Aeon, an orphan suffering from the same nightmare forces Princess Luna fell to all those years ago, finds himself a mother and teacher in Princess Luna herself.
I'm writing for self improvement, so feel free to leave a comment. 
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I admit it is a very werid start, and I wasn' exactly sure if it would be that typicall "something bad has to happen" adoption story, but I guess till now it was okay. I mean at least it wasn't exactly a foalnapping.
Don't tell me this is the same scene like last time only with Luna now. Sometimes it can be good, but after that long time I would have prefered to get something new than the same scene in a different POV.
I don't mean you can't do it, but I totally hate Celestia if she is acting like this. I mean if she is telling Luna who she can love or which child she can have because it wouldn't "look" good.
so far it is not bad, it feels like this is one of your first stories right?, otherwise I would have to look at it a bit different I guess.
Anyway if I don't think about what I like the most, of what I would hope to see already, then it is really not bad.
7725637 Thanks for saying it isn't too bad. I worked pretty hard on it, and I know I'm not the best writer. It is one of my first stories as you suspected. I'll also try not to repeat scenes in the future very often. Thanks!