Fires Ablaze is tired of being alone, with no one in her life. Fires ablaze is shy at first, but the other pony shapes her to be who she really wants to be. Throughout the story she finds herself in situations no ponys should go through. Love, lust and a little blood.
I KNOW IT SUCKS! IM GETTING A EDITOR NOW! SO ENOUGH HATE MESSAGES!
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Just Say No To Love - Tony Iommi Feat. Peter Steele
786987 I SAW YOU ON UNION JACKS FIC! Anyways, why would anyone vote this down? Sure, bit of spelling errors, but then again, nobody's perfect
keep up the good work!
shut up. spellings the reason i failed humanities, ? okay xD geez
wow guys . Downrate much. its my first fic...
787018 It's your first fic, no need to get sad about it
. Just keep trying, I'll edit this chapter and send it back to you. It's a good story, a great one actually. It shows potential, but remember, when it comes to fics, I just can't be as nice as I usually am. There aren't a ton of mistakes, you did a pretty good job for your first fic 
I'm with Rampage on this one. It's your first fic, don't be too hard on yourself. I can't say anything about it though, since I don't write fics
, but with a little practice, you'll get this off the ground in no time!
erg.
787139 I got a bit down when The Only Tears got thrashed hard by some more experienced writers, and other people too. There will always be people who like your fic though, so continue writing, for them! (I happen to be one of the people who love this fic)
you only like it just because your in it...
787181 No Dakota, I like it because you're a good writer. Take me completely out of the picture, and I'd still be fine with it.
It's great, please don't stop writing
787213
we'll see...
787219 Read my message, follow my advice. I'm editing this chapter now, it may be that the people disliking are total grammar nazis
, so don't get so down!
KEEP ON PUSHING FORWARD!
merp.
787181 Well I like it. It has flaws but nothing a good Editor can take care of. I can't wait to see how this goes.
meeeeeeh...
787247 I'm editing this first chapter as we speak
, so we got that covered
Well, there are problems, but this fic has potential. You need to slow down, discribe the stuff around you, right now it feels rushed. Also, Dash is VERY ooc. Even drunk she wouldn't act like pinkie. But like I said, this fic has potential, so I'm gonna favorite it to see how it goes.
787348 subtles fixing it...
787254
LEMME EDIT IT!
787348 The OOC is something I won't be able to help with. I SUCK at putting the Mane Six in character
787416 FINE. you can edit my next.
787427YAY, You're cool!
aha thnx xD
787438 GOD DAMMIT PARKER! I'M THE FUCKING EDITOR! JK BRAH
787491 I see you've made friends with MY editor, and I'm HIS editor
787508>>787570
Hmm, lol
787570 love you,
I like this, keep up the good work.
man nice story i dont pay attention to spelling mistakes or puncuation error's if we all do this it makes all story's 20% cooler
Putting an author's note at the very start with an emoticon is REALLY distracting. And it kills any intro you might make.
Besides a few spelling and grammar mistakes
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787839 you touch her, you die
in the tournament, of course
789865 I FOUND YOU AGAIN
790259 Oh SHUT UP, I was just saying what a godo job she was doing oh, and to kill me, YOU''VE GOT TO CATCH ME *Runs ten rings around you and runs off to The Everfree Forest for some fun*
you guys.... are dorks.
just saying(:
790607 Kinda, yeah, since I just realized a few days ago his name is a combination of Shadow and Sonic
790360 Ten rings...I see what you did there
790756 Lol, I didn't even me to do that pun then as well lol.
790767 You say you know how to fight? Give me a second....
watch dat ^_^
790775 Seeing as how I can warp around the place, and I'm not just a pegasus.
790782 Dude, all I'm saying is I actually fight. It's the best fun to be had
go to boxing, come home bruised and blood? AMAZING
790808 Nah, I would do Boxing not my thing.
790812 My oc gets it from me^_^
790820 Which bit, the wanting payback or the way he fights.
Not bad at all. Only thing is you put it like Dash was answering the phone. But that's the only thing I saw. And don't worry. You're probably a better author than me just by getting this chapter over a thousand words... Soooooooo tracked. And good luck!
this is cool. I hardly ever see a female OC on here. It feels just a tad rushed but that might just be me. I can't wait to see where this goes.
853242 its going to go awkward places
787438 BITCH NO I'M EDITING
Wait if this turns into a clopfic,
Sorry editors.!
This is a Clopfic (:
So rampage is editing because ...
I have a secret. (:
I'm like rampage, I have two ponies. (:
Fire ablaze and moonlight(:
Don't ask, kk?(:
I took it upon myself to read your first story. The only things that could have been pointed out was the grammatical errors, which is nothing to worry about because everyone makes them, even the most popular writers. Also, there was Rainbow's character, which you kind of described, and I mistook her for being Pinkie Pie. Otherwise, this is a really good start for a first story, I will like it, and watch you to see where all this is going. Looking at the comments, it seems the lot of you have trouble with character descriptions. If you need some advice in that field, just let me know. I am not looking to be an editor for you because I think you have plenty, but I don't mind giving you advice on character description. I kind of took a lot my time studying, and roleplaying, as all of the mane characters.
Anyways, if you need help with that, give me a text on my profile page, and keep up the good work! Don't worry about the down rates, most of them are just people that want to either infuse a riot or hurt the writer enough to get them to stop writing.
From hell, to you, and back again,
Soto Konoha
1097789 Look, look, look;
Yes, your advice is going to help her...but look at you OC. It makes me want to cry
, a red and black alicorn? Dude, dude, dude....c'mon. I can see you're smarter than that. Your response to her story was great, you're smart as hell, I can see. You know what you're talking about. Seriously though, for the love of Luna...