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The Musings of Goodwin Alligator Mississippiensis (AKA Gummy the alligator)

A series of short one-shots compiling some of the philosophical monologues of Gummy the alligator. Meant to move hearts, provoke deep thinking and develope Gummy's character as a whole. Enjoy!

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Original Usermane #1 · Apr 18th, 2016 · · · What makes greatness? ·

Hi, OriDragon! I really love the idea behind this--I wish they'd give little glimpses of Gummy's thoughts in the show more often, now that we know he's so philosophical. As far as constructive advice goes (I wouldn't call it criticism when this is your first fic on the site), I'd suggest starting a new paragraph anytime the speaker changes. For example,

"Tell you what, I'll bring Dinky over, eat a muffin, wish Applejack a happy birthday and then look for a new job. Sound good?"

should really be in a different paragraph than

Pinkie pie's mane puffs up again as she jumps with joy. "Absolutely!" She cheers, going in for another hug, "a little party is better than no party! Ditzy, you're the greatest."

Beyond that and some spacing issues, though, this was a really good start! Keep it up!