was saying before some-pony interrupted me, we can sense emotions. The stronger they are, the better I can perceive them. And if those emotions are positive, we can feed off of them,” he explained. “Feelings of gratitude, friendship, and compassion are all delicious treats to a Changeling.”
And this:
“You can sense them?” Tower interrupted, raising an eyebrow. “You can’t see them?” Rend snorted, and rolled his eyes. Granted, no-pony could tell that he was rolling them since he didn’t really have pupils, but he still tried. “No, we can’t. Can I speak, or are you going to keep interrupting me?”
should be this:
“You can sense them?” Tower interrupted, raising an eyebrow. “You can’t see them?”
Rend snorted, and rolled his eyes. Granted, no-pony could tell that he was rolling them since he didn’t really have pupils, but he still tried. “No, we can’t. Can I speak, or are you going to keep interrupting me?”
Make sure you watch out for that. You should never have two subjects speaking in the same paragraph.
That aside, I'm enjoying this story, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it next. :)
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