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This corruption thing should be getting interesting now.
Oh shit.
Corruption?, sadly it's been a while and I mostly played the second one.
7713128
I agree
7713128 *has.
Your welcome!
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Are you going to have the song from the first story? If not can you link them the only one I can remember the name of is "down down down in goblin town".
7717584 I will probably have it in, but here is the link anyway.
7717615 thanks
I think I'm stopping here. For the positive, I'll say that the actual writing in this is as good as in the last one, possibly even improved a bit. In terms of plot and characterization, though? It's a massive, massive step down.
In spite of any weaknesses the other story may have had, it was lengths, lengths more original than this. The main character had, from the beginning, an actual motivation - the characterization of Gnarl as treasonous and planning assassination not only gave a solid initial plot arc altogether, it gave the character a good reason to obtain and solidify his power. He had a reason to want to become stronger, fight and have tighter control over his minions: to keep them away from Gnarl and protect his own life. It's basic, but at least it was there.
This one? This one literally has no motivation at all. He is dropped in this world and then he decides to start conquering shit. Why? Because. He has no reason, he just does it. There is no plot, no characterization beyond "this dude is kind of an evil psychopathic asshole who does stuff" and I can't see this going anywhere at all.
You should have stuck with the old version.
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I've never read the older version, and I find myself agreeing with you.
Mirth
Hm would it be possible to have the old one somewhere?
Mirth
Gnarl seem to be satisfied. The Overload is competent and he seem to be evil enough ( or smooth enough in wording things toward Gnarl ) so hes Minion elder is content
Guess the Changeling conversion is about to start?
Wonder if hes going for one or more Bugwaifus
Brown and Green are back. Now the fun can start
Corruption... Is IT controlling him ?
Or is he controlling IT ?
We shall see...
Thinking like a politician? How evil!