Winter Blade is a rare changeling that is not part of the hive mind. being a changeling he doesn't have a specific talent and goes many places working as a mercenary for different ponies. he is paranoid, hates ponies,and is an amazing fighter. this story follows him on his adventures as a traveling mercenary.
major credit to Inukshuk for editing and helping a ton!
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Not a bad start. I like the idea of the story, about a changeling being on his own. I will admit I am a bit... skeptical about firearms having been invented in Equestria (Not counting Pinkie's party canon. I don't even want to think of how she could have possibly came up with it.) But I'm not fully shooting the idea down.
As for two ways I can see to make this better, first go through and capitalize all the I's. Secondly, it might not hurt to add some space between the paragraphs. Finally, maybe add a little more dialect to the story.
Keep up the work and hopefully someone can help you with the editing soon.
7290724 Hah! Pinkie is kid friendly Deadpool.
hu not bad keep it up
7502071 thanks! ill try! i don't have a schedule for chapter releases and with school starting i will not be able to realease nearly as much content, but i'll try.
not bad
7559058 thanks! I appreciate it.
Why not just cancel this story?
7930985 I dunno. I guess I hope that I can finish it at some point. I honestly don't know. I plan on making other stories and I don't just want to cancel a story and leave it sitting there Everytime I get bored. But meh.