Sunday Night will be up very soon!

And that scene, so hot!

Will commence read.

On Christmas!? well THANK YOU VERY MUCH!

If anyone spots any errors please feel free to point them out.

I have to stop reading this now since I am at work... Can't wait to get home.

Path, you are the man when it comes to Sparity, both the SFW and NSFW stories.... if you already know, I have faved all of your stories that you have updated.

Can't wait to see what you have planned for Christmas!!! As you can tell, everything is going out flawlessly!!!

1851793 This late, damn that sucks man.

“Let’s just call it my little secret, for now. This of course means I don’t want you bargaining in there, understood?”

I think you mean 'barging.'

A familiar purple device and its remote floated over and into Spike’s hands. “My little… notifier, needs to be placed.”

Missed a word there.

I swear I saw maybe one or two more errors and it was all after the clop but I really don't want to go digging back around again just to find them.

It's nice to see that your writing has gotten better by leaps and bounds. Best chapter yet, and not just because of the hot and heavy scene containing. Keep it up!

Wow. I never thought I'd see this story update.

1851817 Yup I work third shift. I won't get off until 5 am. In more ways than one.

1851830 I argued with myself back and forth on that first one, should of googled it, damn it. Good catches, and thanks. Always nice to see I'm improving.

Best. Christmas Present. EVER!!!!

Nice! Very nice indeed!

Noticed two mistakes, but somebody else already mentioned the other one.

No inch of Rarity’s body was left untaken care of as his hand slid across her marehood and asshole with more force than was really necessary, but was extremely welcomed by the white uniron who now felt like she was melting under his touch.

Unicorn, methinks.

Also, first chapter I read on Christmas Day. Correction.

1851928 ... What the fuck is uniron that neither word or google spell check caught it?

I'll put it this way, "You ain't seen nothing, yet."

by the white uniron who

Unicorn.

EDIT: whoops, someone already found it

Amazing Christmas gift man!

Oh, and I was hoping to find a cute Rarity maid wrapped up under the christmas tree. Still, she's where she belongs :)

I love this story, so much dawww with the right amount of kink.

Merry Christmas

You are awesome. I just... I have no words.

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>attend to other maters
>Spike slowly kissed her his way down her neck,
>“Good, because from now until the end of time, your mine.”

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1852512 Good catches.

Thank you Santa!

1852584 Arby is the catcher. He's okay with this. ('°_°)

I-m becoming addict to this whole fic. You can-t stop improving yourself, can you?
i noticed few issues and i was reading from my cellphone so couldnt take note and tell you, but when i read it againfrom my computer next time i-ll send you what i think were merely miss typing mistakes.
cant wait for other chapter : D
and for Christmas as you promissed

Shower scenes are always best sex scenes.

His minded registered the prior anomaly as a smell

Should be "mind" I assume.
Great fic by the way.

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indeed! : D

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I needed to do something for this fic, so I did ^^
hope you like!
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source> http://pia-sama.deviantart.com/art/Sparity-Here-have-a-bite-Master-344834019

Shower scenes are the best scenes! Wow, that was nicely done.

1855829
Wow, Pia! You're really good. How long did it even take you make that?

1856049
few days, but not as i was 24 hours working, i think this took me at 8 hours maybe? I started working on it few weeks ago, though. glad you liked, darlinh

Huzzah!

Of course the first chapter I don't edit is riddled with errors... nice going, Cloud. Though its not like I can without my laptop right now. Oh well, I'll get to it eventually. Great chapter, by the way.

1859367 Yes, well, I'll tell you something interesting later, once I get my laptop not being a bitch again.

Trying...to...breathe...having...trouble...
Looking forward to how this continues.

1861090 But of course, my good random person on the internet.

Well that chapter was even hot, and that answers my question from my last comment, haha.

Now what does Spike plan on make? The only thing that comes to mind is some sexy lingerie.

Reading this whole story again and paying closer attention...I'm thinking he wants to make her a dress of some sort. Of course, him being a dragon and all, gems might equal something edible...

Best present ever

Ok, where did you get the whole 2 Member thing? Is that your fetish or is that a reptile thing?

1904037 Reptile thing.

I hope Spike uses that vibrator in public or when there's someone else in the room.
Or even better, Spike doesn't know of the unexpected company and keeps turning it higher untio Rarity comes running or she climaxes in front of the guest, adding more delicious shame

1905745 ... I appear to be becoming mildly predictable, but not quite.

1905781
Just similar tastes my friend, but not quite

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Also, having reread all four chapters now...I just realised they haven't been using any sort of protection all weekend. Somehow I'm picturing this story ending with undeniable proof positive that dragons and ponies are...compatible species.

Must be some kind of… mind reader

Spike’s words. Every one of them was true,

My god people! She can read minds!

Sunday morning, the morning after Rarity got her world ROCKED by Spike… I wonder how she’ll take her tasks… and if she’ll be capable of sitting down.

… “as she her mind” – Remove ‘she’.
… “as the fluffy, deliciousness” – ‘deliciousness’ isn’t an adjective, so the comma is misplaced, unless you change ‘deliciousness’ to ‘delicious quality’.
… “skipped over Sweetie Bell” – ‘Bell’ should be ‘Belle’.
… “She seemed, happier.” – Remove the comma.
… “as something slipped from his mouth.” – You should really clarify that when you say ‘something’, you mean his aforementioned statement, and not, say, a piece of pancake.
… “moved his tooth brush” – ‘tooth’ and ‘brush’ can be one word: ‘toothbrush’.
… “a tube of expensive looking” – Place a hyphen between ‘expensive’ and ‘looking’.
… “looking vanilla flavored tooth” – Place a hyphen between ‘vanilla’ and ‘flavored’.
… “flavored tooth paste,” – ‘tooth’ and ‘paste’ should be one word: ‘toothpaste’.
… “a tease aren’t they.”” – I believe that period should be a question mark.
… “handed a bar soap” – Change ‘bar soap’ to one of two things, either ‘bar of soap’, or ‘soap bar’.
… “at a new found more natural” ‘new’ and ‘found’ should be one word: ‘newfound’. Also, place a comma after ‘newfound’.
… “His kneaded her back” – ‘His’ should be ‘He’.
… “with the palm of hand earning” – Place ‘his’ between ‘of’ and ‘hand’.
… “as tried not to scream” – ‘she’ should be between ‘as’ and ‘tried’.
… “left untaken care of” – Consider changing this quoted section to ‘neglected’.
… “the ever quickening pace” – Place a hyphen between ‘ever’ and ‘quickening’.
… “proving all the agreement he needed” – ‘proving’ should be ‘providing’.
… “Rarity self-respect” – ‘Rarity’ should be ‘Rarity’s’.
… “he saw it all, her” – Replace the comma with a colon.
… “shoot out of her” – ‘shoot’ should be ‘shot’.

Okay, the pacing of this chapter was very smooth in contrast to other chapters. Alterations in Spike’s character were explained, while Rarity’s character seemed to be highly ‘set’ as the chapter went on: Kinky as all hell and loving every minute of it.

Spike held a solid role of being both warm at times, and yet dominating as well. In earlier chapters this had bothered me, but here it was explained as him knowing more about what Rarity seems to be enjoying, and wanting to give her as much pleasure as she can handle. He has his “dragon greed”, and she seems to feed it further, though not recklessly in her actions. I mean, it’s not like she walks around completely naked, after all… at least not yet.

Breakfast and a shower? Pretty clean morning with a rather interesting, dirty way to end it. That said, as mentioned previously, you seem more adept to describing how Rarity’s enjoying it than how Spike seems to enjoy having sex with Rarity. It’s somewhat trivial, but just something I kind’ve noticed…

Time to keep this ball rollin'!

2974062 Proving is actually proving. Fixed the rest.

Yeah, that'll happen when things start to stabilize. Seems you're putting the pieces together nicely. The question is: what changed? The answer: well, I think you can figure that out. So now, Spike is starting to really fuse his warm nature, with his instinctual draconian dominance. Told you it would all come together... and yet, we're only placing the border pieces of the puzzle here.

That's probably a me thing. I know how guys and doms feel, being one, so I put more actual work into Rarity an really try to step into her because that's not a natural position for me, whereas Spike's comes more... naturally. That being said, Spike and Rarity, their roles, and their feelings, two halves of the same coin. Something that will be seen the deeper you dive, if I did as well as I seem to think I did.

1. Mega boner
2.not sure if want
3.Clopclop
4.*Nosebleed*

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I'm confused, what part of rarity is the vibrator in?