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Greaaat, now give me more before I sent the brown's to bash your head on your keyboard until you do.
So next chapter we'll get to see them go and talk with the Overlord for the first time?
7774629 Look at blog. It give answer.
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I see what you did there
While the shifting perspectives give a greater overall picture, it takes time to work out who's perspective you're viewing, and this can get confusing. Perhaps you could name the subject when you switch to a new point of view?
This doesn't apply to Blueblood, who was for some reason the only one to get a third pony perspective where Apple Bloom, Twilight, and Luna got first pony perspectives.
7774677 so how do you thing would be a good mistress for the overlord?
Blueblood is going to be looking at some very large and scary numbers on his account sheet soon?
Will Pinkie be taking a selection of Exotic Cheeses, Butters and Breads with her, so she can grill those as well as Overlord, on her Wooden Toaster?
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7774708 so who do you think would be a good mistress for the overlord? (typo)
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Ah, but I possess the ability to look past typos and see what the author intended to say, thus I have already given you my answer.
Allow me to repeat myself:
7774631 I read it before posting don't worry, but still.
FINALLY
Well, well so the Overlord finally made a big enough splash to gather the attention of the Equestrian leaders. I find it funny that Princess Celestia had no clue what the heck is going on and that it is driving her nuts. I love when a know-it-all control freak loses their shit over something that they have literally no control over something
Yes please.
To the Author,
I had no Idea that you scrapped the original version until just now. I guess that when you removed the original, it broke the tracking updates that I had flagged and removed the story from my favorites without pointing to the new one. That being said, I now have a fun little project that I can take on, because I now have both the original, as well as version 2, saved as audio books in my iTunes. So I can literally listen to them both a few chapters at a time to compare them.
Personally I was really liking the original and was looking froward to seeing where the story was going. Im rather sad to find out that this will never happen. It is your story to do with as you like, but I thought you should know that you had several readers who liked and was following the original. I would like to point out that you did a great job of story telling in the original, and while I have absolutely no clue at all about the video game, I was never lost once as I listened to your story. You did a very good job of world building, in my humble opinion.
I have chapters 1-14 converted in iTunes and will most likely finish listening to it this evening. I am looking forward to seeing where Version 2 is going to take me.
The Monk
Real question do you Imprison,kill, or banish them bringing there weapon of destruction "elements of harmony". Most nations likely wouldn't tolerate uninvited diplolmats carry items of mind rewriting and ... Well I can't really think of a word fitting the effects of millennia long solitary without the ability to move or feel anything, permanently locked in your psyche.
Great chapter can't wait to see how the ponies will react to the Overlords Domain, and its citizens.
Ok its official,
I like Version 2 better. I personally prefer the original first chapter with the awakening and introduction to the overlords realm over the new one, but I much prefer the second version for everything else. All in all I like it, and feel that it is a vast improvement.
Keep up the great work.
However you do loose points for using the word "Chuckled" five times in this story.
To all Authors in general,
The use of the word "chuckled" on this website is vastly over used, seriously needs to be curtailed, and for the simple reason that it is beginning to damage new stories. When a writer primarily reads stories from a small pool of authors, you run the risk of a psychological phenomena known as creative inbreeding. You begin using words and phrases that you come across from the other authors. The stories begin sounding more and more alike. Certain words and phrases become vastly over used, like the word "chuckled" or the phrase, "He rubbed the back of his head nervously." There are stories out there from great Authors, where in 100 chapters into the story, the only word used for the act described is "chuckled". (there are alternatives. Giggled, tittered, grinned, snickered.) . There are also great stories that suffer from the fact that the main character nervously "Rubbs the back of his head." every ten sentences. This really does stifle and damages creativity and creates bad habits in writing. Good authors begin to forget other ways to describe subtle emotions. I ask the Authors here to seriously look for both this word and this phrase, as you read the stories on this site, I think you will be very surprised by what you find.
The Monk
So apparently the princesses didn't know about the sheeple villages but they apparently can get there by train? Does any of that make any sense?
7775600 2016 election?
7777594 ... Yeah let's just stuff a windego into office atleast a few months later we can blame him for everything turning to ice, while we ice cubes
7777107 They knew about the sheeple village, they just didn't do anything to help them when they were in trouble. That or they forgot about them and haven't remembered them until now. Either way, they fucked up.
please don't kill chryissy I'll be a very sad brony
AND IF YOU DO PLAN ON KILLING HER THEN FACE THE WRATH OF 25 MILLION PINKIE PIES!!
7782148 Bring it.
7783373 and did i mention that i would also send 5 billions molestias and molunas each ;)
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7786080 then don't kill chrysalis or i'll send them after you
7786141 Perhaps you misunderstood that meme, but I must say you really are incentivizing me to kill Chrysalis... do you not like her or something?
7786659 no i like her i just don't want a strategic asset to be destroyed e.e
and besides she only did the things she did cause her hive was starving to death
Due to the "rewrite" this story was removed from all of my "bookshelves".
Thankfully I was able to find this story through one of your other stories.
Also, I am very sad to have caught up, and I can't wait for more chapters.
The Overlord series fits so well with Equestria when you think about it.
You have "evil" creatures like changelings, diamond dogs, etc. that can be used by an evil overlord to take over ze world.
Strange, there's an update but no new chapter.
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I think the Author accidentally published the chapter before it was ready. So it was unpublished later, but notifications had alredy went out so were looking for a chapter that doesnt exists. My Email litst it as chapter 15 but I dont have access to it.
I demand more
7811390 You are correct, damn publish button being right next to the edit button, sorry if it rustled your jimmy's.
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Lol not a problem for me, I just took it as a sign that you were working on it. I am happy to see that the Lazyitis is being battled =P
This overlord needs the domination power from overlord 2 that way he can just turn rebels and enemies into obedient loving slaves
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except he HATES slaves. Did you forget or something when he mentioned it, or heck, he killed a diamond dog for having sheeple slaves.
I see what you did there XD
Exotic butters fnaf sister location
Exotic Butters!
Exotic cheeses and exotic butters in one chapter! DOUBLE REFERENCE!
Kinda dislike the motion that everything unknown is a potencial treat that needs to be dealt with. By befriend or friendship laser it to the face...
Ponys start to look like the most dangerous of all races...
At least the mane six didnt pull a 'Zecora incident' on the red named Sparky.
Great chapter.
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That's there general way of thinking all the time with any non-pony species. To them, anything that isn't a pony or controlled by them is unnatural. Just look at how they first talk about the Everfree in the episode with Zecora.
They are.
Probably cause they didn't get a chance to.
Yes it is, but the author could put down who's POV the story switches to, to make it a little easier.