When a young man finds himself trapped in the land of equestria under some extreme circumstances, he must find his way back to earth, that is if he even wants to return. Can he live in a world so different from his own? What will he find out about himself in this magical land?
This I my first fan fic, so I would really like any constructive criticism. Also, I apologize in advance for grammar errors. The majority of this story was written on my iPod, and we all know how spell check is! Thank You!
Chapters (5)
Not bad. Pretty standard so far, but still very servicable. I'll see where the other chapters go.
<Admiral Ackbar jumps out from bushes> Its a Trap! I think we need to rename Discord Palpatine.
Not bad pretty basic but hey perfectly good though. As far as your grammers concerned I would read through it a second time you catch all the errors that way since there odvious.